He was suddenly sent to Equestria out of nowhere, to a world unfamiliar to him. Every pony there seemed nice, at first. But the way he has been treated for the past few months, he is struggling to see clear reasons to live. Some life.
He's thankful that everyone doesn't hate/dislike. Fluttershy you would expect, then the CMC. At least there are those who want him happy, but there's too much hate...something's going to change that...I have a feeling of it.
I can't "prepare my feelings" simply because this is a boring cliche that's been done before, and better.
You dropped a human into a village full of ponies that randomly hate and despise something that they don't understand nor has done anything to receive such bizarre treatment. Then Celestia swoops on in as a big ol'e coincidence to give the human the bare minimum amount of help, before ditching him to be tortured by a village that obviously wants nothing to do with him ( Especially after witnessing two of the elements of harmony beating him to death, which should've been an instant "WTF?" moment for her).
You warped the most loving ponies personalities just to suit your story's needs in order to force sympathy down our throats for "poor old" . . . . whoever the main character was.
Point is, without a good reason- besides what I listed- for the sudden human hate, and the MAJOR twisted personalities, including AJ and Dash. Then this is simply bad writing to garner the shock value for the readers; Nothing more.
Or you could go ahead throw in the the ALT UNV. tag for the hell of it. I honestly don't care at this point. My jimmies aren't even rustled by this. . . just bored.
I also forgot to mention one thing: This story makes me sad (in a good way) because it's been a while since I saw a story with this premise; an active story anyways.
~ I'm wondering just what you are trying to accomplish with this fic also why focusing on only two of the main six (AJ & RD ) as antagonist Is there some hidden meaning to his torment? Some lesson to be learned by the ponies? If things have got him so down what is his drive to continue living on ? Is he Suicidal or ? To much is left out and it's getting on my nerves.... I agree with LaughingZombie .. Some things need fixing in this fic I'm going to give it one more chapter to redeem itself or I shall find something else worthy of tracking
I'll continue this story, eventually. I'm too busy procrastinating. Also working on another story. Because if I'm good at anything, is writing the first few chapters of a story then never continuing it for months.
So I have an idea that doesn't retcon any of the previous two chapters. But considering the chapters are of 'shock-value', for him being hated for... reasons, I had to think of a way to continue the story. So, in a way, the next chapter is going to be more of the same... kinda. If you don't like the previous two chapters, then I wouldn't stick around.
6455720 This fic in several ways is going to be more of the same (for half the part), even if it doesn't make sense. I don't have a problem with you not reading it, so you can just leave if you aren't interested.
Prepare for feelings.
6455427 The feelings are tugging
He's thankful that everyone doesn't hate/dislike. Fluttershy you would expect, then the CMC. At least there are those who want him happy, but there's too much hate...something's going to change that...I have a feeling of it.
6455540 Maybe...
I can't "prepare my feelings" simply because this is a boring cliche that's been done before, and better.
You dropped a human into a village full of ponies that randomly hate and despise something that they don't understand nor has done anything to receive such bizarre treatment. Then Celestia swoops on in as a big ol'e coincidence to give the human the bare minimum amount of help, before ditching him to be tortured by a village that obviously wants nothing to do with him ( Especially after witnessing two of the elements of harmony beating him to death, which should've been an instant "WTF?" moment for her).
You warped the most loving ponies personalities just to suit your story's needs in order to force sympathy down our throats for "poor old" . . . . whoever the main character was.
Point is, without a good reason- besides what I listed- for the sudden human hate, and the MAJOR twisted personalities, including AJ and Dash. Then this is simply bad writing to garner the shock value for the readers; Nothing more.
Or you could go ahead throw in the the ALT UNV. tag for the hell of it. I honestly don't care at this point. My jimmies aren't even rustled by this. . . just bored.
I also forgot to mention one thing:
This story makes me sad (in a good way) because it's been a while since I saw a story with this premise; an active story anyways.
Good job so far.
~ I'm wondering just what you are trying to accomplish with this fic
also why focusing on only two of the main six (AJ & RD ) as antagonist
Is there some hidden meaning to his torment?
Some lesson to be learned by the ponies?
If things have got him so down what is his drive to continue living on ?
Is he Suicidal or ?
To much is left out and it's getting on my nerves....
I agree with LaughingZombie .. Some things need fixing in this fic
I'm going to give it one more chapter to redeem itself or I shall find something else worthy of tracking
I'll continue this story, eventually. I'm too busy procrastinating. Also working on another story. Because if I'm good at anything, is writing the first few chapters of a story then never continuing it for months.
You'll have to wait till March next year.
So I have an idea that doesn't retcon any of the previous two chapters. But considering the chapters are of 'shock-value', for him being hated for... reasons, I had to think of a way to continue the story. So, in a way, the next chapter is going to be more of the same... kinda. If you don't like the previous two chapters, then I wouldn't stick around.
6455720 This fic in several ways is going to be more of the same (for half the part), even if it doesn't make sense. I don't have a problem with you not reading it, so you can just leave if you aren't interested.
6455636 I can't please everyone. Some people do like this fic, for whatever reason.
I actually have an idea for this story. Contain your surprise.
meh i like it no matter what everybody says never change