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I love semicolons; though they are under appreciated.

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Both the Sunset and the Dazzlings were defeated with the Magic of Friendship. However after one strategic curse, the human girls have found them selves without it, and without Twilight. In order to fight magic with magic, the girls may have to take the risky route to rid their curse.

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Nice, can't wait to see what Trixie's going to do.

Oh, this is going to be good.

Trixie just can't catch a break.

Uh oh. I think I know what Trixie's up to.. :pinkiegasp:

Trixie, what did you DO?! :pinkiegasp:

how is the next chapter coming along?

None of us have any real information or past experience at all.

How does that even work? They're centuries old and for most of that time, their magic was weaksauce.

Comment posted by Powered by corn deleted Feb 8th, 2015
Comment posted by Powered by corn deleted Feb 8th, 2015

>>Europa

I appreciate how you caught that, because I forgot how the theory of young Dazzlings isn't widely accepted.
The way the Dazzlings acted in Rainbow Rocks gave me the impression of them only being in the human world for 5 years tops. It's just as likely that Star Swirl the Bearded also sent them forward in time.

TRRRIIIIIIIIXXXIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIEEEEEEE!!! :flutterrage:

the plot thickens.
but just one quick little error i found was:
For realizes.” Sonata replied
i think that should be for realzies, because she doesn't realize anything.
(note i wasn't looking so i don't know if there are any other errors)
:raritywink:

“How can we? We don’t really posses and magic to use.”

A) Possess any magic
B) That's a rather odd way to phrase things, considering the vast array of options for physical violence.

TRIIIIIIIXII-you know what, I'm done yelling. Very good chapter, it only gets better and better. :twilightsmile:

This was a good chapter, but I have two problems. One problem was that I noticed some spelling and grammar errors, but the biggest of them was Blooming Allusion's name. Going by her MO, her name should be Blooming Illusion. As allusion is a reference to something else, such as a literary work or television show, while an illusion is a falsity, a trick of light.

My second problem is the way the banished's backstories were given. Namely, they were in the narration rather than given by the people themselves. It took me out of the story. I'm not sure how they could be incorporated otherwise, but it could have been given next chapter, with Aria's comments being good foreshadowing. Otherwise, it was a good chapter.

5681256
Fixed the name, thanks for the catch. I read over my chapters at least two times each, but sometimes spelling errors get past me. I'll give it another look, thank you again.

5681644 You're very welcome! I'm glad you took the time to go through and correct those things. To me, that says that you have respect for your own work and want it to be the best it can be, and I respect that. Stay awesome!

These evil bastards... :twilightangry2:

I wonder what the dazzlings would look. You know in the box art they are flutter ponies but in the movie they are those hrse fish things. I wanted to belive that normally the 3 were flutter ponie but someone corrupted them into the sirens.

I have to say but those 3 are my favorite characters along sunset

How is twilight receiving messages with the portal open? I thought the book's magic needed to be siphoned off into the mirror in order for the portal to work outside of its 30 moon schedule?:trixieshiftleft:

When's the next chapter?

That went to 0 to 100 real quick.

It's actually kind of refreshing to find a fic in which Rainbow Dash is willing to possibly be cordial with the Sirens. I mean, it remains to be seen, but her behavior about going to go see them is certainly more positive than most other fics.

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