awww poor sweetie... I definitely liked applejacks time better.. but it was still a fun read... Pity she didn't get away with rarity instead though.. of course we still have fluttershy and Rainbow and pinkie to look forward too...
excellent! i knew the lovely little Sweetie Bell would end up on Twilight's... list. This entertains the sick, dark, and twisted inner parts of me that i show no one. Well, very few people. Well, those that don't read my stuff or rp with me.
I am looking forwards to seeing Fluttershy taken advantage of, the sweet, tender, gentle little thing she is, and all the ADORABLE little squeaks and whimpers of protest and pleasure she would make.
Hmm... I I'm neutral because I like the dominance stuff, but I don't like that sweetie had to go through that. Yes, even a being as horrid as myself cares...
But seriously, fuck you for making Sweetie Bell screaming in agony the most vivid auditory imagery I have read on this site, and fuck you for keeping me so entranced in this blasphemous clopfic of yours.
I don't give a fuck, because I have run out of fucks to give. You have literally monopolized all of my fuck.
I'm glad Twilight cares, in her own twisted misguided way. Healing Sweetie and being remorseful of being too rough with her new mare. Kissing AJ goodbye. She's crazy, but she's still Twi'! I wonder if they'll catch her before she gets the rest of the Mane6-
And after this, the prospect of ever having sex again so frightened Sweetie Belle that she joined a convent and lived out the rest of her life as a nun.
Or just like AJ that cursed seed makes her want more... WHO CAN STOP TWI´S DICK!!!
I call that Luna will end as one of Twi´s victims, as her alicorn brood mare, so in like 5 to 6 chapters. Yes, that means i doubt Twi will be caught soon, she has given in to her curse but neither lost her magical talent nor her intelligence. And once she seed a foal in Luna´s womb and has somehow managed to get the rest of her friends plus Derpy, there will be a final show-down between her and Celestia, horn vs horn, dick vs vagina, holy princess vs cursed criminal! Stay tuned.
In other words, i see Futatwi as some sort of Hannibal Lector in this fic, a raptist version of him ofc.
Unf! Oh shit Sweetie got turned into a spunk bomb! You're getting better at this. If you're aiming to be more depraved by the chapter I'll be intrigued as to how you'll top this. And anyway Twi and Sweetie should be grateful pony flesh is elastic 'cause by the description of Twi's penultimate penis Sweetie should be dead right now... That or her entire rear should be a bloody torn wound... Seriously! Twi's dick: a fifth leg. Sweetie: barely bigger than opal. But I'm sure she's supposed to be bigger than on the show haha. As always, jolly good show. Now make another chapter so we can shower you with more love and other... Things....
I was fine with the rapes, you see. Candlestick and Aloe and Applejack were grown mares, and I didn't have a problem with it. But this? This is pure child rape. Pedophilia. I literally had to skip the entire Sweetie Rape part because I can't tolerate that kind of practice. At first, I was indifferent to Twilight's exploits, but now she needs to have her penis cut off.
I hope God has mercy on your soul when you die. (And on mine, because I'm reading this. There's something wrong with me.) Also: Pedophilia, really, that's a bridge too far.
Firstly, everyone does realize that this is a story about fictional, talking, multi-colored, magical equines, right? We don't even know how old these things live for. Far as we know, every one of them could be under 6 years old. I'm not going to try to defend myself, I knew what I was writing. I'd just ask that people not try to make connections where there is none when it comes to a story that came right out and said that lines would be crossed.
That being said, the fact that some of you are reacting so strongly to this means that I have done what I set out to do. Those of you that think it's gone too far, I could have gone further. I still might. I still haven't decided how or when this will all end. But I hope I can still surprise you all along the way. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png
820132 You're just NOW complaining about my grammar?
Hold your horses! I know which target you gonna write next! I just know it: Zecora!
I mean, its the forest, its a place where Sweetie could be found easily in her hut, Zecora´s one exotic hawt mare, all good and valid points that she ends up with a foal of Twi.
821841 Well, to put it one way, with out stating a definitive age.... Sweetie is at the 'gray area' where she knows about such things, and she understands just what has happened to her. If Twi didn't get a hold of her, she would probably have ended up fooling around with one of the colts at school without Rarity knowing. But she's still young enough that everyone else would consider it shameful, scandalous, and sickly perverted.
822047 I understand ya now, dood. If Sweetie can get raped, that probably means Applebloom and Scootaloo are targets too, but since the rape didn't go Sweet Apple Massacre rape(Rape with the intent to do harm), and just need hungry rape(rape with the intent to breed), i'll keep my flames at bay, dood, the others don't look very forgiving dood, after reading some of the comments on this chapter.
