The product of NaNoWriMo 2014.
Equestria has many odd things lurking in the shadows, but what of that which is hidden in plain sight? A massive, impenetrable wall of ascending water separates the world in two. So the question is asked, what is on the other side? A group of conspirators purpose themselves to find out, and will do anything necessary to get what they want. Join in the adventure as the ponies of Equestria are thrown into an adventure of the century, and the question that comes along with it all. Are you the prime, or are you the copy?
A great big thank you to Angelic Flight or Onyx Penstroke for the cover art. Check them out if you get the time and need a bit of art.
Chapters (14)
how does this story have no comments
6019448 Maybe because people just think that it doesn't need it. Maybe because when I was releasing chapter it was already known it was finished and I was just slapping chapters on as the weeks went on. Might be because people know I want them and so don't comment just to spite me. Honestly it's anyone's guess.
The pacing of the story is kinda there (sometimes is good and sometimes is bad). Some jokes were unnecessary (like Discord breaking the fourth wall) and some character appearances were unnecessary as well (like Cadance at the end and the Doctor, and his reflection as they served no purpose for the story). The ending was very abrupt and the last segment in the epilogue had something interesting going for it but by this point it just feel forced.
Maybe a rewrite or some editing on this story would fix those issues since this story has potential to become something good.
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Thank you for the comment and criticism. I understand the problem with pacing, I try my best, but it can possibly be the effect of me being rushed during NaNoWriMo. I also tend to agree with your view on some of the jokes, I'm not much of a comedian and I admit it. There are many things to improve, as you said, and in all likelihood I'll eventually have enough time to review and rewrite. Once again, thank you for the comment and criticism. I'll endevour to improve in the future.
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You welcome, for more feedback (and views) I also recommend you to feature this in the Shameless Self-Promotion Bureau, The Writers Group and I want a comment. You'll have guaranteed (at least) more views and maybe one or two comments regarding the story.