Now I'm getting curious now. The spell once more had escaped and taken a life of it's own, so to speak. Seems like any mare is at risk of the spell's hold untill it's stopped...
I will say... this came out of left field for me, and I normally pride myself for seeing such twists cumming but you sir some how bypassed all my radars. Props to you.
Yes, go to her, AJ! And Twi! Add RD to your harem Do it! :D
By the way, you really should get someone to preread. There's quite a few spelling mistakes in the chapters that I noticed and would be a quick fix ;P (i could possibly do it! mainly spelling and such though :D)
Needs more Sweetie Belle. And more Twilight boner. The little side bits are nice and all (especially last chapter's [or the one before that's? idr] Cheerilee/AB/Prissy Pony), but it definitely needs more Twi and Sweetie Belle.
1437545 I disagree with this though. Definitely does not need Dash. She is used way too often. It's become something of a 'Meh' subject. Now, popping Rarity into the mix with her sister? I could go for that, too.
1437664 Are you kidding? It needs all of the mane six! Twilight said herself that her friends were the "perfect mares". Applejack's already there, and she said she could maybe turn Rarity around if she showed her... the rest are just to follow :D
With Dash introduced, it's a matter of time anyway. Just remains to be seen by WHO.
1437815 Just cause Twilight said it doesn't make it true. Dash is far from best pony and, again, used way too often in every shipfic known to man. Scootaloo is nice though.
Your story is excellent, I dunno why it hasn't gotten more attention. You do have some spelling issues here and there, but overall, the plot, the clop, it's all very good. I would suggest you spend less time jumping around from pony to pony, and focus more on a single mare, or two mares, per chapter. Some of the narration segments are very short, and it does a disservice to them and to their place in the story to not spend more time with them.
I was laughing maniacally when I realized you had just set up Pregnant Futa Incest with the Spa sisters. You know no shame and it's hilarious. What's even better is that despite this act being possibly the most weird, it ended up being the sweetest also as far as the warm fuzzies go. This chapter was just one twist after another. Well played author, well played~
My one criticism was that much of the descriptions from Twilight leaving the farm till it went to the spa sisters seemed overly drawn out and unnecessary. For the first time I found myself skimming. I had to keep stopping myself and go back and read it all.
That blessing one kind of a blind bitch. Can´t even recognize the difference between a purple unicorn and two differnt colored earth ponies. A really good chapter. Especially the AJ/Twi and Big Mac/Twi parts were awesome!!!
The Aloe fucking Lotus part was okay but i guess it felt less intense cause we knew from Cheerliee that this curse is just running amok cause he can´t find its original owner. Given that the spell also makes the victim falls for the possessed pony, i do wonder if Lotus would become "addicted/interested" in Twi and her dick like Aloe already is. Could make an interesting visit if both stand before Twi´s door and want in to "talk with her". Ya know, cause best threesome is still the twinsxSomepony else. XDDD
I´m a bit surprised though. Twi had her Unicorn powers and even she had her limits when trying to force herself on Rarity (can´t wait for THAT story part to get solved), Cheerlie had her authority and strength as an adult pony when she forced herself on her two students but Aloe is pregnant which shouldn´t make her stronger but as described a bit weaker. Sure she had the element of surprise but Lotus should have still got more strength to handle Aloe easily. I had liked to see that. Aloe struggling crying under Lotus, trying to rape her while her tiwn sister holds her down, shocked, surprised and also completley weirded out that her sister suddenly having a penis! o.o And then the spell said, fuck this i´m outta here, that was a fail and we get to see how the penis disappears (does it shrink in or disolve in smoke which starts to fly away?) and then Aloe returns to normal and realizes she has to tell Lotus what exactly had happend to her.
Well, maybe we´ll get to see something like that soon. I hope though that Twi will try to search for the blessing/curse thingie, after all she´s like the most damn powerful Unicorn on Equestria. She should know a spell or two to find a rape amok running spell and a way to contain it (and fail phenomenal about the latter part! Which gives her thoughts from the beginning new unknown strength Twi has to battle down).
So in summary: The plot part was just amazing, 10/10. Full marks, lots of feelings, POVs, explanations, reasons shown and new plotlines inserted. Perfect. The clop part was so-so, 5/10 maybe 6/10 for wincest. Guess for one cause we had that alot, for two Lotus became awfully quick content with the thought of having her sister´s foal in her (which is a bit weird given Diamond Tiara´s part who really didnt liked it and even after waking up called for help. Sure AB has the hots for her teacher now, but that didn´t came just like that, it got "earned" with Cheerliee´s attention and foreplay, etc.), three we readers knew already this was just a "quickie".
