This should be an actual story instead of just a one shot

Kind of makes it awkward for me since my brother is named Joel

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My name is Joel.

This is my story.

Sequel, sequel!

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7103841 Oh god it's the Temmie fight all over again!

7102963 i feel ya my step father's name is joel and im reading this while in the same house as him literally one door down

rushed

This is a very good one-shot.

I like the premise of the story, but I think that they kind of rushed into having sex, and the dialogue was kind of unnatural. I mean, there's a section near the end where Cadence says: "We just had sex.". Who says that after having sex?

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By god, you're everywhere, aren't you?

Its great mostly because my name is used. It's a pity it wasn't in a story with luna

I like it. I love Cadence

I laughed a lot!

It was a pretty good fanfic but I do think it could of been better felt rushed