Trying to improve my writing. Please critisize my stories, old or new!
Butter Berrys is a total mess, he has no job, he's loosing his home, and he doesn't even have a cutie mark. but in a fit of drunkenness, he manages to do naughty things with Princess Luna. now they must keep that night a secret from everypony else...
one thing though...let's just say Luna's no princess!
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Umm, that was...
Interesting...
This is kinda weird...
This when from 10 to 100 real fast!
Amazon Prime TV! Whoa! I mean yeah sure this story was interesting with a good concept but where's the clop? Plus you could have gone into more detail on some certain stuff. Oh and learn grammar.
6730279 I left the clop out because, well, I don't enjoy clop much, let alone write it. Plus, I realize the grammar mistakes in this story, I feel like it could've come out better myself
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Is his special talent, to make sure his children grow very fast?, at lest that fast, so the Mares already know they are pregnant in the first few hours/minutes they wake up?
6732236 I know, I hate this story. I wrote it in a fit of pure boredom...
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