A father must send his son into the future to stop an event he knows will come, but is powerless himself to stop. Although in an unknown future filled with things he never experienced, he will not stand alone, as he makes friends that will help him every step of the way. Join the colt, Blaze Eternal, as he must charge head first into danger. And what of his enemy? Who is he, and where did he come from, and slightly more importantly, what in Equestria is he? With nothing but a devastating dream to work off of, and the wall of fake memories given by his father for protection, Blaze must fight an enemy that has lived longer than any.
Chapters (47)
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5126720 What? Do you disapprove of the story?
Just as a general note, I willingly accept all comments that contain criticism or praise or general discussion on how the story is and how it may be improved. I understand certain people won't like my ideas, it's just how people are. But I only ask that people say why they do not or do like my story. I you are going to give a bad review to this story I want to know why so I can address the problem if I can. If the reason you don't like this story is just the description, I ask you to please at least try and give it a chance, but if you won't, I won't hold it against you. So please, with any review I wish to know your thoughts behind why you say what you say or do what you do so that I know what I am doing wrong so I can change it and what I did right so I can try and keep to it. That is all, have a good day.
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1.- I'm about to start reading your story, so I will tell you (once I read everything, although, if I find something worth to note I will tell you) any advice I can have for you.
2.- I recommend you to feature this in more places, but I will feature this in two places where they could help you (but you must ask for it).
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Not entirely certain how to respond to this (might be because I'm tired), but thank you for any help you can give.
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You welcome ;)
Ok, the main problem I find on this story is that it isn't engaging enough and the pacing goes either too fast, or too slow.
Another problem is that it isn't expressive enough, we don't see the opinions or read the expressions the main characters tend to make, this needs a lot of rewriting or analysis to discard what works and doesn't work.