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This story is in some demand right now. Holy shit.
Prepare for feelings.
6455427 The feelings are tugging
He's thankful that everyone doesn't hate/dislike. Fluttershy you would expect, then the CMC. At least there are those who want him happy, but there's too much hate...something's going to change that...I have a feeling of it.
6455540 Maybe...
I can't "prepare my feelings" simply because this is a boring cliche that's been done before, and better.
You dropped a human into a village full of ponies that randomly hate and despise something that they don't understand nor has done anything to receive such bizarre treatment. Then Celestia swoops on in as a big ol'e coincidence to give the human the bare minimum amount of help, before ditching him to be tortured by a village that obviously wants nothing to do with him ( Especially after witnessing two of the elements of harmony beating him to death, which should've been an instant "WTF?" moment for her).
You warped the most loving ponies personalities just to suit your story's needs in order to force sympathy down our throats for "poor old" . . . . whoever the main character was.
Point is, without a good reason- besides what I listed- for the sudden human hate, and the MAJOR twisted personalities, including AJ and Dash. Then this is simply bad writing to garner the shock value for the readers; Nothing more.
Or you could go ahead throw in the the ALT UNV. tag for the hell of it. I honestly don't care at this point. My jimmies aren't even rustled by this. . . just bored.
I also forgot to mention one thing:
This story makes me sad (in a good way) because it's been a while since I saw a story with this premise; an active story anyways.
Good job so far.
~ I'm wondering just what you are trying to accomplish with this fic
also why focusing on only two of the main six (AJ & RD ) as antagonist
Is there some hidden meaning to his torment?
Some lesson to be learned by the ponies?
If things have got him so down what is his drive to continue living on ?
Is he Suicidal or ?
To much is left out and it's getting on my nerves....
I agree with LaughingZombie .. Some things need fixing in this fic
I'm going to give it one more chapter to redeem itself or I shall find something else worthy of tracking
I'll continue this story, eventually. I'm too busy procrastinating. Also working on another story. Because if I'm good at anything, is writing the first few chapters of a story then never continuing it for months.
You'll have to wait till March next year.
So I have an idea that doesn't retcon any of the previous two chapters. But considering the chapters are of 'shock-value', for him being hated for... reasons, I had to think of a way to continue the story. So, in a way, the next chapter is going to be more of the same... kinda. If you don't like the previous two chapters, then I wouldn't stick around.
6455720 This fic in several ways is going to be more of the same (for half the part), even if it doesn't make sense. I don't have a problem with you not reading it, so you can just leave if you aren't interested.
6455636 I can't please everyone. Some people do like this fic, for whatever reason.
I actually have an idea for this story. Contain your surprise.
meh i like it no matter what everybody says never change
I guess this means you're back?
6713884 Somewhat. I just released a tease, is all.
6714240
Ah.
I like your story. It give the reader the feel they are the one that are in the place of your person. I have read many stories and this is one of the ones I will keep in my favourites. It is sad in the beginning and will make you cry on the second chapter. But I can see this will make it to the front of the web page someday.
it might already have.
6864987 Thanks, but I doubt it will make the front page. Perhaps one day, when I bother to upload it again.
6864987 I may have been wrong about this. This story is very slowly, but surely, gaining some popularity.
This story was pretty well executed. Can't wait for more!
Yeah, I forgot I'm writing this story.
This story is gonna be in limbo... Until I care enough to write a new chapter.
Hey I kinda switched to what my name should be (from the other one), and I'm more mature now, so I can respond to criticism more adequately... I hope.
holy crap...it lives...
Also, how the main character hasn't lashed out yet is amazing...personally I would've snapped by now (not at the fat comment, but after everything)
I'm liking this story, and am interested in how it'll all turn out. Especially looking forward to seeing how exactly he feels about the rest of the mane 6 and why. Thanks for your good work. Keep it up please lol
6438342 By the hole-ly legs of the queen, you just got one more reader to follow this!
8012434 Thanks. Probably won't upload for a long time, but still thanks.
Poor guy. All he wanted was some friends. Now he lost his only job. Have to admit, he's holding on a lot longer than I would
I would like to know if this story will continue or will not continue at all, because I like to see what's going to happen to Leo
This might be dead, 4 years I know he said it would be a while since it he started again buuut…
Guy hasn’t been on since 2017 so it’s dead