Wonderful, just Wonderful!

I like this story but the writing needs a lot of cleaning up. This story is just riddled with grammatical, syntactical, and typographical errors. Throw in a few other types of errors as well and it becomes a bit difficult to read this as I have to sometimes figure out what you actually mean to say rather than what was said.

This story is also starting to run into the "no practical difference" problem where this uses plots from the show and doesn't change them in any appreciable way leading me to ask, "why should I read this when I can just watch the show if I wanted to experience this story?" I so far like the interactions and lore but am worried by the potential over reliance on show episodes that could take away from this.

I'll give it a follow but no up vote for the aforementioned reasons.