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Mixin Husky
I'm Mixin Husky, but call me Husky
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Could do with a spot of editing, but yeah, it's cute, I guess. I'm a sucker for Flutter/Dash, though.
It was cute
Could do with reading it out loud 1 or 2 times just to make sure you got everything right.
It was a cute story i enjoyed it. I'll give you a 8/10 Good job.
~Tobben
This is cute and pretty good.
A lot of first stories are not good.
No offense or anything, but I did not like this story very much. Fluttershy was out of character, the romance felt forced, none of the dialogue felt natural and the pacing was way to fast. But other than that it was good.
Concept is serviceable. Maybe when you get a little more experience you should come back and rewrite this. It could definitely be a lot better.
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Agreed. Also, a bit confusing and rushed. Spelling errors plentiful.
An edited version is coming out soon. I have spotted what I have done wrong.
You have a good concept but it is incredibly rushed. Then only thing that seemed paced was the description of the room.
It says fixed, but there are still some errors.
Not bad, pretty decent first attempt. Solid 7.5/10.
It does need some grammar fixes, and if you could pace the whole story the wyy you paced the room's description, it'd be really, really awesome.
And hey, can I get a link or something to the cover image? I think it's pretty neat.
~Wywint
You probably should add a sex tag, but hey, I could be wrong.
Not sure what's going on but.. I guess I liked it.. cute really.
Your writing seemed out of wacky for character interaction.
Sequel??
I am extremely sad that we don't get to hear the conversation Dash has with her parents.