With Cheerlie/Aloe it´s a one-time thingie with consequences which are outside of our fields of views, we can only guess what will exactly happen to them. Twilight is the real deal though, the main meal so to say. Her curse still stands (pun intended), is visible and still changing her a bit for bit. Which she takes good with accepting the part of her being a colt/stallion now, a very hormon filled colt/stallion that is. Cheerlie/Aloe never had those thoughts or those worries or those doubts like Twi had when she tried to overcome her curse during the day to give in the night and lastly become one with it. They get it, they shocked, they touch it, OVER. Basically they lose in minutes for which Twi at least needed hours. Like resisting AJ when she was in he bedroom, that did felt like a real hard task for Twi to do at that moment. One she latter didn´t had an ounce of regret doing anyway, the whole guilt stuff came after the blessing was taken out of her leaving her with her 5th leg and blue balls.
I´m interested how you want to include RD in the whole deal with her plot part with that scroll as well as how you wanna include AJ/SB in one chapter together like i dunno they meet and get to talk about Twi and her coming foals and feelings all regarding this mess (i really hope they won´t fuck each other.....). Pinkie and Shy weren´t shown yet, just spoken off but given how Twi had her thoughts about them being "her perfect mares" i guess we´ll see them sooner or later, unknowingly teasing sane Twi with their cuteness/sexiness as well as making "blessed" Twi getting all hard and ready. ^^
Oh, and i saw you were featured for a short while. Congrats again for getting such a complicated story done so well that people like to read it despite it terrible theme.
Hmmm, if what I've gleaned from the story thus far is true, Luna's blessing has evolved, and now the mares impregnated by Twilight are growing members for which to apply to others. I can totally see some Sweetie x Rarity in the future, or maybe that Rarity is actually Scootaloo?
Just a few typos I found.
The pain Twilight was feeling was plane for him to see.
Homonym confusion: You meant plain.
but the way that Aloe almost seemed to glow at time,
Not certain, but you probably mean at times.
feeling her own nippled pressing to her sister's swollen ones
1437899 I have a better idea! instead of Dash getting her hooves on Scoots, it should be the other way around. Why? Just for the lulz. Scoots practically worships her anyway, the next logical step is obviously to get her pregnant so that she'll have a little piece od Scoots with her wherever she goes . Or Dash could be a red herring. Keep hinting that something bad is gonna happen to her and then never do anything to her at all
And now I REALLY want the next chapter....why isn't it out already? Cheerilee has been caught, the curse is running rampant, Aloe has told Lotus who got her knocked up, and with a bit of luck, Twilight is gonna get to score with AJ again.....and Sweetie Belle....that too. She should totally break out of the boutique one night and head over to Twilight's library
If that "Blessing" keeps going around temporally possesing every mare Twilight is actually close, incluiding the ones she had "claimed" as hers until it returns back to Twilight's body, then Why do I have the feeling that there's going to be some Futashy on Rainbow Dash and Pinkie Pie action soon?...
Shameless Clopfic my ass! This is a really good story, where the clop parts are actually integral to the storytelling. I never thought it'd happen, but I'm gonna have to thumb-up a clopfic... Keep up the great work.
1438644 With Aloe and Lotus, it was less rape and more 'Surprise! I'm gonna sex you now!'. And Lotus didn't really have a problem with this once she thought about it (also, why no spa pony emotes!)
Aww, not a main part with rainbow? This makes me sad.
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Though I think i'd love you forever if you made Dash Applejack's victim if it happened to Aloe, it could easily happen to Applejack, and who better than her physical rival~
You have not "claimed another" anything, I already read a random clopfic here and there. Just as I've also read the random gorefic. Yours is NOT just shameless clop, it is story driven by clop, which is further driven by story. Go read 'The Goddess Within' for comparison; Then try to say yours doesn't actually have a story, with characters, and both kinds of plot!
Got a question though. It´s about the blessing and the dicks, meaning Twi´s still existing one and the two who had disappeared after being 'used'.
Given that the blessuing was made to ensure Twi´s family, their special Unicorn genes that is, won´t die out Luna had given that blessing to one of Twi´s ancestors, right? Meaning each time Twi comes buckets into a mare, she´s sure to get pregnant due the magical super fertile and magical super many seeds of Twi´s new gadget, correct?
