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OfficialDerp


Amateur writer. I don't write as much as I used to. Sometimes I forget that life isn't Tumblr.

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What happens when a certain party pony comes back around to town? Parties galore!!! Cheese Sandwich comes back to Ponyville, this time with more parties than before! He collaborates once again with Pinkie, making for a party even better than Rainbow Dash's Birthaversary Bash! But wait... what's this? Afterwards he wants to... stay?

Chapters (7)
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Grammar, plot, character.

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Update! I loved it I need more!!

Awww it was great! I loved it! Please update soon! :pinkiehappy:

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Don't worry, I'll try to update weekly! :pinkiehappy:

About the DJ, was it Vinyl/DJ Pon3? Anyway I loved that chapter and I hope you'll update soon! :pinkiehappy:

Love this story so far! :pinkiehappy: I don't want to wait a week for the next chapter! :fluttercry: :heart:

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Yes! You got it right!!! :twilightsmile:

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Awww thank you! :twilightblush:
It makes me happy to know that people like what I do!

Too cute!!! :pinkiegasp:
I loved the song! :pinkiehappy: I attempted to sing it in my own little tune ahah... didn't turn out well hehe! :pinkiesad2:

I really am loving this story! Cannot wait for the next chapter! :pinkiehappy:

I loved the song! Is it yours? Because it was really good, I have almost been singing it myself while reading. Also it was a great chapter! I hope you'll update soon! :pinkiehappy:

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Thank you!:twilightsmile: And yes, I did write the song. Since I can't come up with a tune to save my life, however, I just let the readers (you guys) come up with it yourselves. If you think of something that'll work, please let me know! I'd love to see what you guys think up!:derpytongue2:

Also, If you liked this chapter, just wait till the next one!:pinkiehappy:

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:pinkiegasp: Now you've gotten me all excited!! :pinkiehappy:

Another fun chapter but I do have a touch of advice. Please, for the love of all that is holy, stop ending every sentence in their conversations with exclamation points. Exclamation points need to be saved and used sparingly. Otherwise the characters end up sounding like they're deaf or angry at each other and the general feeling is :flutterrage:

So, I think this latest chapter would be a lot better if you found another method to convey excitement other than exclamation points.

But I do enjoy reading your story. I liked the little bit with Pinkie pecking him on the cheek. So cute! I can't wait to see where you go with his Cheesie sense. I'm wondering what to do with it in my story too. Best of luck.

Nice job with this chapter. I can't wait for the next one. Best of luck.

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Thank you so much! :pinkiehappy: It makes me so happy to see people enjoying my story!

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Heh, yeah... :twilightblush: That is something I have to work on, isn't it? Thanks for the advice and I will definitely take that into consideration the next time I write. Good luck to you with your story, too. :twilightsmile:

Oh come on! Cheesy sense? Now?! I hope that he'll manage to stay somehow. Please update soon! :twilightsmile:

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Oh, just you wait. I've got some stuff planned...
But I can't reveal any more! Spoilers...

Agghhh Darn you! :pinkiegasp:
Absolutely cannot wait until next week now! :raritydespair:
Good job on this chapter! Love it! :pinkiehappy:

Oh no! Not his cheesysense! :raritydespair:
Now they were doing so weheheheeel... :raritycry:

Nice chapter. I can't wait for the next one.

This was such a cute chapter!!! Can't wait till the next one comes out next week!!!! :)

Hey guys, in relation to a part of a comment I made on chapter 4...

Also, If you liked this chapter, just wait till the next one!:pinkiehappy:

Yeah, I'm saving it for the next chapter cause this one got too big. If I had combined the chapters, then it would've been waaaaaaay too long. So yeah. Just wait! Only one more week till chapter 6! :pinkiesmile:

Nice chapter. I can't wait for the next one. Best of luck.