822319 Intent is very important to me, especially when it comes to things like this. While I wouldn't condone such actions in real life, in the contexts of a work of fiction, intent is very important. It's the difference between a sympathetic main character and a complete monster. And since, in literature, a character's intent can seen (either clearly of inferred), a character's actions can carry meaning beyond what one could simply see with their eyes.
I feel as though some kind of line has been crossed, but the fact that, at the end of the day, Twilight is as much a victim here as everypony else.....well, it makes it hard to bet indignant about it, you know?
826801 On the one hand, I'm posting this quickly and for fun, so proof-reading isn't a priority. I may see if someone would be willing to edit it once I've finished. But for now I'm focusing on getting as much of the story done as I can in a timely fashion.
And with this, I lead you all right into Pony Hell
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FIRST POST Now its time to read.
awww poor sweetie... I definitely liked applejacks time better.. but it was still a fun read... Pity she didn't get away with rarity instead though.. of course we still have fluttershy and Rainbow and pinkie to look forward too...
Really wish she had teleport-tackled Rarity instead.
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Oh god.
Oh god....This.. I have no words to describe this.
My brains... They have stopped functioning.
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Honestly? Very impressive.
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You've hit the nail on the head with the "shameless" part of the summary.
... Yet I can't stop myself from reading. Oh God... what's wrong with me?!
Damn. You sure this is legal?
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I warned you, but you didn't believe me, huh?
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Quick! Someone get the wires and car battery!
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It's like a train wreck, isn't it? The more you try to look away, the more you want to see... dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png
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Pretty sure it isn't. But do I look like I care? dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_dealwithit.png
excellent! i knew the lovely little Sweetie Bell would end up on Twilight's... list. This entertains the sick, dark, and twisted inner parts of me that i show no one. Well, very few people. Well, those that don't read my stuff or rp with me.
I am looking forwards to seeing Fluttershy taken advantage of, the sweet, tender, gentle little thing she is, and all the ADORABLE little squeaks and whimpers of protest and pleasure she would make.
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Crap... Now I have to wait for the next chapter.
TYPE FASTER~! Or some friends and I will pay you a pleasant visit...
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Hmm... I I'm neutral because I like the dominance stuff, but I don't like that sweetie had to go through that. Yes, even a being as horrid as myself cares...
I SO CALLED IT. Maybe it was kind of obvious... but I called it.
Yikes.
I'm highly sickened by this...ccongrats my friend!! YOU actually managed to make me cringe. That has never happened before...
Oh noes!! A cliffhanger!
I hope Opal will be alright...
But seriously, fuck you for making Sweetie Bell screaming in agony the most vivid auditory imagery I have read on this site, and fuck you for keeping me so entranced in this blasphemous clopfic of yours.
I don't give a fuck, because I have run out of fucks to give. You have literally monopolized all of my fuck.
Fuck you, sir.
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I'm glad Twilight cares, in her own twisted misguided way. Healing Sweetie and being remorseful of being too rough with her new mare.
Kissing AJ goodbye. She's crazy, but she's still Twi'!
I wonder if they'll catch her before she gets the rest of the Mane6-
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We all will go there now but you will be there the longest for even coming up with this
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And after this, the prospect of ever having sex again so frightened Sweetie Belle that she joined a convent and lived out the rest of her life as a nun.
Why am i even horny that was CHILD RAPE!
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Or just like AJ that cursed seed makes her want more... WHO CAN STOP TWI´S DICK!!!
I call that Luna will end as one of Twi´s victims, as her alicorn brood mare, so in like 5 to 6 chapters. Yes, that means i doubt Twi will be caught soon, she has given in to her curse but neither lost her magical talent nor her intelligence. And once she seed a foal in Luna´s womb and has somehow managed to get the rest of her friends plus Derpy, there will be a final show-down between her and Celestia, horn vs horn, dick vs vagina, holy princess vs cursed criminal! Stay tuned.
In other words, i see Futatwi as some sort of Hannibal Lector in this fic, a raptist version of him ofc.
Unf! Oh shit Sweetie got turned into a spunk bomb!
You're getting better at this. If you're aiming to be more depraved by the chapter I'll be intrigued as to how you'll top this.
And anyway Twi and Sweetie should be grateful pony flesh is elastic 'cause by the description of Twi's penultimate penis Sweetie should be dead right now... That or her entire rear should be a bloody torn wound...
