Snailsyphus
In unrelenting rain and strong winds, Snails stood alone at the base of a tall hill and stared at a rock. It was a modest rock, a little smaller than himself, partially covered in moss on several sides and shaped like a lumpy egg. But to Snails, this wasn’t just a rock. To him, this rock would be the key to her heart.
“There has to be something I can do,” he pleaded. “Anything!”
Snails gave the tin shed at the top of the hill one final look, then lifted the rock with a strong toss of his neck. With his head held low to balance the rock, he began his ascent. He was sure that he would finally win her over.
Diamond Tiara turned up her nose. “Hmph. You want to prove your love? There’s a scheduled rainstorm tomorrow.”
The rain had turned the once lush, grassy hill into a muddy deluge. Trudging through this mud, Snails caked his legs up to his knees in it with every step of the way. In the end, it would all be more than worth it.
“You’re going to carry a rock up the tallest hill in Ponyville in the rain. Without magic. Do that, and you’ll ‘prove your love.’”
He tilted his head. “What rock?”
“As if I ca—” She paused. “Any rock. It doesn’t matter. It just has to be big.”
The wind knocked the rock off his back several times, but the rock never slid too far away. Every time, he returned for it, dirtying himself further by pulling it out of the mud. He didn’t mind.
She turned her back on him and walked out the door. “I’ll be waiting in that shed at the top.”
He couldn’t see ahead very well, so he bumped into a few other rocks and trees, but he could feel his progress: the wind grew stronger as he climbed higher, chilling his soaked, muddy body to the bone. He didn’t care. He was almost at the top, and his prize would be eagerly awaiting him.
“Don’t disappoint me.”
He could see the shed now. It sat there atop the hill in all of its barren, rusty, beaten glory. He threw the rock off his back, raced to the shed, and burst through its door.
“Diamond Tiara!” he shouted. “I’ve come for you!”
But nopony answered.
Snails looked around the shed. The one shelf that crookedly hung on the wall was cleared of tools and coated with dust, and the door itself nearly fell off its hinges from his exuberant entrance. Spiders and miscellaneous insects made their homes in the nooks and crannies of the steel. And as the rain rattled against the tin shed, Diamond Tiara was nowhere to be found.
Snails walked back out and looked around. There was no sign of Diamond Tiara, nor any sign that she had ever been near the shed.
He faced the rain and chuckled. Diamond Tiara probably forgot about him, but it didn’t matter.
He would gladly do it again and again until she finally loved him back.
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Poor snails
What a poor little lad, she'll never love you.
I thought Diamond Tiara would die... I even prepared a comment for this.
Poor snails. Good story, short, concise to the point I like that shit. Not a lot of writers can tell the tale in less than 1,000 words and have flawless execution, you did it in less than 600, good shit.
Aww, Snails!
I got a neutral reaction to this.
Me gusta.
Aw, great story! Snails is sweet you've made me hate Tiara just a little more now.
"snails pushes a rock up a hill."
fuck you diamond tiara. fuck you.
she reminds me of that one girl 
What. The. Buck. Did I just read.
The description caught me be surprise, so I clicked it. 
My fanfiction with you is a lot kinder at the end.
And don't worry, Snails, you'll find some love with Twist.
4.5 starssss~
How did that description manage to captivate me?
WAAAH. Mai gosh. Oh dear... my poor baby.
I love the economy of words! Very well done. Loving Diamond must be like a curse from the gods...
Thanks for writing!
Wonder why I didn't read this when it was released, it's so short!
Poor Snails. D: He's too dumb to be sad even.
I admire its conciseness, but I didn't have enough time to get into the storyline to really experience any sort of catharsis or reaction to the story beyond a "huh." It's a subject that's very easy to relate to, this topic of unrequited love, but the treatment seems a touch shallow here, in my opinion.
Still, in terms of how many words you devoted to this, what it accomplishes is impressive.
Very sweet but I agree with Vimbert it felt too short to really have much impact. It was still great fun to read.
How did you publish this without 1000 words?
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It was published way long ago before Fimfiction had that minimum.
Had a similar experience when I was younger.
*MUCH younger*
Ahem!
*sorry*
You managed to pack a lot of story into a short amount of space.
Excellent job !
One must imagine Snails happy.
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You and I both