However: Does that mean that each time somepony else who got possesed with Twi´s blessing, but gets a temporary penis instead, will come buckets into a mare or two foals, that UNLIKE with the Twi rapes, those rapes are all void/useless as those mares were not Twilight/didn´t had her genes/weren´t even Unicorns to begin with. In other words, they can rape others/have sex with mares for one/two/three times in a couple hours but unlike with Twilight there will be no bums in the oven after the deeds done though it will have the same love/longing/motherhood effect like with Twi.
Cause that would give a new and interesting fact for that blessing. It can take over other ponies and let off steam/semen, but those semen were not the ones he was created for as the blessing exist to ensure the survival of Twi´s super magical genes. In other words Applebloom, Diamond Tiara and Lotus are not pregnant if we go by this logic of Luna´s blessing when she had enchanted Twi´s ancestor with it. However they got the same love/longing/motherhood effect BUT they didn´t got any foals from that rape/sex time.
It´d be interesting cause that would mean we would have a motherly SB and a motherly AB but only one of them is preggers while the other wonders why her stomach isn´t growing and is giving herself the faults for it or is even jealous of SB. It could also mean that Aloe will see that she can´t grant Lotus child wish who now years for a own foal too but the semen of Aloe and Cheerliee were infertile due not having Twi´s gene´s which the spell is supposed to spread. That way it would also lessen the burden on Cheerliee´s crime a bit while also giving her some horrible realization that she STILL has no foals of her own even after that! That way there would also be room for jealousy of Cheerliee´s side towards Twi while Lotus would try the other way to ease her child yearning with getting Twi´s seeds in her womb.
^Now those stuff would be something for a chapter or two~
Am i right about that spell part giving Luna´s explanation a couple times ago or not?
Hey! I'll have you know that the mighty Duck is my spirit animal. It has some kind of weird psychology that deals with the death of my grandmother or something.
But as for the incest mutants, I'm speaking from the genetic biodiversity aspect. Incest allows for a high chance of detrimental health problems to crop up in offspring due to the fact that siblings are more likely to carry the same recessive genes of diseases and psychological ailments from their parents.
Chimera resulting from cross species breeding support the process of biodiversity better than anything, really.
1439845 Exactly, is the clop part of it well written? sure. But does it have an engaging story? Does anyone actually care about the ending? nope! Your story makes people care about what's gonna happen, we actually LOOK FORWARD to the developments as well as the clop. You made a good story and should be proud! Just trying to say, it's not shameless if it's actually a quality story. I know it's kinda hard to see, what with the foalcon and the rape...
Wincest!
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Oh god darn it!
Gonna have to read this tomorrow. I've already been up for over 24 hours.
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I R Evil! dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Twilight_crazy.png
My boner is confused.
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From reading this story?dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_TwilightWut.png
It should be. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_dealwithit.png
Incest is sexy when its lesbians!
.......sexiest chapter so far. Easily.
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It always pleases me when I see that pic in my story's comments
Hm... So, the 'blessing' has now targeted two earth ponies. Wonder who's next on the list...
Berry Punch, perhaps?
And what the frilly heck is Rainbow Dash up to?
... can Twilight's friends put a stop to her before she goes down in history as Ponyville's most infamous sex offender?
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"Twilight... goes down in history... Ponyville's most famous sex offender."
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"Twilight... sex offender."
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A shameless clopfic intended to cross lines several times. Not intended for those with a shred of decency left in them.
Oh. Okay, then. Never thought I'd be the odd man out, this time!
I get the feeling that the curse is enjoying its job just a little too much right now.
A thought occurs. Rarity is going to get hers soon isn't she?
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761360 You pic adds so much lulz to your comment.
Sister-sister love? Oh boy, here we go!
Maybe some Stootaloo and RD action in the future? That would be wicked
1437244 Even if one has a bit something extra.
Now I'm getting curious now. The spell once more had escaped and taken a life of it's own, so to speak. Seems like any mare is at risk of the spell's hold untill it's stopped...
LUUUUUNAAAAA! YOU HAVE SOME 'SPLAININ TO DO!
I will say... this came out of left field for me, and I normally pride myself for seeing such twists cumming but you sir some how bypassed all my radars. Props to you.
You sir are most indefinably Slaneesh incarnate. Glory to Chaos!
