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The only issue I can see is, How did Sun know that the human was female? Were her clothes tight enough to give it away, or was she from some sort of tribe that only has females? Otherwise, you probably should've just called her an it, unless you can explain next time, (perhaps muttering in his mind,) about who the hell she is.

5918356 Thank you for the comment, I do appreciate any chance to help improve my stories. Sun had read about humans when he was younger so he was able to recognize that it was a female. I will be explaining who this character is in later chapters if not next chapter.

I like it! Keep it up! I'm always up for a good-old "Zelda crossover"!

7358387 'salutes' Thank you Will do! Still gotta finish up Chapter six though

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