Seriously! Twi's dick: a fifth leg. Sweetie: barely bigger than opal.
But I'm sure she's supposed to be bigger than on the show haha.
As always, jolly good show.
Now make another chapter so we can shower you with more love and other... Things....
I was fine with the rapes, you see. Candlestick and Aloe and Applejack were grown mares, and I didn't have a problem with it. But this? This is pure child rape. Pedophilia. I literally had to skip the entire Sweetie Rape part because I can't tolerate that kind of practice. At first, I was indifferent to Twilight's exploits, but now she needs to have her penis cut off.
WTF DID I JUST READ?!
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I hope God has mercy on your soul when you die. (And on mine, because I'm reading this. There's something wrong with me.) Also: Pedophilia, really, that's a bridge too far.
hmm... delightful. i'm guessing 2-3 chapters left. till twi's caught maybe unless shenanigans ensues.
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I was raped...
I...
I guess...
good story none the less...
your making question my morals
i will now go sit in a corner of a room until the next chapter comes out
Firstly, everyone does realize that this is a story about fictional, talking, multi-colored, magical equines, right? We don't even know how old these things live for. Far as we know, every one of them could be under 6 years old. I'm not going to try to defend myself, I knew what I was writing. I'd just ask that people not try to make connections where there is none when it comes to a story that came right out and said that lines would be crossed.
That being said, the fact that some of you are reacting so strongly to this means that I have done what I set out to do. Those of you that think it's gone too far, I could have gone further. I still might. I still haven't decided how or when this will all end. But I hope I can still surprise you all along the way. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png
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You're just NOW complaining about my grammar?
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Hold your horses! I know which target you gonna write next! I just know it: Zecora!
I mean, its the forest, its a place where Sweetie could be found easily in her hut, Zecora´s one exotic hawt mare, all good and valid points that she ends up with a foal of Twi.
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I know this is a bit unsettling, as good as this chapter was, but a wise dood once told me:
She's the T to the W-I, L-I-G-H-T
And somepony is gonna get a hoof across the cheek,
You're Twilight's Bitches.
Good thing I'm typing this from hell, cya all there.
And by the way, it was mentioned earlier that Sweetie Belle is of age, so it isn't technically child rape.
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Well, to put it one way, with out stating a definitive age....
Sweetie is at the 'gray area' where she knows about such things, and she understands just what has happened to her. If Twi didn't get a hold of her, she would probably have ended up fooling around with one of the colts at school without Rarity knowing. But she's still young enough that everyone else would consider it shameful, scandalous, and sickly perverted.
Just be thankful I decided not to take it into 'Lil' Miss Rarity' territory. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Rarity_lolface.png
As for how Sweetie will deal with all this, chances are her curiosity about more adult things will color her perception dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Sweetie_Belle_lolface.png
Of course, it's not like Twilight gives a crap about all this. All that matters to her right now is that Sweetie is old enough to get pregnant dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Twilight_Sparkle.png
I love this you brilliant person. Crazy Twilight is amazing.
822047 I understand ya now, dood.
If Sweetie can get raped, that probably means Applebloom and Scootaloo are targets too, but since the rape didn't go Sweet Apple Massacre rape(Rape with the intent to do harm), and just need hungry rape(rape with the intent to breed), i'll keep my flames at bay, dood, the others don't look very forgiving dood, after reading some of the comments on this chapter.
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Intent is very important to me, especially when it comes to things like this. While I wouldn't condone such actions in real life, in the contexts of a work of fiction, intent is very important. It's the difference between a sympathetic main character and a complete monster. And since, in literature, a character's intent can seen (either clearly of inferred), a character's actions can carry meaning beyond what one could simply see with their eyes.
I feel as though some kind of line has been crossed, but the fact that, at the end of the day, Twilight is as much a victim here as everypony else.....well, it makes it hard to bet indignant about it, you know?
I await the next part.
Tis not the first fic i've read with a CMC involved.This one was pretty good.Who could be next on the list I wonder.
GOOSH GOOSH! GOOSH GOOSH! GOOSH GOOSH!
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821841 i fucking love that video
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On one hand this is really well written (minus the typos, y u no editor/pre-reader).
On the other it's foal rape.
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On the one hand, I'm posting this quickly and for fun, so proof-reading isn't a priority. I may see if someone would be willing to edit it once I've finished. But for now I'm focusing on getting as much of the story done as I can in a timely fashion.
On the other hand, I have no soul and take pleasure from the pain of fictional, imaginary characters with no bearing on reality. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png