Hard Training

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The Blessed One

The Blessed One #1 · Sep 23rd, 2014 · · ·

Well... that was... short and sweet... I'm straight so, why in God's name did I just read this?

Still, not many problems with grammar so... have a like.

Edit: I see your a new author, with a story and start to this site with this few grammatical problems? You are one to watch my friend

DjLoneless

DjLoneless #2 · Sep 23rd, 2014 · · ·

5042083 Plus English is not my native language. I'm German... and thank you <3

GeodesicDragon

GeodesicDragon #3 · Sep 23rd, 2014 · · ·

You need to change the rating of this to 'Mature.'

Other than that, as well as a few grammatical errors, it wasn't bad.

DjLoneless

DjLoneless #4 · Sep 23rd, 2014 · · ·

5045074 Yeah. As I already said here in the comments: I'm German... And we had a new grammar lesson today which was containing some of the things I did wrong here. School... 10th grade... English since 8 years and talking English since 1 year for me. I was really bad at it before I became a brony.

DjLoneless

DjLoneless #5 · Sep 23rd, 2014 · · ·

5045074 PS: I'm absolutely not one who is great at telling stories or even writing a new one. I'm more the kind of artist and average good DJ.
To be honest... I just wrote this story, because I've seen someone writing one for the friend I did this one *gasp* and to make him hard x3

GeodesicDragon

GeodesicDragon #6 · Sep 23rd, 2014 · · ·

5045191

The story you are referring to wouldn't happen to be called 'The Good Stuff,' would it?

echoblood

echoblood #7 · Sep 29th, 2014 · · ·

i haven't read the story and im not going to, but I have to thank the writer for the extremely obvious warning.
I just read a story and almost had to gouge my eyeballs out with a spoon (not exaggerating)
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/219386/rainbows-problem
read if you don't believe me.
and again props to writer for warning.