When the Great and Powerful Trixie seems to be at the end of her life's journey, she is unwilling to let go. An unusual shadow on a cave wall has a bargain for her. He will teach her powerful magic that no other would dare teach to her. In exchange, she must follow directions.
Princess Celestia arms Twilight Sparkle with a new spell to confront the new menace, but it is not enough. The unicorn must look past her mistakes to face the one unicorn in all of Equestria that she fears most. Will the steep price of redemption be worth paying?
Chapters (5)
I love plot, simple but solid, and sheer emotions. What I don't like is OOC of manecast, except of Twilight, Dash and Fluttershy. I mean, Dash is hot-headed, but not downright cruel. Applejack would never blame pony for what she didn't do - she can hold grudge for Trixie being a liar, but she didn't bring Ursa into town. Pinkie Pie is most OOC - she's cheery, bubbly and smiley pony who thinks everything can be solved with laugh and party. She must've been with Fluttershy here, trying to befriend Trixie, not being mean as Gilda.
“I have type O-negative. I can give blood to both mares. Also, my special nature allows you to take more blood from me than you normally are capable. First, give to Trixie and then share with Twilight after you run out of any other blood.”
DEUS EX MACHINA FOR THE FREAKING WIN!!!
Gapaot, you're right. A few of the cast are OOC. I tried not to let it get out of hand, but it's really hard writing for several characters in a single scene. Pinkie did indeed get away from me the most, but at least she wasn't violent. In fact, she even solved a problem by feeding someone!
Still, I did my best.
Applejack was my mirror into Ponyville popular thought. Having people blame someone unnecessarily was part of the story. I kinda had to hijack her for that to have some of the conversations.
Yeah, OOC, but unless the author is trying to keep it canon, that's not necessarily a problem. Especially in dark/grimdark, and sometimes shipping, some ponies have to be OOC for it to work. I don't see it as a deal-breaker, as long as the dialogue still seems like what that character might say if forced into that situation. This was a pretty good story, actually - I'm surprised at the lack of traffic.
Interesting and I kind have figured this was the sequel to Gemini of all Things. I came across this story before it's prequel.
The blue unicorn called down nervously, “Pinkie Pie! That was not funny!” Rainbow Dash is a unicorn
Discord escaped I knew it.
Hmm... Not what I was expecting but still enjoyable.
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Ah, thank you. I missed that in proofread.
Glad you liked the story.
Rainbow Dash is the Kool-aid pony
OH YEAH!!!
Rainbow Sprinkles said that Trixie saved her cousin in a earlier chapter,
but in this chapter she said sister.
It was a great read and a nice wrap up to it's prequel and I'm glad that I've read it. Keep up the good work.
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Much appreciated. I scrutinize these stories carefully before publishing but sometimes I can only spot flaws after publishing.
Sometimes only when someone else points them out.
I hope to have a new story out soon.
how did you get so many tags?
Is this a sequel to Gemini in All Things?