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Unfortunately the author removed his account and stories. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/sillyfilly_Twilight_Sparkle.png
It was a sad day for all ponydom
Yes, go to her, AJ! And Twi! Add RD to your harem Do it! :D
By the way, you really should get someone to preread. There's quite a few spelling mistakes in the chapters that I noticed and would be a quick fix ;P (i could possibly do it! mainly spelling and such though :D)
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Ask me again when I'm in less of a coma dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Twilight_crazy.png
Needs more Sweetie Belle. And more Twilight boner. The little side bits are nice and all (especially last chapter's [or the one before that's? idr] Cheerilee/AB/Prissy Pony), but it definitely needs more Twi and Sweetie Belle.
1437545 I disagree with this though. Definitely does not need Dash. She is used way too often. It's become something of a 'Meh' subject. Now, popping Rarity into the mix with her sister? I could go for that, too.
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Then you should love what I have planned for the next chapter
Analjack and Sweetie-bation always improve a story
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Keep reading then
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Are you kidding? It needs all of the mane six! Twilight said herself that her friends were the "perfect mares". Applejack's already there, and she said she could maybe turn Rarity around if she showed her... the rest are just to follow :D
With Dash introduced, it's a matter of time anyway. Just remains to be seen by WHO.
1437815 Just cause Twilight said it doesn't make it true. Dash is far from best pony and, again, used way too often in every shipfic known to man. Scootaloo is nice though.
1437755 Awwww, Sweetiebation isn't any fun either. She needs some Twi lovin'
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True, scoots would be interesting too although to make it great it would have to be *by* Dash herself
At this point though we could pretty much add every named mare to the list. Ponyville, Rape Capital of Equestria!
...until Celestia gets a dose, and then no one in canterlot is safe!
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I just use the FimFiction Enhancements add-on by iloveportalzor which can be found here. unfortunately it only has 2 Discord emotes and no Nightmare ones, though you might be able to pester portalzor into adding some in a future update to the script.//dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Luna_apple.png //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Twilight_future.png //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Derpy_dealwithit.png
I was wondering how she was going to have a baby with a penis in the way
More Twilight... please.
Your story is excellent, I dunno why it hasn't gotten more attention. You do have some spelling issues here and there, but overall, the plot, the clop, it's all very good. I would suggest you spend less time jumping around from pony to pony, and focus more on a single mare, or two mares, per chapter. Some of the narration segments are very short, and it does a disservice to them and to their place in the story to not spend more time with them.
Thumbs up and a track from me!
Wtf did i just read and why am i enjoying this?
This is the most depraved, messed up, sticky, unholy futariffic thing i saw.... keep up the good work.
Edit:
This is the first clopfic ever i thumbed up, you've done bad(in a good way) and you should feel good.
I was laughing maniacally when I realized you had just set up Pregnant Futa Incest with the Spa sisters. You know no shame and it's hilarious. What's even better is that despite this act being possibly the most weird, it ended up being the sweetest also as far as the warm fuzzies go. This chapter was just one twist after another. Well played author, well played~
My one criticism was that much of the descriptions from Twilight leaving the farm till it went to the spa sisters seemed overly drawn out and unnecessary. For the first time I found myself skimming. I had to keep stopping myself and go back and read it all.
That blessing one kind of a blind bitch. Can´t even recognize the difference between a purple unicorn and two differnt colored earth ponies.
A really good chapter. Especially the AJ/Twi and Big Mac/Twi parts were awesome!!!
The Aloe fucking Lotus part was okay but i guess it felt less intense cause we knew from Cheerliee that this curse is just running amok cause he can´t find its original owner.
Given that the spell also makes the victim falls for the possessed pony, i do wonder if Lotus would become "addicted/interested" in Twi and her dick like Aloe already is. Could make an interesting visit if both stand before Twi´s door and want in to "talk with her". Ya know, cause best threesome is still the twinsxSomepony else. XDDD
I´m a bit surprised though.
Twi had her Unicorn powers and even she had her limits when trying to force herself on Rarity (can´t wait for THAT story part to get solved), Cheerlie had her authority and strength as an adult pony when she forced herself on her two students but Aloe is pregnant which shouldn´t make her stronger but as described a bit weaker. Sure she had the element of surprise but Lotus should have still got more strength to handle Aloe easily.
I had liked to see that.
Aloe struggling crying under Lotus, trying to rape her while her tiwn sister holds her down, shocked, surprised and also completley weirded out that her sister suddenly having a penis! o.o
And then the spell said, fuck this i´m outta here, that was a fail and we get to see how the penis disappears (does it shrink in or disolve in smoke which starts to fly away?) and then Aloe returns to normal and realizes she has to tell Lotus what exactly had happend to her.
Well, maybe we´ll get to see something like that soon.
