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I love this story.
5453946 I'm glad.
Why do I feel the iPod isn't the only thing in his arm?
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Laser blade
Mini rail gun
Internet browser
Camera
Sound recorder
Games
5453995 I was thinking a couple knives. Some of those would change the mass present in his arm, which would upset his balance. The laser blade might be a possibility, but he has no trouble with elbows, so either it is made from some form of memory metal, or a thin sheet of flexible plastic. Or it's got a really small projection system. Yes, I do have a lot of free time and an active imagination, why do you ask?
5454039
The knives could work
But this was a gift from some people so I think a weapon would be very unrealistic
But I have been wrong in the past so maybe
But then again I have been right in the past
5454045 The camera and a sort of emergency beacon as well as a sound recorder would make the most sense with the iPod acting as a browser interface. Maybe a USB plug in the thumb? We don't really know what era of human history or future he comes from after all.
A fitting song for Ash
I went for the minecraft one, because I like it better and ponies would understand it better than the original.
I doubt they'd understand the references to St. Peter or Jerusalem bells.
Another great chapter
Great chapter. The fighting scene was great.
cant wait for more!
good job see you next chapter
this song comes in mind
5459872 Great beat I wonder what Vinyl could do with that
Like the story and hope to see more but watch out for the Gary stu syndrome (seriously is there something he can't do). Anyways hope you have a good day
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I think this song suits Ash better
5469094 They both fit so let's compromise with
5469539 Ok if you say so
When will there be more
I'm not going to read your fic. Why? It's because instead of 3 to 4 scentences in your summary, you have one run-on sentence.
5488185 and in exchange, you are missing the chance to read an amazing story.
5469094 this?
Carribean theme is fitting for the tavrn brawl.
Tudun tududundun tudundundun dan!
So much fuckin badassness he has scars too really badass I can has all the badassness in the universe. He's almost as badass as me
>>Canis lupus lycaon Dude pls...
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That tavern must see a lot of fighting since the band has appropriate fighting music
5453995 don't forget the mini shotgun
Ok I was starting to really like this story till now, or just before now. Basically when he was doing what he was doing vs Discord. He's just too..... I don't know the word for it. He can draw, fight like batman, has a artificial arm that plays music, was raised by wolves and still speaks english, somehow. Now has magic, has a tragic life story, can make weapons, an expert at parkour, has the body of Goku, is all good expect when doing stuff like bullying and etc, turned into a wolf then sadly quickly back into a human. Has a version of nightmare moon in him. Am I missing anything? It's just too much for one person, it's just too far fetched. Even superman will all his powers is like "Seriously...?"
I won't be fav'ing or liking the story, but I won't be doing the opposite either. But like the dragons, I'm out.
Thine
Sadly the fight music does not want to play. So I missed out on that. But some badass awesomeness of a chapter. Love it.
7012622 Fixed it.
5986841 He's a Pirate.
Funny, I thought the exact same thing.
You know you can't do a POV of someone who's not even in the room right?
7124122 I like the one from Strangers tides better.
6347944 I'm still going to read because I'm thinking "this many likes can't be wrong" and also se what good I can pry out of it. But I'm in complete agreement with you're feelings on the matter.
Mary Sue/Gary Stu is the term you might be looking for. Someone who's characteristics are just so...overwhelming? He's written the "perfect" edgy protagonist who happens to have just the right soul crushing backstory and traits appear at the drop of the hat when the narrative calls for it.
Still going to continue onward and enjoy the lean and mean of the story, but my above observation is definitely a constant source of unease to me throughout.
How this story got so many likes I'll never know. I thought that maybe, just maybe it might have gotten better the further I got but no, it just got worse. So much worse.
I'm going to be brutally honest. The story telling is horrible, it's like a robot wrote this. There's no emotion, no build up, it's just word vomit. Your protagonist is literally every bad self insert fanfic trope rolled into one, and it's not even ironic to boot. You need to slow the hell down and learn how to structure properly.
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Chill, I'm pretty sure almost every one on here is not a book selling Author, and are here to write for the hell of it. Also it's his story let him write it how he wants, if you don't like it write your own story how you want to. Instead of complaining quite literally the only things necessary in your comment were slow down, and add a little more emotion.
THEE...THY...THOU...I have yet to see ANYONE get these right when Luna uses the royal we.
My only problem is the weapon forging the rest is quite believable, it's not that hard to fight, using basic magic *maybe not teleportation like shown in this chapter, to be fair he was boosted by the elements though* 16 years is not enough time to learn something like weapon forging, maybe basic weapon forging but something like a professional forge master *like shown in story* is NOT believeable why you may ask, it's simple yes he would know better materails make better weapons but it takes years to learn how to forge properly *I'm a historian have to know this crap* it takes minimun for a decent forge around 5-10 years to be taught properly, like I said my only other problem is the magic usage the spell used while he was fighting discord is waaaay to advanced for him to seriously be able to know, those are my problems with this chapter
Nice classic bar fight