Meet Sunpraiser! She's energetic, near perfectly law-abiding, and not even a little ambitious. Today we'll be following her through one day of her life. She's going to have to make some difficult decisions to but she'll do anything for her Princess. Just as she should. After all, the Princess knows what's best for Equestria.
And she would never even think about overthrowing the empire, right?
Please don't take this to be indicative of my overall writing skill.
I apologize in advance for this fic.
Chapters (1)
I'm not too sure how to view this. It's like reading Shakespeare; but not in a good way. It's kind of too poetic, but not qualified enough to actually be enjoyable poetry. Like having a cake that's too rich, and is too thick at the same time.
Stuff kind of like this, I guess. It's prevented from being thoroughly fun or different. I'm at a lack of words for it, honestly.
5824243 Yeah, being poetic wasn't my intent here.
(͡° ͜ʖ ͡°) Dislikes? Time to add this to Le Random Bookshelf.
This got a second like? I did not expect that.
Edit: And a third?!
Edit 2: And a fourth?! I guess this story is too likable.
Edit 3: And a fifth. This one I can actually understand, I conversed with the person who gave it.
Edit 4: Rank 111,434! That's a fun number, right?
It's nearly 50:50. Wow, I was not expecting that.
Right, here's a review you wanted, thanks for the review for Chrome, The Path He Walked by the way, really appreciated it.
Anyway on to the review!
Pros:
1)Intriguing writing style, a mix of Shakespearean and modern literature, nice!
2)Usage of Italian (it is Italian right?) to set the mood. Yup, I play the piano, and I can tell what you're doing there.
3) Grammar. Quite nicely written, considering my eyes didn't bleed (that's a good thing)
Cons:
1) Usage of Italian to set the mood. Yes, this is a good thing, but ALSO a bad thing. I mean, people who could understand it would like it, but really, that means only people who understand it would appreciate it. It would just leave others with big question marks on their head.
2) Development, sure, the story was already nicely done, however, there's a teensy little problem. The development of the story has a bit too large a few gaps in between the... acts? Yeah, so that's one problem I spy.
Apart from that, to be honest, this sort of work is quite rarely seen. So yeah, I gotta say you are quite the brave soul to attempt maneuvering into this particular area.