Hello! I'm Fauna Flight, a lesbian pony. ❤️
It's only so simple-
It's an 1,000-worded love letter by Pinkie Pie.
She wanted to only make her special somepony happy, and so she started this not too long ago.
Later on in her life, she became determined to complete this.
She hopes that you read this, and that you truly understood how much she cares for him.
There is only so much you could do for your love, anyway, and she wished to write her feelings out.
Your Courageous Informer,
Dream
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I shall read this in a matter of minutes, as I am busy at the moment.
It shall be read, that I swear. ~Golden
Uh how did she get an infection in the first place? At first it sounded like that disease where your body gets hard from extra bone growth.
The title should have been: If You Teared Up By 1,048 Words
Yeah, I teared up...
Also, is it weird that the infection thing reminded me of Trapped in the Drive Thru by Weird Al?
I'm going to be harsh on this one. I'm sorry, but the letter format doesn't work for how you presented the idea. Why wasn't she writing multiple letters and sending them out? Writing one long letter makes no sense, unless she has some kind of debilitating mental disorder in conjunction with the other stuff that makes it so she didn't realize the distinction. I could see him writing on it at the end, maybe, but honestly, this would have been much better if it were written to show Pinkie dealing with this stuff in each scene, while it's happening to her, instead of her writing about it while it's happening. It would have also made more sense if you made it a diary, and not a letter.
It doesn't work as it is, so it's really hard for me to enjoy the sadness.
Plus, he adopted this foal, but the foal doesn't know that Pinkie isn't her mother? That's kind of weird, unless he adopted her as a baby and so she was too young to remember anything different. Even so, he's lying to this poor filly just to make himself feel better, which is kind of disconcerting. Plausible, but disconcerting nonetheless.
Really bad execution, but not a bad idea.
*sniffles* that about does it for my feels quota..
also listen to this while reading
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gIuotFZnBtk
1. NO. KILLING. PARTY. PONIES. GOT THAT?!?
2. Cheese, come on! She was dying!
3. Now I`m sd.
P.S how did she get the infection in the first place?
4042736 U forgot 2
I'm sorry I didn't cry. ITS NOT BECAUSE I'M STONEHEARTED I PROMISE!!!
I just don't cry easily.
4043303 LOL
THA FEEEEEEEELS
OWWWWW
MY HEART
NO WHY
ARGHGHGGHHHHJ
*CRYING* This was so sad that I have no words to describe my feelings
4044089 I think he meant it like Pinkie and him were married and adopted her and than pinkie "ran away"
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Except that Cheese is lying about Pinkie being dead. Why lie about that part? This filly thinks Pinkie is still alive somewhere and that she might be able to meet her mother some day, when she can't. I understand if she's too young to comprehend his deep emotional desire for Pinkie to be the filly's mother, and he can't explain that until she's older, but this filly is in for a shock once she understands death and how she'll never get to meet Pinkie.
I consider that cruel. It would make sense if he made a mistake, but that doesn't change what it is. It also unintentionally mars the memory of Pinkie and his love for her. After all, what's his excuse for why Pinkie ran off? What exactly did he tell his adopted daughter? Even if he told her that she ran away because he did something wrong, that's incorrect and not at all in loving memory of Pinkie. He's just beating himself up further over something he had no control over for convoluted reasons. It's better to wait until she's older and explain the truth.
All he had to say is "my wife" or he could say, "the mare I love is gone, but in spirit she's your mother." Above all else, he may one day move on and love again, so lying about Pinkie like this could create further complications later, when he has to tell the truth. Worse yet, what if his daughter thinks he's lying about the truth when he eventually reveals that Pinkie is dead? There's the note on the letter from Nurse Redheart, but that's not an actual death certificate. His daughter is going to be really upset once she understands and lying about this when she's little isn't going to help.
This is a major trust issue that could become a very interesting story unto itself.
I honestly did tear up a bit when Pinkie died. Not because of the feels. If this story were to actually illicit an emotional response from me, I'd go see a psychiatrist. I teared up because I just put out a campfire outside, and I still had smoke in my eyes.
Truth is, this story just isn't very good. Character portrayal varies from in-character to stupid. Constant moments popping up that just pull me out of the narrative to think to myself, "That's not how that should have happened."
This is the reason I don't read sadfics: They're almost never sad.
On the rare occasion that it might have been sad, it's usually manufactured to be so, and my sadness is just replaced with annoyance.
So, here I sit; mildly annoyed, and also perplexed at the polarized reception this story has received.
It shouldn't be getting praise. It shouldn't be getting rage. It is forgettable; and therefore, it should be forgotten.
Sorry, no tears were shed. At all.
First reason: I'm a stone cold motherfucker, so getting me to have feelings of sadness about a fictional story takes a well crafted narrative that has fairly immersive presentation. I can count on two hands the times anything fictional has ever brought about the sort of sadness you're trying to instill here.
Second Reason: this is only 1,000 words. That just isn't enough time to get a reader properly invested in the characters or their personal conflicts. It's barely enough to get the exposition of the story out in a flowing, natural way. I still hold that a good chapter of a story is somewhere between 2,500-5,000 words, and a good short story should easily surpass 5,000 at minimum.
Third Reason: you use a format that just skull fucks any immersion I could have had for this story. It's very stilted and cut down to the bare bones. There's never a description of the physical elements of the story that feels like I can actually picture this happening in my head, and even less of the emotional elements which are the whole point of this kind of fic.
I'm sorry, but this was just dull for me. It went nowhere and just dragged me along, trying way to hard to give me an emotional reaction. The silver lining is at least it was a short story. If I'd had to read more than a thousand words of this, I probably would have given it a pass in the first place.
So touching
It's amazing and fabulous great job! 
Hello everypony!
This was a fanfic I made back when I was in 7th grade. It was terribly sloppy and horrible.
I cannot even muster reading this.
I am no-longer a brony however I still indeed like the show.
I hope everypony has a great day!
- Dream
Behold, another case of great idea; poor execution.
I think what this story suffered the most from was less showing and more telling. You tell what happens to the letter(s?) as Pinkie's condition gets worse, but you don't show it. I think if you used formatting to your advantage, this story could've been better.
Do you mind if I rewrite it? I'll credit you.