Out of the Shadows

The CMC all have their cutie marks now. But Apple Bloom feels like they have to change something that's been a part of who they are these past years. What do Scootaloo and Sweetie Belle think about this?

Written for One-shotober.

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BewhoUr

BewhoUr #1 · Oct 5th, 2014 · · ·

Very nice little fic.
I didn't spot any mistakes, and the whole thing is perfect, including the topic.
Have a like, fave, and follow!

2006midnight

2006midnight #2 · Oct 5th, 2014 · · ·

5101819 Perfect?! Maybe I should write while feeling like crap more often....

BewhoUr

BewhoUr #3 · Oct 5th, 2014 · · ·

5101831
You definitely should.
Don't let the dreary feeling of nothing to do on the weekend get you down!

2006midnight

2006midnight #4 · Oct 5th, 2014 · · ·

5101836 Nothing to do but vomit that is....

goaway

goaway #5 · Oct 5th, 2014 · · ·

with a wry smile, “It’s not

You don't need to capitalise the next bit of dialogue after a comma.

Now that we’ve all gotten ur cutie marks,

Our.

Those are the only two issues I noticed. Sweet story.

2006midnight

2006midnight #6 · Oct 5th, 2014 · · ·

5101850 The comma is actually the mistake there, but thank you for pointing those out. I'll fix them right now.

BewhoUr

BewhoUr #7 · Oct 5th, 2014 · · ·

5101837
Yikes, hope you feel better soon. Or maybe not if you write such good stuff when you're sick! Isn't that kinda mean?
LOL MAYBE
Apologize!
Fine… but really, keep writing! And really, feel better soon!