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Young, 10 year-old Clementia is one of the twin princess of the royal family of the Realm of the Reapers. They preside over their subjects, the Reapers, who supply the life force for the world of Rainum and beyond. On one particular night, Clementia finds herself in the world of Rainum. She must use the help of the ponies she meets in order to protect her much sought-after soul.
Of course the youthful enthusiastic fool, and the cautious careful planning elder. Such a great mix.
So far I like what I am reading, I hope to see more soon.
will read later
you've caught my interest
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Yay, thanks!
6947718 No problem.
I like this. I like this a lot. You have just earned yourself a tracking!
6948339 THANKS!
Awesome story, can't wait for the next chapter
6948979 Well, now it's out!
For the two brothers:
“When we are children we seldom think of the future. This innocence leaves us free to enjoy ourselves as few adults can. The day we fret about the future is the day we leave our childhood behind.”
― Patrick Rothfuss, The Name of the Wind
For Shining Spear:
“In spring, the snow must go; in fall, the leaves can't stay.”
― Marty Rubin
Great work once again.
6951349 Thanks so much!
6951389 You're welcome.
Oh crap.
This is awesome so far. This is so getting tracked.
6970759 Hey, your back! Haven't heard from you in a while.
6970775 Yeah, busy on other stuff.
6970777 What do you think of the story so far?
6970780 Great. Excellent concept. Great characterization. Even greater, a veil of mystery.
Wow, this is really good so far! Typically I wouldn't chose a story with non-cannon princesses, but I decided to and I'm glad I did! ^^ I found a couple of grammer mistakes, but it looks way better than some stories I've read. Here:
He *had
I found *a
Hope I helped!
I love this story and I can't wait for the next chapter! I'd like it to be a bit longer, but I know how hard it can be to make long chapters. I hope the next chapter will come soon~
6971246 Oh, thanks!
Keep it up man!
Tia just sounds like she's cute.
“The treachery of demons is nothing compared to the betrayal of an angel.”
― Brenna Yovanoff, The Space Between
I feel for shinning I truly do, to lose a loved one is hard on anyone no matter how many times it happens. And for poor Tia caught in the middle of it, I mean she didn't trick Shinning her race says it all Reaper. I know not if she as an allegory for the Reaper of Souls but it was there for me to see. But I'm baffled as to what is going on with Blue Flame, only a few answers for what could have happened to him and none of them good.
I'm calling it now Blue Fire is a Nephilim and struggling to control himself.
6977576 Nope. Though, I can see why you would think that.
6977648 *snaps fingers* Dang, so much for that theory. Though it is clear what ever is going on with him he is struggling to control it... if it can be controlled or at the least contained.
6978665 THANKS!
Weird, but least nopony's dead.
I'm so happy I just ate or I'd be hungry too.
6993626 Yeah, but some mysterious elements are coming into play next chapter! (aka foreshadowing) I know that foreshadowing in the chapters is long overdue. But I just added this "weird part" because some real heavy stuff is coming up.
My old enemy...foreshadowing.
...Why?! All the foreshadowing that I can never understand!
6997194 What did you think of it?
6997204 Great! A nice sense of foreshadowing and mystery as well as introducing more and more things.
6997220 Thanks.
6997222 No prob. It's my pleasure.
What... you... hungry and writing... nah. I wouldn't believe it for a second. Great chapter now I'm off to read the next.
“Being deeply loved by someone gives you strength, while loving someone deeply gives you courage.”
― Lao Tzu
“There are two basic motivating forces: fear and love. When we are afraid, we pull back from life. When we are in love, we open to all that life has to offer with passion, excitement, and acceptance. We need to learn to love ourselves first, in all our glory and our imperfections. If we cannot love ourselves, we cannot fully open to our ability to love others or our potential to create. Evolution and all hopes for a better world rest in the fearlessness and open-hearted vision of people who embrace life.”
― John Lennon
Thing are going to get dark from here on out!
7004352 *cough* That's been quite established already, ma'am.
I am quite hopeful of the next chapter.
7004352 That may be so but I still look forward to seeing how it all ends.
Does the gifts for Tia symbolise anything? Or related. Looking forward to more chapters. Im giddy
7005356 Well in the author's notes I listed what was important, but most of all, Tia's pendant and shield are very important.
Oh god.
Y'know, this Shooting Star character is really getting on my nerves already.
One, he is basically stereotyping all Reapers as the ones that bring pain on them.
Two, she is a child, FOR GOD'S SAKE! She isn't even involved in what you are accusing! She's like what ten? You have no right to attack her, you foal!
7024002 Well, there is a really good reason why he's doing this. You'll have to wait to see the answer!