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Erina Tail Yellow


Doing a thing

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This story is a sequel to Backstage Affair


“Love is never easy and telling others who you love is harder. But if the one you love, loves you back they will stand resolute when you can't stand on your own.” by NMK

Twilight took a chance with fate after her trip to Manehatten. She decided to show up at Vinyl’s next performance and found that she could feel the beat of love. With the energetic DJ by her side Twilight felt her world fall into place. But after Two months of keeping it backstage it’s time to enter the centre stage spotlight.


Co-Author my wonderful sister Winter A.K.A Febnic16

Chapters (4)
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Comments ( 27 )
Comment posted by febnic16 deleted Mar 6th, 2017

Good start! Im interested in seeing how this goes.

Finally could read this. And I got to say, that's a very interesting take. Personally, I would have done it differently if there would have been plans by me to write my own sequel for it, but the idea of the sequel kicking in after two months in which they kept their relationship a secret works well in its own regard.
And seeing how another author expresses the idea in a different way than I would have is a very interesting experience and exciting to observe.

“Doesn’t mean I can’t still say I called it; Back in Backstage Affair ‘something incredibly important will happen in Manehattan tonight, something that will change your life forever.’ Also an I told you so here and there will happen.” Pinkie stuck her tongue out playfully.

And that part straight up humbled me! Seeing such a direct reference to my fic with Pinkie breaking over to it through the fourth wall is great! Thanks for including this!
I also love how you have such a strong, lesbian theme in general going on here, with Rarity being in a relationship with Coco and Aloe and Lotus being both interested in Rainbow Dash! :pinkiehappy:

So, and to add a little constructive criticism to it too, because I want to help you make this fic better since it's a sequel for own of mine, I recommend you to read this guide here:

http://www.fimfiction.net/writing-guide


A lot of the errors I could find in this chapter can be fixed by applying the lessons from there. For the rest, I suggest another session of thorough proofreading; to fix several typos, missing commas and spaces and the occasional word you wrote down twice.

I will follow this story and I'm excited to see where it leads! :scootangel:

8010275 Glad you liked it. As the co-author of the story, I can say that we well work harder so that the next chapter is much better and has fewer mistakes as well. We will also go over the first chapter and fix what we missed.

An we'll never be royals.
Royals
You can call me queen bee.

I didn't, and now I do, and it's all your fault...
On another note, interesting story idea, I will be following along to see what happens!
On another note, I'm not sure if you were going for this or not but,

I didn’t mean it that way. Our snuggle seasons are special.

I'm pretty sure seasons was supposed to be sessions here, though you could probably get away with either

8011410 *we will
You're not leaving a great first impression sis

Nice, very nice. I liked the back story, and I can't wait to see how things continue.

I knew that backstory seemed familiar for some reason.

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Thank you both so much for taking the time to read this and even more for commenting

Sad to think University Days ended poorly. But then I am Octavia is pretty sad on its own regardless of what story precedes it.

Great chapter. I'm interested to see where you take this.

Sounds like Luna had a pretty impressive method of confession. Also how weird would it be to have royalty ask you for help wooing your kin?

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I like to imagine it in the royal canterlot voice. MR LIGHT! WE HAVE COME TO SEE ABOUT COURTING THINE DAUGHTER! PRAY TELL HOW WOULD YE PROCEED!?

This is an interesting read. I don't find many Twiscratch stories.

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it's definitely pretty niche. be sure to follow for future updates there should be one soon

FlutterTia?
celeshy?
...
i got nothing

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it is not dead, the finale has just been in the work for a bit as I've worked through some stuff

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