Pinkie Promise
“It’s going to be okay Pinkie…” Cheese whispered.
Pinkie didn’t move; she just stared out the window, stroking her long pink strands of hair. Cheese touched her shoulder to comfort her, he found she was trembling.
“Shh… come here” Cheese pulled Pinkie against his chest, feeling warm tears wet his fur. He hummed to her softly, trying to slow her labored breathing. “Everything is going to be alright” he cooed gently, rubbing his hoof along her back. Pinkie just whimpered, drinking in his smell, resting her head, listening to his beating heart. That was all she needed at that moment, to be held, to be protected from the world, sheltered from the raging storm beyond.
Cheese sighed, watching the trees outside the train slip by. He had to be strong, if only for her, but as he felt her breathing slow to a sleepy pace, he too, let a tear run down his face. So he held onto her, watching the outside world race away from him, out of his grasp, and his tears fell like the rain outside.
The train glided over the tracks, rain bombarding its sleek sides. The moon shone off the radiant metal as it progressed towards the capital city. It seemed to be the only thing alive under the moon’s glow, giving breath to the cold night; a night that it seemed as if the heavens themselves were crying.
Pinkie stood at the massive doors before her, the early morning sun giving a certain harshness to them. She pulled a straight strand of hair from her face before tapping lightly on those huge, malevolent slabs of wood.
The two ponies huddled under the awning of the awesome building before them, the pattering of rain the only sound on the lonely street.
Light poured out from behind the door as it was opened. Celestia smiled “Hello Pinkie Pie, can I help you?”
The two looked at each other and Pinkie lowered her head, giving a small nod, following Celestia into the spacious castle. Pressing against Cheese nervously, she looked up and down the endless halls. It was so clean, so chokingly structured. The castle was ominous.
Celestia paused at a gaping room, turning to Pinkie “It would be best if I spoke to you one at a time.” She said formally. Cheese and Pinkie exchanged eye contact, and Pinkie took a step forward. She lifted her head, raising her dripping, flat hair off the ground and pressed her face against Cheese’s neck one last time before entering the room.
Pinkie had never felt so small before in her entire life. She stood below an impressively tall throne, with an even taller figure inside it. “What has made it such an urgent and late trip to Canterlot Pinkie Pie?” Celestia asked.
Pinkie sucked in a deep breath, turning away from the imposing figure. “Princess please, I need to ask you a favor.” Pinkie said dryly, holding back tears. Celestia smiled “What would that be, I should be able to help, and after all, you are the element of laughter”.
The mare’s eyes lit up with hope. “Oh thank goodness, well it’s just that Cheesie’s birthday got drawn for the draft, so you can just revoke it.” Pinkie chirped, satisfied by the simplicity of the task.
Celestia’s face fell “Oh Pinkie Pie I’m afraid I can’t do that, I’m sorry”.
“Wha-what?” Pinkie shrunk back in horror “What do you mean you can’t do that?”
Celestia sighed “I’m sorry Pinkie Pie I can’t pull him from enlistment; too many ponies have good relations with the capital. If I make an exception for you, I would have to for everypony who asked. Our royal guard isn’t big enough to fend off the invasions coming in from the border. You understand don’t you?”
Pinkie stumbled backward “No-no Cheesie is a party pony. It’s his job to make ponies smile, to love, to laugh. Please you can’t do this!” Pinkie felt her throat tighten as tears welled in her eyes.
Celestia frowned “I’m sorry Pinkie Pie, my hooves are tied.”
“No y-you can’t do this!” Pinkie screamed, tears clouding her vision “You can’t take him away!”
“I’m sorry he has to stay in the capital, the recruits will arrive in the morning.” The white alicorn said without any emotion at all.
“No, I won’t let you!” shrieked Pinkie, her muscles tightened and she felt as if her heart would explode. She watched the guards creep closer, locating the screams.
Pinkie dove for the door, scrambling to get to her hooves beneath her on the marble floors. She sprinted away as the guards followed behind her.
Pinkie collided with Cheese, bawling as she clung to him. “Cheesie they’re going to take you away!” Pinkie sobbed.
Cheese lifted Pinkie up, cupping her chin and wiping tears from her eyes. You’re going to be okay Pinkie!” Cheese murmured, cradling her head.
Pinkie looked up at him with tear filled eyes. “Pinkie promise you’ll be okay” Pinkie whispered her eyes fixed on his. “I love you so much” Cheese whimpered, and Pinkie felt his tears fall into her mane.