I hope though that Twi will try to search for the blessing/curse thingie, after all she´s like the most damn powerful Unicorn on Equestria. She should know a spell or two to find a rape amok running spell and a way to contain it (and fail phenomenal about the latter part! Which gives her thoughts from the beginning new unknown strength Twi has to battle down).
So in summary:
The plot part was just amazing, 10/10. Full marks, lots of feelings, POVs, explanations, reasons shown and new plotlines inserted. Perfect.
The clop part was so-so, 5/10 maybe 6/10 for wincest. Guess for one cause we had that alot, for two Lotus became awfully quick content with the thought of having her sister´s foal in her (which is a bit weird given Diamond Tiara´s part who really didnt liked it and even after waking up called for help. Sure AB has the hots for her teacher now, but that didn´t came just like that, it got "earned" with Cheerliee´s attention and foreplay, etc.), three we readers knew already this was just a "quickie".
With Cheerlie/Aloe it´s a one-time thingie with consequences which are outside of our fields of views, we can only guess what will exactly happen to them. Twilight is the real deal though, the main meal so to say. Her curse still stands (pun intended), is visible and still changing her a bit for bit. Which she takes good with accepting the part of her being a colt/stallion now, a very hormon filled colt/stallion that is.
Cheerlie/Aloe never had those thoughts or those worries or those doubts like Twi had when she tried to overcome her curse during the day to give in the night and lastly become one with it. They get it, they shocked, they touch it, OVER. Basically they lose in minutes for which Twi at least needed hours. Like resisting AJ when she was in he bedroom, that did felt like a real hard task for Twi to do at that moment. One she latter didn´t had an ounce of regret doing anyway, the whole guilt stuff came after the blessing was taken out of her leaving her with her 5th leg and blue balls.
I´m interested how you want to include RD in the whole deal with her plot part with that scroll as well as how you wanna include AJ/SB in one chapter together like i dunno they meet and get to talk about Twi and her coming foals and feelings all regarding this mess (i really hope they won´t fuck each other.....).
Pinkie and Shy weren´t shown yet, just spoken off but given how Twi had her thoughts about them being "her perfect mares" i guess we´ll see them sooner or later, unknowingly teasing sane Twi with their cuteness/sexiness as well as making "blessed" Twi getting all hard and ready. ^^
Oh, and i saw you were featured for a short while. Congrats again for getting such a complicated story done so well that people like to read it despite it terrible theme.
Hmmm, if what I've gleaned from the story thus far is true, Luna's blessing has evolved, and now the mares impregnated by Twilight are growing members for which to apply to others. I can totally see some Sweetie x Rarity in the future, or maybe that Rarity is actually Scootaloo?
Just a few typos I found.
Homonym confusion: You meant plain.
Not certain, but you probably mean at times.
This one should be pretty easy.
Keep making things interesting, friend.
1437899 I have a better idea! instead of Dash getting her hooves on Scoots, it should be the other way around. Why? Just for the lulz. Scoots practically worships her anyway, the next logical step is obviously to get her pregnant so that she'll have a little piece od Scoots with her wherever she goes . Or Dash could be a red herring. Keep hinting that something bad is gonna happen to her and then never do anything to her at all
And now I REALLY want the next chapter....why isn't it out already? Cheerilee has been caught, the curse is running rampant, Aloe has told Lotus who got her knocked up, and with a bit of luck, Twilight is gonna get to score with AJ again.....and Sweetie Belle....that too. She should totally break out of the boutique one night and head over to Twilight's library
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Is it wrong that i'm only 13 and reading this?
If that "Blessing" keeps going around temporally possesing every mare Twilight is actually close, incluiding the ones she had "claimed" as hers until it returns back to Twilight's body, then Why do I have the feeling that there's going to be some Futashy on Rainbow Dash and Pinkie Pie action soon?...
gotta love that siscest
There is no reason for the curse to make a non-Stargazer fuck her own sister. Please don't let there be deformed mutant incest babies!
Shameless Clopfic my ass!
This is a really good story, where the clop parts are actually integral to the storytelling.
I never thought it'd happen, but I'm gonna have to thumb-up a clopfic...
Keep up the great work.
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Aww... But Sweetie is like, the final piece in the collection! dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/sillyfilly_Sweetie_Belle.png
I gotta have some way to draw this story out for at least 4 more chapters! dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Sweetie_Belle_lolface.png
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Dash will get her's, she's already been in my plans for a while now. She just wont be part of the main story line. Just more random cloppyness dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/sillyfilly_Rainbow_Dash.png
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Yeah, I kinda had to draw it out, because the talk with Big Mac was important for moving the story along I tend to get way too long-winded when I'm working on plot. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Octavia_plot.png
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With Aloe and Lotus, it was less rape and more 'Surprise! I'm gonna sex you now!'. And Lotus didn't really have a problem with this once she thought about it (also, why no spa pony emotes!)
