After Twilight became a Princess her friends all eventually split off on their separate ways while Twilight went to live in Canterlot. See what insane events ensue.
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Woah.
I can't wait to see how you continue this.
Quick note though, I fail to see how the end of the world qualifies as slice of life.
OMG
im so sad D:
4255066 I tagged it that way due to events that will happen in later chapters.
4255219 Ah...
Okay
How can someone write such a sad story?
4260434 That's just what I do. In addition to sad MLP Fanfics I write books centered around sad, death themes.
Wow... this will be hard to analyze (probably the most complex thing I've read from you).
ps: I actually don't have the time to analyze it, but who really cares...
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MAJOR SPOILERS AHEAD !
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First thing, there is only one sentence in the whole story that drives me off:
This sentence prevents pretty much any other interpretation of all we read before. It doesn't make the story crystal clear, but it reduces the scope.
For example, at first my theory (chapter four) was that they were all dreaming and having nightmare.
Then my theory was that it really was the end of the world, as a continuity began to be built (around the idea of coldness).
But as soon as Twilight says it was just the result of an illusion, or, in other words, that everything that I read up to this point doesn't give any indication of what is going on, I had to believe the narrator (because you could argue that Twilight might be wrong, but as a reader I'm forced to believe the narrator, whoever he/she is, because I've got no other source of indication to find my way through a story).
So in the end, the whole story sums up in:
- for some reason Twilight's friends are tricked into death
- Twilight kills herself out of sadness
- Celestia does too because of Twilight
- Luna is left to rule
And even if I could try to see a metaphorical explanation, for example of a crumbling world, once again in the way of growing up and having to face some new world, it's less satisfactory than being given a total freedom in the interpretation.
That's why I dislike that sentence. It is written in an affirmative manner that closes the debate. The same sentence written in a less affirmative way wouldn't create such a barrier:
"Especially when everything they saw in their minds was probably just a mere result of the chaos in the world. There is no way it could have been real! How couldn't they see that?"
Something like that.
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For the rest... where to begin? I'll mostly note the most interesting elements (I haven't taken the time to analyze).
1) the personality of the character telling the story is constantly the same (which made my theory of the dream, or maybe of a one character dream split amongst many others). This is the most debatable point, as it is highly expected to see some recurrent character's traits with the mane six, but the fact is:
- Rarity was okay
- Rainbow Dash was the opposite of herself (but at the same time, herself as we see the mind and not the image of herself she projects in public)
- Applajck was okay, with that calm and pragmatic view on things, the last one standing, etc...
- Fluttershy was very unusual and she suddenly has a daughter, which also explains the character's changes
- Fluttershy was the opposite of herself, but after Fluttershy, and due to the circumstances, it is believable
- Twilight was herself
- Celestia was herself
- Luna was herself
It all seems to indicate a common reducing factor in terms of personnality when it comes to a dire situation (don't really know what "dire" means...). As if all traits would disappear to let only the instinctive nature be.
2) the dead who wants to live (chapter 1):
I admit it, I was saying "6th sense". But still, the idea is there and the connection with the rest of the story is really hard to do.
- she doesn't die (but is dead in the end)
- the thematic doesn't come up again. (unless you count "memento mori" (the french translation is "souviens-toi que tu mourras", meaning "remember you'll die" instead of "remember to die", but as latin is a dead language anyway...) that could somehow be linked (the deads' warning?))
Also, maybe:
The last words ask a dead one to rest in peace, when the beginning ot the story showed that they don't...I'm probably searching too far... but who knows (it's always really hard to know what was premeditated by the author and what is pure coincidence).
3) Rainbow Dash doing some sort of magic (flames in two balls under her wings). The imagery is interesting, I haven't even begun to find explanations. Also, we can see the idea of a sky in fire coming back, which will later be opposed to the "ice". Maybe a last resurgence of warmth?
4) the darkness (symbol of Luna) having replaced the fire...
5) the ice and cold, probably the most recuring theme. At first the ice is red (out of blood) and then black ("from red to black", taking back the them of the darkness). It begins at chapter 4 and goes to chapter 5, is absent of the 6th one, but then reappears in chapter 7, in the form of cold. I admit I did a parallel with "the ice princessy movie thing" that I saw a few weeks earlier (yeah, I'm kind of slow), but I don't think there is too much of a connection.
There might be, however, a reference to the windighosts (don't know how to write their name), and ice as well as cold are two symbols of death, so, yeah...
Oh, I almost forgot... The idea of the everlasting winter ("games of throne"... I'm sorry, but I couldn't prevent myself from making a connection), but a "last winter" for the end of the world.
6) The titles of the chapters. "Forgotten moons" is the one that intrigues me the most, because of the reference to Luna (but probably in reality a reference to old times, the forgotten time that was years ago...). Or maybe a mix between them and a reference to "forgotten dreams from before"? Don't know...
Anyway, the only coherent explanation I have, at that point, for the whole story is that the chapters explain the decay of the group, from the fact they don't want their old friendship to die out (forgotten souls that don't want to be forgotten), to the burning, then the fall into darkness, the cold touch of death, no idea about the blood, leading to Twilight being alone and then the rest following.
But it can also be seen as a big premonition for Celestia's act.
- Celestia must have known so many ponies that only live through her own mind:
So many souls that can only be remembered through her.
- Celestia controls the flames in the sky (having the sun under her wing in some way)
- Celestia's fall can only make the darkness come and crush the world (as she provides the sun)
- Celestia uses a cold object to cut her throat and there is blood coming out (red winter and frozen death), as well as Celestia's death makes the sun disappears and therefore the whole land end up frozen.
This would also explain why what all the other mane six saw was "not real", but in reality a premonition that they couldn't handle.
At this point, I should go and find proofs to confirm or infirm that theory, but I really don't have any time left...
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All in all, nice story. The sentence I criticized at the beginning is my only real point of contention and the most debatable thing in my opinion (on whether it's good or not) would be the fact that all the characters seem to almost speak the same way and show the same emotions (which I kind of speculate would be your own emotions through your own eyes and your own personality).
Fun thing, I tend to ignore your little description of the story:
in every story of yours I read, because it rarely makes much sense with the story itself (for example, at no point we see them splitting up and the same story could happen with them all still being in Ponyville and still being close friends).
I could discuss the fascination for death you have, but I would begin speculating way more than is necessary and way further than what the information I have allow me to. It's interesting nonetheless as I saw a video from one of the mlpfim reviewers who talked about the fact the fans tend to add death into Equestria when the show cannot really enter that territory (even with Philomena's episode, where it was supposed to be about losing a pet...)
Well, keep on having fun
. On my side, I'll keep that story around, if I once were to have time to go a little deeper in.
Actually, "memento mori" means "remember death", literally.
It`s not a reminder to die, but rather a reminder that death is inevitable, sooner or later. Most choose to interpret it as an admonition to strive for more, a reminder of the time limit imposed.
More on the topic of the story... ew. None of those are good reasons to commit suicides. Not that there are any good reasons to do it, period, but... Some reasons can be at least convincing. The ones presented? Not convincing. At all.
4338206 I appreciate your opinion even though I do not agree with it.
Also, seeing as I am fluent in Latin, I'm sure I know what the title of a chapter of my story means.
Also much I love MLP and tier take on real life problems. This one i believe everyone can relate. We go thought life making friends but though time the some people we call friends and the bond that we share will disapper.