“There they are” shouted one of the guards. Turning the corner and grabbing Pinkie under her arms, another restraining Cheese.
“No!” Pinkie gasped, trying to get her footing on the marble floor, trying to stop herself from being pulled away. “Cheese promise, Pinkie promise!” she screamed, but the doors closed before her, cutting him away like a knife.
This is what Pinkie thought of as she stood there numb. He looked so peaceful, he had to be sleeping. Pinkie wished that, more than anything, just for him not to be so cold, so heart shatteringly cold, to be dancing around and not lying still. He wasn’t, he was gone, torn away, nothing but a memory. A small chest wound leaving Pinkie Equestria’s only party pony. Pinkie planted a gentle kiss on his forehead, tears falling into his chocolate mane.
Why couldn’t you have Pinkie promised….
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4373921
Thank you so much
4373949 No Problem!
That is the saddest thing I've ever read...
It was also amazing. I loved it. Please, write more!
Your grammar was amazing, your spelling was amazing, your storyline was amazing. You have great potential as an author, I can feel it.
4374077 Thank you so much! This story is an one shot, but I hope to get a multi chapter Cheesepie fic out soon :)
4374129
Can't wait to read it! I did one, too, if you wanna check it out.
Here it is: The Most Ultimate Party!
4374146 I've read your story, it's very good
Oh, crud.
Well--that was sad. I think you do have promise! Welcome to the ranks o' CheesePie writers. We are few, we are proud, and above all, we are mushy.
There are a few spots that need a bit of editing--nothing major. The paragraph beginning "Pinkie sucked in a breath": there needs to be a paragraph break when Celestia speaks, and then there needs to be a comma after "said.
The other thing is that I want to know a bit more about why Equestria is in a shooting war. (By "shooting war," I don't mean bullets--I just mean a long term war, other than the skirmishes they usually seem to have.) And don't misinterpret: I am a huge sucker for WWI romance, and you really caught the essence of that. It could just use a tiny bit of fleshing out. And that's just for later fics, down the road, which of course you are going to write.
4374300 Thanks for the welcome
Thanks for the point outs on the grammar! I will try to work on it in my next story, which will indeed exist!
This is very amazing. We should partner up, dood!
I am 13 years old and am a female writer on the website and it's nice to see someone closer to my age! 
I love this shipping and loved it ever since that Cheese Sandwich episode! 
I love the way you describe the surroundings, and like what 4374300 said, WWI romance stories are to...die...for. Dammit...
Anyway, I couldn't help but notice
I think you need a " before 'You're'.
Very cool story! It would be awesome to see more!
-CHLOE OUT
4374381 message me I'd be up for a collab :)
Ohmigsh... I can`t stand Pinkie dying.. and now Cheese died, and I like him even more ... I even "like like" him. I'm not kidding...
Oh crud, I actually typed that!
Muh, who cares? It doesn't really matter.
I'm sorry for not faving this. Don't kill meh!
4375253 why would I do that :)
For your first story this is really well done. It's a bit too sad for me though. I'd be happy to edit it as soon as I get my PC fixed ( I'm stuck with my iPod at the moment). I'm interested to see what other stories you come up with. Keep it up!
I... I got chills from reading this. Is that normal?
4376878 I don't typically write sadfics, and am hoping to get something multi chapter and lighthearted out soon
This was so sad I nearly choked on my tears
But very well done.
4377680 thanks
Im so confused.
4375322 Becuz I didn't fave?
4378999 I think that this is an alternate universe where some kind of war is going on, and Celestia needed every available staillion to fight, and at the end, Cheese had died, and his body was brought back to Pinkie.
4374195
Why thank you!
I'll read yours once you post it!
the feeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeels I have read many stories were pinkie died but this time cheese died why do he have to die
NO!
Awwwwww...
WHY! WHY DID YOU HAVE TO TEAR THEM APART!
Two lovers torn apart by a war oh the humanity! Celestia why? How can you be so cruel to do that to them cheese was an accordion player not a soilder!
Okay i am better now. Really this story was good and i hope to see more from you.
4966216 Thanks :)
4968114
You're welcome.
This thing almost made me cry (I know I'm a monster XD). I love this ship and Cheese is my favorite secondary character...
The feels are real!
Im not kidding
It took me a while to wrap my head around the idea ofna war but once i figured it out.. awe man! Thats deep.
Great job dude
Ouch. My heart. That. Ouch.