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You say that, with a user icon like that? dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Cheerilee.png
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I have claimed another one! dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Twilight_crazy_invert.png
The corruption spreads.. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_dealwithit.png
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No, seriously, I'm gonna start working on it today. And don't worry. Twilight isn't taking a back seat to all the random cloppiness. She needed time to work through her own feelings before getting back on the horse (*snickersnort*). I have some plot dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Octavia_plot.png twists, probably none too unexpected, but they should keep things interesting. And Rarity will soon have to face facts about Sweetie Belle dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_unsuresweetie_flip.png
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Aww, not a main part with rainbow? This makes me sad.
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Though I think i'd love you forever if you made Dash Applejack's victim if it happened to Aloe, it could easily happen to Applejack, and who better than her physical rival~
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You have not "claimed another" anything, I already read a random clopfic here and there. Just as I've also read the random gorefic. Yours is NOT just shameless clop, it is story driven by clop, which is further driven by story.
Go read 'The Goddess Within' for comparison; Then try to say yours doesn't actually have a story, with characters, and both kinds of plot!
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I have read 'The Goddess Within'. I found it interesting, but little more. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Octavia2.png
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Got a question though. It´s about the blessing and the dicks, meaning Twi´s still existing one and the two who had disappeared after being 'used'.
Given that the blessuing was made to ensure Twi´s family, their special Unicorn genes that is, won´t die out Luna had given that blessing to one of Twi´s ancestors, right?
Meaning each time Twi comes buckets into a mare, she´s sure to get pregnant due the magical super fertile and magical super many seeds of Twi´s new gadget, correct?
However:
Does that mean that each time somepony else who got possesed with Twi´s blessing, but gets a temporary penis instead, will come buckets into a mare or two foals, that UNLIKE with the Twi rapes, those rapes are all void/useless as those mares were not Twilight/didn´t had her genes/weren´t even Unicorns to begin with.
In other words, they can rape others/have sex with mares for one/two/three times in a couple hours but unlike with Twilight there will be no bums in the oven after the deeds done though it will have the same love/longing/motherhood effect like with Twi.
Cause that would give a new and interesting fact for that blessing. It can take over other ponies and let off steam/semen, but those semen were not the ones he was created for as the blessing exist to ensure the survival of Twi´s super magical genes.
In other words Applebloom, Diamond Tiara and Lotus are not pregnant if we go by this logic of Luna´s blessing when she had enchanted Twi´s ancestor with it. However they got the same love/longing/motherhood effect BUT they didn´t got any foals from that rape/sex time.
It´d be interesting cause that would mean we would have a motherly SB and a motherly AB but only one of them is preggers while the other wonders why her stomach isn´t growing and is giving herself the faults for it or is even jealous of SB. It could also mean that Aloe will see that she can´t grant Lotus child wish who now years for a own foal too but the semen of Aloe and Cheerliee were infertile due not having Twi´s gene´s which the spell is supposed to spread. That way it would also lessen the burden on Cheerliee´s crime a bit while also giving her some horrible realization that she STILL has no foals of her own even after that!
That way there would also be room for jealousy of Cheerliee´s side towards Twi while Lotus would try the other way to ease her child yearning with getting Twi´s seeds in her womb.
^Now those stuff would be something for a chapter or two~
Am i right about that spell part giving Luna´s explanation a couple times ago or not?
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Hey! I'll have you know that the mighty Duck is my spirit animal. It has some kind of weird psychology that deals with the death of my grandmother or something.
But as for the incest mutants, I'm speaking from the genetic biodiversity aspect. Incest allows for a high chance of detrimental health problems to crop up in offspring due to the fact that siblings are more likely to carry the same recessive genes of diseases and psychological ailments from their parents.
Chimera resulting from cross species breeding support the process of biodiversity better than anything, really.
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Exactly, is the clop part of it well written? sure. But does it have an engaging story? Does anyone actually care about the ending? nope!
Your story makes people care about what's gonna happen, we actually LOOK FORWARD to the developments as well as the clop. You made a good story and should be proud!
Just trying to say, it's not shameless if it's actually a quality story.
I know it's kinda hard to see, what with the foalcon and the rape...