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The Blue Grimoire


Just your simple writer wishing to share some stories

Comments ( 13 )

Uh...this is kinda harsh. I love a knightly character and his demeanor was pretty cool but Chrysalis was...dark, and that kinda killed the mood for me.

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I know but the idea struck me and I had to write it out. I wanted to make her a darker character then she actually is. And it looks like it had the desired effect.

Sorry it ruined the flow for you though. My next stories won't be as dark, but depending on what comes to mind it could be possible.

And congrats on being the first comment on my first story on here! :)

Great storyline...Off to a good start,but the only "peeve" I would have is in the line ;"The second was the announcement of a piece treaty"...In the usage of the word "piece"...It should be "peace" instead....Other than that...Great Job....:pinkiehappy:

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Thank you for catching and telling me that. I've already fixed it. And thank you very much:heart:

5042685 No problem. My biggest problem with darker characters is that it's a tough balance between being slightly darker and being so dark I wanna run you through with a sword.
Your idea was very good and your writing was solid so I really don't have much to point out, it's just a really good one shot.

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I know what you mean. Trust me it was hard trying to keep her at the level I had her in this. I had a much more cruel that I'm sure would have made people cry.

Thank you very much!

that ending... it was good to see him and celestia have closure but it still makes for a sad ending. ohh t the feels. i really feel bad for the marco character... justice needs to be served that's what i feel.

good story - clop or no clop i want to see another story on marco.

kudos for making a story i feel emetionally invested.

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This truly means a lot to me. it warms my heart that you became so emotionally invested in my story. :heart:

And who knows? Maybe the tale of Marco could continue again...:eeyup:

5081199 would you? :raritystarry:
I just hope everybody can have a happy ending (yes everybody, that includes chrysalis :raritywink:).

Regardless of what you choose to write, i'm definitely going to keep an eye out for your stories. Oh and thnx for taking the time to make a reply.

5082004 Maybe at some point in the future but for now I'll just leave it as is.
No problem at all! I want my readers to feel like they can talk to me and that I'm always listening. :raritywink:

I forgot what story made me to follow you so i checked your stories and saw this.

Wow, i got to say this is one of my most favorite one shots ever. No wonder you're in my list :rainbowkiss:

5839915 I'm happy you still love it so much :). I plan on making a sequel to this one in the next couple of weeks. The tale of Marco shall continue!

Well I will say this is the first fanfic where rape is involved that I have read but I did like it though I wish Marco could take revenge on chrysalis

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