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Wow other then a few errors this is great so far you'r getting a like and fav from me
5444005 THANKS!
Great chapter, only a few small errors. Can't wait for the next.
5444121 Thank you! I'm gonna try to post daily like last time!
please tell us, is Streak going to start showing the mane six what he can do though the mods he has like dimensional doors or the rest? i think to myself that dimensional doors will send twilight for a loop, a door that has dimension inside that has another a dimension inside, in other words bigger on the inside, timey wimey anyone?
5448254 That's what I've been planning for a while. And it will happen. But that's all I will say.
New dialogue style? Not sure if I like... Those arrows are almost too thin (on my screen) to see their colours.
Good chapter, can't wait for more.
5448815 Yeah, the mod requested I stop colored text. Apparently there's a rule against that. Anyway, I can just make the arrows bold. That might help! And thanks!
The proper spelling is ruse.
Great chapter, Go Luna!... Why don't they have a Luna emoticon?
5456074 Thanks for the correction! And there needs to be one!
Lyra Q&A
Your
Illusion
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Zecora part
Course
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Rainbow part
Caps
So we/I can
That.
A few other small mistakes in this paragraph.
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Damn, that took a while to write, great job with the chapter, ignoring the mistakes of course, I can't wait for the next one.
Ok I freaking love your work
I can't wait for the next chapter 
5462401 THANKS!
5462153 Sorry about all the mistakes. And thank you for the corrections/ compliment!
5463306 I actually don't care much about the mistakes, I'm just helping you out. I don't complain as long as it's readable.
5463351 Cool. I really like people like you. No homo if you're a guy.
How
Pseudo
Fuckin'
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The Link to his costume doesn't work.
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Caps
From
Form - I would suggest changing 'turn to anthro form' to 'change to anthro form'.
Three
From
You
Presence
How
Bye
Invisibility
Are
Course
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You seem to get from and form mixed up often, watch for that. Otherwise, these are common mistakes, I do everything on a mobile so... Yay, auto-correct.
Great job, can't wait for the next chapter.
She chased him for two hours? That is actually impressive, a human can outrun a horse in a race on a sunny day in half an hour. Humans are one of the most durable species on earth. Gotta love magic.
I love to spout random trivia I find on the Internet.
*hiss* I nearly despise the 'greater good'. It is the cause of the worst villains and tyrants, the biggest mistakes and broken hearts. For me, the idea of the greater good is a close second to a perfect world in being deceitfully good.
Hm, I wonder if Streaky can accelerate his mental processes... He is a robot.
5470910 For the trivia, Streak is a robot and Rainbow is the second fastest thing in that world. And I think I implied that Streak went at a pace where Dash could stay behind him... Anyway, I kinda thought the same about the greater good thing, I could't think of another way to put it at the time. And there will be a seen where his mental process is put to hyperdrive.
5471471 I'm not talking about speed, I'm talking about endurance.
A trained horse can gallop for 10-ish minutes, they can trot for nearly a whole day with breaks. Us humans on the other hand are meant for running, theoretically it's possible for us to run without stopping as long as we have food and water. The record for running is 3 days 8 hours 44 minutes (without stopping). Walking is 6 days 10 hours and 58 minutes.
It's mostly because we have 2 legs and most runners in the animal kingdom have 4, which take more energy to use. Rainbow dash has a pair of wings on top of that so she would be wasting nearly 3 times the energy we do. So... Magic! I could argue about this all day.
Did you see the corrections I posted under my last comment?
5472378 Oh, endurance! Heh... Yeah, I just put it under 'magic' and leave it at that too. And yes I just saw the comment. I just get home from my school around this time.
Caps
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Double space
Caps
Isn't
Unsure if this is a mistake
Change to my anthro
Where's
Caps
Wrapped
Her
At
Caps
Hand
Hover
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I, caps
Good chapter.
5475931 Despite ll the mistakes... Thanks!
Caps
Took
My
Went by or came by
They nod or they started to nod
They
Caps
Here
I never had another relationship
Caps
No space, caps
Unsure of what this is...
Otherhand
Caps
I think you meant 'my'
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Great chapter.
Why do I have the feeling that after he wipes out humanity, he'll start making his own races...
I know the perfect partner for him! Chryssie the adorable, sarcastic lovebug... Just kidding, what happened to her anyways?
