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The Blue Grimoire
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The Blue Grimoire
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Good story, pleantly of background info and the build up was ok. However it did feel quite a bit rushed about halfway through. Not sure if you were going for clop or just a quick romance though it feels lacking in both forms. Might I ask what your intent was when typing this up?
5731148 Well actually I have been working on this long then I want to admit but personal things happened that made me put the story away and whenever I would try and write again I couldn't really get into it at the time.
I've only recently built enough confidence to get back to actually make a story again. I do thank you for pointing this out to me. It shows that I just have to keep trying to improve.
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And with an attitude like that I am certain you will improve. Like I said this wasn't a bad idea. Feeling rushed at the end of 7k plus words can happen. Just thought the clop would have been longer for all that build up. Sorry I'm not a great critic tht could point out a mistake or two and provide advice to help you more.
5731202 Its okay. I still appreciate the criticism :)
Well, since I'm straight I couldn't enjoy this from a sexual standpoint, especially when he went up the scientist's ass. It was kind of sexually confusing when the changleing seemed to have a vagina in his anus, I have to admit. So was it kind of like a cloaca?
5732028 Yes actually. I kinda gave myself a challenge with the Changeling. I wanted to try something different besides giving them normal sexual characteristics and the idea kinda came to me.
Welp, props to the awesome style in writing but this story was wierd. I got interested in what was going to happen in the end but i don't know...
this needs a sequel.
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This needs to be turned into a story.