Awmygerd, I sooooooo HATE sunlight beaming me right in the eye! :raritydespair:

DJ Pon3. No ones ever thrown a party for Cheese Sandwich? That would be the: WORST. POSSIBLE. THING!:raritycry: just kidding!:pinkiehappy:

I had to reread the begining of the song a few times, but I came up with a tune for it!:scootangel:

Buck. He has to go. Oh, and if I were the one splitting the cupcake, I would of karate chopped it!:pinkiehappy:

Rainbow Dash pulled Pinkie aside, I just know it.:facehoof:

Evil Cliffhanger?!?!

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Wonderful! Think you could share it with me somehow? :derpytongue2:

Wait, wait, wait! I don't get it! Please, help me! :derpyderp1:

I wonder who took the pictures? Anyway great story. Best of luck with the next one.

It's a pity that the story is over but I really enjoyed it! I hope that someday you'll write another one about Cheese and Pinkie. And keep up the good work! :pinkiehappy:
Btw, I guess that the Cakes have taken the picture, am I right? :derpytongue2:

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Btw, I guess that the Cakes have taken the picture, am I right?

Sorry, but no. It's hinted at in the story, however, and if you found the little secrets I hid, there's some spoilers there that say who did it.

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It's a reference to another story I wrote called In My Free Time. It's not quite as good as this one... :twilightsheepish:

Enjoyed the read. It was a lot of fun. Best of luck on your other stories.

WHO THE HAY TOOK A PICTURE OF ME AND PINKIE KISSING!?! I SHALL FIND THEM AND MAKE SANDWICHES OUT OF THEM!!!!:pinkiecrazy::flutterrage::twilightangry2:

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Like I said in the author's note, I put some spoilers and secrets and stuff hidden within the story somewhere. Not saying how you can find them, but I will say that at one point it says who took the picture. :pinkiegasp:
Also, I put little hints here and there (although I'll admit that they're pretty hard to catch), and I'm working on a sequel (no one was supposed to know, but oh well.) which should be possible coming sometime in the not so distant future...

I'm gonna do a reading of this for my Youtubers if that is ok with you. I'll put a link to your account in the description, ok? So you can get credit. I like to give credit where credit is due, and it is definitely due here! Please continue writing!:scootangel:

/)>-o Why!!! Why did his cheesie sense have to go off! Well, It is a very good chapter and I hope my YouTubers like it as much as I do! Keep up the good work!:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

YAY!!!:twilightsheepish: OMG A SEQUEL!!!!:rainbowkiss: I cant wait!!!! This story was soooooooooooo good:pinkiehappy: Please, at least tell me about who took the pic.:pinkiesad2: I didn't see any easter eggs (something that is a kinda spoiler thrown in there) Keep it up!:pinkiehappy:

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Oh my Celestia, I think I just exploded.
Thank you so much! I can't wait to see it! :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

Also, could you put a link to the video in a comment so I can find it? ^.^

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Yep! Still working on it to this day... :twilightsheepish: But it's coming along, don't you worry.

Also, about the Easter eggs, they're hidden, and hidden good. There has been only one person who has found them and that's because I told her. :derpytongue2:
But good luck with finding them!

And, again, I can't wait to see the videos, especially seeing what you do about the song, considering I haven't put any tune to it yet. :trollestia: :derpytongue2:

http://m.youtube.com/watch?v=OzbvXUhQ3l4 this I BELEIVE is the the first part. Please note is that I am still working on getting it all uploaded so please stand by. ^-^/)

You can also just look on my channel. Find me on youtube under the name: Shimmer Rose,
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(\ ^-^ Thank you, once again. I'm watching it right now.
I love how you did Derpy's voice. :derpytongue2: You know, along with the rest of the voices. :pinkiesmile:
I can't wait to see what you do with the rest of the chapters. :rainbowkiss:

Love the story. I feel like the evidence points mainly at Twilight taking the photo-she could use her magic for hiding herself and being disguised and stuff.:3

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