5479912 Thank you for the corrections, and about his own race. Something will be created.... And little miss lovebug... She's been around, and Twi's been doing something to keep her from taking over again...
5479926 Your welcome.
I would like to see Chryssie again, she's in my top 3 favourite ponies.
5479953 No problem!
Tried something new.
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Good chapter.
5485756 Thank you.
You, sir, are a genius. Your misanthropic, sadistic god-robot character is the most relatable, most likable character I have ever seen in any fic ever. Truly, you are the next Steinbeck.
5496120 THANK YOU!!
5495868 Thank you again!
5497145
The Internet sucks at expressing sarcasm.
In all seriousness, this fic, like its predecessor, is riddled with problems. The biggest is its protagonist, Golden Streak.
Golden Streak is like if you took Golden Age Superman and removed everything that made him likable. Streak is not only invincible, but he can shape shift, spawn any material he wants, and kill anything that opposes him. He's just as fast as Rainbow Dash, kinder than Fluttershy, and smarter than Twilight. Not only that, but he personally destroyed the value of gold by flooding the market withinfinitely spawned gold ingots, destroying the value of the bit and plunging Equestria into a deep economic depression.
Even worse, Streak's has an obvious sadistic side, one which his friends cheerfully brush aside, and an overall hatred for humanity. According to him, humans, with the exception of "nice" people like him, are greedy, chaotic, and bloodthirsty.
Having god-like powers must have gone to his head, because he's perfectly fine with destroying a few cities for fun or killing his foes in the most brutal ways possible.
Our hero, ladies and gentlemen: a misanthropic sadist with a god complex.
Bottom line, this fic is irreperable. Even if you corrected the countless grammatical and spelling mistakes, it's still tainted by Golden Streak. My recommendation: scrap the fic, read a few of the higher quality fics on this site, and try again with a more original concept.
Best regards:
Flint-Lock
5498030 Oh. Well... Ummm... Ooookaaay? One: Streak has only killed a swarm of changelings. Two, he accidentally destroyed man kind. Three, he made his own race to replace humans. And even though he's sadistic, he hasn't or hurt anybody for the fuck of it, there's a reason. The changelings begin a stupid reason. And about the Equestrian economy. I did some digging and found that there is a theory out there where season's 1-4 are in the middle of a gold rush. That explains all the gold already used by Equestrians. If you haven't noticed Streak's god like powers have not completely gone to his head. He destroyed a city or two out of a fit of rage. And that has only happened two times. If anything his temper can be slightly comparable to Tia's. SLIGHTLY. And you forget that there are minecraft physics here, meaning he has survival and creative mode (He can die), and the he stays on survival and switches for emergencies only. And he doesn't go ape shit with his powers. I do respect you for typing all of that by the way.
I can understand this kind of thing to a small extent, but come on. I read at twice the average speed and I'm good at sports, do I consider myself too 'cool'? Hell no.
I'll laugh if he just ends up having a completely normal life without any family issues... Wait, was that mentioned at one point? Meh, I'm too lazy to check.
Have a problem? Throw chaos magic at it.
Call now and you can get not one, not two, but three containers of Chaos Magic™ for only $19.99. any and all problems, side effects and fishmen invasions aren't our fault so if you fuck up, it's your problem to deal with.
Good chapter, good luck with the next one.
5507015 thank you, I figured chaos magic can be useful at times. So I thought, 'Why not?'.
Sorry, but I won't be able to do corrections until Monday, this weekend will be busy for me. A quick one is that you misspelt the teacher's name; it's not Cheerily, it's Cheerilee.
Good luck.
5514750 Thank you! And I do understand, don't worry about it!
Wait you play gta 5? WHAT CONSOLE!!!
5522258 PC!!! I COMPLETELY SWITCHED OVER TO PC A WHILE AGO!!
Can you be more fucking loud?
I CAN!!
joy, calm down please.
Okay!
Everything after this is in italics
I'll get started on proofreading the previous chapters in a bit, I've been having a lazy week.
5537833 I feel ya.
Ah, family shopping trips, good luck with that.
Good chapter, can't wait for the next. Good luck.
5550541 Thank you!
The last paragraph is completely bolded.
Good chapter.
5556095 Thank you.
...Why are the Mane 6 friends with him?
5562807 Cause they found he has no other friends.
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Why haven't they used the Elements to turn Goldilocks into a puddle of molten metal?
5563968 he would just absorb all the magic and just become a huge beast.