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Stories are dreams on screen~

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In an Equestria, where all the princesses and elements are gone, where the Sun and the Moon are frozen in the sky, Cheese Sandwich tries to stay alive by performing on the streets. He sings about the past, but all the memories combined cannot return his beloved Pinkie Pie.

Second: Music of Laughter
Third: Tears of Laughter

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 11 )

I certainly am not going to kill you for that! You gave us a glimpse of an AU dystopian future. Wow. Poor Cheese.

Just one thing, though. The past tense of "to shine" is "shone." Reading the same grammatical mistake over and over kept pulling me out of the story. Luckily, it's a very easy fix!

Nice work!


4430565 Okay, that was really stupid of me! Sorry! :derpytongue2: It should be fixed now. Thanks for pointing it out!

Oh, smoof, I'm sad now... :fluttercry:

4430565 You mean poorer than poor Cheese.:fluttercry::raritycry::raritydespair:

He's so perfect and cheerful..... but now he's just broken.... poor him... even his hair is flat from depression.. Im sorry I got kinda... emtional.. I-I just... fell in love with Cheese over time... I mean it...:fluttercry:

There, there... Al...
There, there.

... The tears won't stop... ;_;

4430626 No problem! Easy fix, as I said, and now it scans better, too.

Would you like me to create art for this fan fiction here is my deviantart account. Feel free to comment back if you're interested http://duskanddashie.deviantart.com

5066513 Yes please! That would be amazing! :pinkiehappy:

5067378 okay I will probably get on it soon. :yay:

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