Hello, I'm Storiesatrandom, and, I, do stories..... At Random.
well, thanks to those insulting memes of her being a Tyrant, a sex crazed loony, and an internet's variation of a troll, Celestia just broken down and cried herself a storm, litteraly! can i fix what countless insults to her face have reap? hope so, or everyone in Equestia has to use boats for now on.
rated teen due to sex talk.
image by an unknown artist (i didn't get this one from Denivant art)
Human tag added cause it features a human: Me.
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This was a nice story. It would have been better had the spelling errors not been there and stretched out a bit more.
232883 sorry if it's not perfected to your tastes, i promise this will be adjusted by my short story editor.
Interesting thing you have here, but it feels like S.A.R. is rambling. It's also littered with spelling and grammatical errors that only add to a sense this was a bit rushed. Slow down, maybe, and take a critical look at your work before you hit 'submit'.
All that aside, This is a good look at Celestia in a world without the fourth wall.
232908 define rambling?
232913 Maybe rambling isn't the word I'm looking for, but it felt like every thought that crossed S.A.R.'s mind would spill out with little feedback from the princess verbally or narratively. It may be the way he/she works, I can't say. It's just the way it felt to me. I know I read quickly as well, and might have given him/her a tone you did not mean because of this, so take my comment as you will.
Amazing. Simply amazing.
232946 thanks, you saved this story from being fully red.
jesus man! why is it getting so many thumbs down?
232954 No problem. And I hate how people view her.
While there are some grammar and formatting issues, those do not take away from what is needing to be said. I am called Celestia's Paladin because when I became a brony I felt that no one was willing to stand up for her, and I felt that someone has to. I became her Sword and Shield, so I do find it nice for a fellow brony to stand up for her as well.
*unzips jacket and lays it over Celestia* Come on Celestia, Ambrosia and Storm are waiting as well.
In the Name of Her Serene Majesty,
Celestia's Paladin: For Honor and Duty, For the Sun, Moon, Earth, and Sky
232980 thanks, well, i mostly did it because cause the image on the summery inspired me, i at first used it on a blog i made here, but it inspired me to do this, but also, i felt people need to realise to not take those dumb memes seriously, they're just crude nature plot-divices, right?
It's a good idea for a story but it isn't executed well.
If I were you, I'd make it longer and maybe a little about Celestia's reactions on how the Internet views her and how she tried to deal with the situation before breaking down into tears.
233001 hmm, maybe i could ask my short story editor that, or if he can't maybe find another editor that can add abit more. sorry if it seems underdelelamented.
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Not just plot devices but also blatant violations of canon. I've read the reasons why (except for Molestia *washes mouth out with soap*) they exist, and canon can debunk all of them. The problem with memes is that people think of them as canon.
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A story editor is supposed to fix up the grammar, spelling and point out some of the story consistencies and loopholes.
You're supposed to write the story, take your time and keep on writing.
233019 sorry if you deemed me lazy, but sometimes thinking up ideas ain't easy most of the time.
Cele seems a bit out of character but good story nether the less. I think Trollestia and etc are funny but I defiantly don't think of it as Cele's true nature, shes better then that!
233281 understandable. this is an awesome story discussing the problem with those memes, yet it's get an awful alot of thumbs-down.
233291 oh, Well I liked it!
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I've been trying to think of something to say... Good Effort, run it through a filter before posting, It's short but if that's your thing I can't rightfully blame you (I've read fantastic short-fics). I'm giving you a thumb up for the attempt.
That is All.
233365 thanks.
My love.... Destroyed by internet memes....
260537 your not the only one upseted by this.
260545 No, I just like to state how much I love her!
260597 oy fey
. sorry, i'm alittle annoyed and upset right now from a series of criticisums from a new story i just wrote, it was created in honor of Derpy's sudden banishment from canon, though it's much differnet, it honors what Derpy means to people none the less.
233291 A little piece of advice regarding attitude?
When you make a story, you should believe that it's the best story possible. You should believe that it will single-handedly make the fandom a better place, raise the standard of writing, and make Fluttershy say "yay" in an adorable voice.
But when being criticized, you have to agree with your worst critics. Any flaws that people can find in your story are either valid or are the results of their misinterpreting the work. In either case, you can improve future stories and/or chapters to be better and easier to understand.
On topic, I liked this. There are too many grammatical problems, but the core message of the story was poignant and necessary.
You look like a promising author. I'm going to browse through your fics over the next few days and tell you what I think of them. You seem worth it.
365679 thanks, this story was made to make people more aware on how those anti-celestias are just memes. it's only purpose is just to be a missellious story with a deep message, if i intended it to be more "stronger" in plot or at least gave a prior setting, i would've done that, but again, it was intended to send a message, not become a kick-ass story. (but it's good on it's own terms). my problem is that i have a child-like sense of pride due to being somewhat of a kid at heart, and it doesn't help i'm mildly autistic, while i am still able to use a computer at all or talk normally, it prevents me to improove greatly on several things, and, clearly, spelling, grammer, and most other mistakes are some of them. i am capable to admit i'm not perfect, and i try hard to make people aware that they shouldn't exspect 100% perfect fics, but i guess that sometimes i don't get the same users. goes to show that MLP:FIM is more popular enough to have even more then an estermated amount.
I scratch my head at such an original concept being so poorly executed. I'm quite tempted to steal this concept and try to write something similar, but I know I shouldn't, haha. There's quite a few things that need to be addressed before hitting the submit button. If this is your first story here, trust me, the commenters will be very harsh at first. It was the same for me when I first got here, I thought this site was full of hostile elitists, but they really do just wanna see better stuff from you:
1. Edit. Lack of editing is lazy. I get picked at all the time for spelling and grammar, and I have perhaps the highest watcher count on this site. It really is a big deal that just irks people. It pulls them out of the story and makes them remember that they're reading.
2. It's hard, in such a short span, to wonder if you are flirting with the fourth wall or not. S.A.R. is admittedly a self-insert, which is fine (even I've done that), I'm just not sure what sort of purpose an OC serves if any recognizable pony would've done just fine. Heck, even Pinkie Pie could've been a cheery umbrella-holding mare in this (and I despise Pinkie Pie). "S.A.R." is just kind'a silly to say aloud. It doesn't have the same ring as "AJ" or anything.
3. You've an excellent concept. I think you should develop it further and perhaps post up a more defined and well thought-out version of this. There's a spark of creativity here, it just needs to be unearthed so it can shine!
~Aegis Shield
1547400 i would like to state that attempts on improving fic production is being worked on.