how has Kaa been doing since we last saw him in Jungle Book 2, let alone, AT ALL? well, he still was up to his old ways. many, many failures later, he began to question himself, and lost fate in himself, and even believes himself as a disgrace to his forefathers. suddenly, out of nowhere, came forth the one creature not effected by his hypnotism, or Kaa being a moronic jerk. a small, horse-like creature with wings by the name of Fluttershy took him to equestia for a hopefully more positive ambassador for equestia since it's previous problems with dimensional creatures and beings.
Will Kaa have a new life, or, would he somehow screw it up? or would something of a world threaten proportion suddenly happen that'll surely stand in the way of Glory's dreams of dimensional travel... yet again?
Image by tyrranux.
this will be using a differnet Kaa, not the Kaa from the Spongebob and Friends adventures which i am not against (in fact, i am the creater, youtube name is Scroopfan3212311.) but because i am planing to release a fanfic i posted on regular fanfiction (account name there is the comedic writer) that features that Kaa in the SBFs world. this is a slightly similar but totally different Kaa.
don't let the image fool you, Kaa and Fluttershy are gonna get along well, the image focuses more on the first encounter.
Kaa is property of Disney.
MLP is belonging to Hasbro.
more characters will be added by chapter 2.
You need some serious spellcheck and grammar fixing
717279 sorry, my other editor Vuples was unable to do it.
aw man. i thought this was gonna be the one to get me out of the underpopular slump. curse my writing problems!
717364
If it's any help : You should divide dialogue that belongs to different characters.
Show, don't tell - "Celestia was half worried about this." (You should describe through her actions or dialogue a feeling of worry, not tell us)
You don't have to keep saying "Character x Said - dialogue", a better format would be "Dialogue - he/she said (or any other action he/she did while saying it)"
After you introduce a character you don't have to keep referring to them by name, except if you change the scene, or both characters are of the same sex
Hope this helps
717494 not the first time i been told this, but i am trying my best. sorry about the "said" thing and the explaining emotions thing, force of habits.
717527 Don't sweat it , everyone makes mistakes when they start
. If you want real help just read the guide-line here 
There are also other books that you can read that will help you
If anything, reading these instructions will improve your skills vastly, good luck !
ahh, Disney, the memories come FLYIN' back. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/discord.png
717855 i hope the story's too your liking, dispite some, uh, blemishes.
718039 Well, I will edit this post the minute I am done! Jungle book was my fav disney movie!
718061 just out of curiouosity, do you like both Jungle Book movies, or do you like the origenal more because you think the sequil may be abit rushed and half like the original? just curious.
718083 I loved both, but I do hafta say, you cant beat the original, not because the second movie is half assed or anything, it's mainly the generation I came out of that portrayed Disney to me.
718091 again, i was just curious.
Damn it, I was thinking of writing a fan fic of those two
Well I'll read and see how these two will duke it out one way or another
718658 oh gees, i am so sorry. i didn't you already called dibs. look, hows about i drop the story and you take over?
718697
Oh no, go on ahead, but I did like the part where both Fluttershy and Kaa had their little Staring Showdown.
I'm going to watch on and see how this is going to unfold, good way to start it. Keep it up, I know you can improve, I had professors who critiqued my papers and it all looked red...
lol sorry, I went on a tangent on that one, love that photo by the way.
Besides, I think you gave me an even better idea on my own stories Fluttershy can befriend. With a little help from Lemony Snicket and the Incredibly Deadly Viper
i like it could use a bit of work but wouldernt fluttershy be even a bit surpised to see a talking snake ?
719332 ok, still sorry for beating you though.
720162 it's Because Writing Glory told Fluttershy that some dimentions don't work the same one might do, and was told to expect some unusual things, like talking or sentient animals. besides, this is a fic for a show about talking little horses and your thinking a talking snake is supposed to be surprasing to a talking little pegisisious?
721926 you got a point there curse you i reckon you ashould make a ducktails one
722294 hmm, i'll think about it....
722395 do it like where huie dowie and lowie get transported over woith the begale boys and they all ponified xd
724654
And that was another idea I was going to go with myself, lol
Though mine is going to be similar to a video game and with Derpy/Ditzy as the main character
724856 well that do can i make a cameo in it please :)
724882
Well maybe in the later chapters I plan on making for the series, send me some info on your character and I'll see what I can do
724890 oh god yes marry mr?
724654 moight not be able to do it unless i could find a fitting image, like say, pony versions of the Beagle boys and Scrooges Nefpews.
If you can't even spell "Equestria" properly you probably shouldn't be writing MLP fanfiction.
5521122 I'm abit autistic, so you don't have to be harsh about it.
Do more please
5962662 I plan to. I'm just abit of a mess right now, I'm struggling against the site's newfound unforgiveness against troubled writing.
Kaa got the stare
6951961 Oh yes he DID!
I do hope you keep this going it's a cute idea and I've always loved the idea of a friendly kaa especially with Fluttershy, without the threat of being eaten those coils would be pretty fun to be in.