Twilight Sparkle: perfect student, lives in Ponyville, has great friends, and the newest princess of Equestria. That was her life before the tragic event happened.
She is transported to a new universe where she never met her friends and lived alone in darkness. Alone in a new universe with some memory problems, Twilight must find out who she is, before losing herself entirely.
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Life in Equestria was perfect for Rainbow Dash. Her mentor, Princess Celestia, has given her a lovely home in a town called Ponyville. She and her friends helped keep harmony in Equestria by restoring Princess Luna to her rightful place as princess of the night.
There have been no problems in town, until a strange alicorn appears and claims to have no memory of anything but her name before appearing.
Rainbow, along with a strange stallion named Blue, wish to help her, but how can she help somepony who doesn't even know who they are themselves?
Just out of curiosity, is this set in Trinary's "Dashverse"?
4130427 Umm, what are you talking about? I mean no offence, but I just don't know what your talking about.
4130495 Never mind.
I like your stories,so I'll give it a shot
4130694 Yay! Another person looking at my story! Hope you enjoy what I have in store for you.
interesting idea ill keep an eye on this
4130763 Thanks!
Interesting start so far. I hope this is as good as it entails to be.
4130806 I certainly hope you enjoy the future chapters that come out.
Good premise. You hooked me. Moar. Have a good day.
4131081 My day- or night where I am- gets better the more you people like my stories.
eventual twidash?
a new adition to my personal top 20 fanfics, keep the good job
4131743 Wow! Thanks for telling me. I will continue to work on it.
4131650 Maaaayyybe...
I don't even know, honestly.
I'd love to see how Celestia will react when she finds out who Twilight really is, it'll be priceless
BTW nice chapter
4133426 Thanks. Don't worry. All will be revealed.
Twilight's gonna get reeducated.
4133431 What?
4133443 re-educated
4133493 Perhaps.
Love the story, but it needs an editor. Spotted more than a few spelling and grammatical errors.
4140114 Hmm. If there is only a few, would you mind pointing them out? I could easily fix them in no time. The problem is, I don't know where they are.
Ah! Yes, I see what you did there...
That's a nice hat you're wearing, are they cool now?
i knew i had seen the name blue before i forgot you were the fall of twilight writer lol
4140391 Hey heh. I am totally sneaky.
A few mistakes here and there. Try to elaborate a bit more, everything feels so plain. Add a few emotions in the conversations, something like:
Twilight attitude... She's taking this better than expected, I would had liked to see her freak out when she woke up or something a bit dramatic. I mean, she knows that she can't remember anything, ANYTHING! At least make her feel helpless or something without her memories.
Finally, Rainbow's behavior. What the hell? I know there's no Twilight in this universe, but that's no reason to fill the blank with Rainbow. Spike being her assistant? Her love for books? How was this possible?
Celestia being Rainbow's mentor? Sorry but that just felt like: "Hey, I love Rainbow, let's make her Celestia's student because I say so." There's nothing bad with that, but at least write an explanation telling how this came to happen. I mean, there were a lot of ponies better suited for this, any unicorn would have been good.
4140547 All in due time, person who commented on my story.
It'll be akward when Twilight will go to talk to princess Luna (not the one that was in her dreams)
BTW awesome chapter and good job 0 downvotes!!!
4150412 Thanks. I'm glad that everyone has enjoyed this story as much as I have while writing it.
Gah..so many mistakes
One example:
WHETHER!
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I do not know whether the weather will be good or not
Please try getting an editor, or at least re-read through what you've written for any mistakes before you post a chapter.
4152481 Dude, I have to write this on a tablet thing and it auto spellchecks everything. And I don't want an editor, because then I wouldn't be able to upload as often as I do. Besides, editors are for BIG stories. Not stories with only about 1000 - 2000 ish words per chapter.
why do I get the feeling that blue is in fact Ephraim blue, he even has the watch too!
4152872 I don't know. Maybe because he is. I just don't know.
loved this chapter but I'm afraid that I got a little confused with all the time traveling
4162664 If I wasn't writing this story, I might have been confused to.
4162884 Haven't decided yet. I'll come up with something eventually.
When are you going to update?
4257378 When the rest of the chapter comes and hits me in my sleep.
They really shouldn't have left Twilight alone.
4359200 Thanks. I need help with Ideas loads of times.
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I have short term memory loss.
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I think.
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What was I talking about? Who are you?
Didn't see that one coming.
OH MY GOD!
Can wait for it to get updated
5025401 Strangely enough, I was thinking of working on the update for this story just yesterday. I have the rest of it planned out in my head, but it takes a surprising amount effort to get it out on this site when using my Surface.
I'll try to get it out later today. I just need to come up with enough words for the chapter.
wow. current dimension twilight's a crazy fucked up bitch.
5026025 It sounded more like Trixie.
5026232 it did sound like trixie, but the way she kept saying that Twilight was living the life she would have lived, if it hadn't been for rainbow, made me think that current dimensions twilight seems to have become the new trixie.
5026240 Possibly, however normally I would think that Twilight would or at least her non famous counter part, would become a researcher at an institute or a professor at the Canterlot school for gifted unicorns, while learning as much magic as she could without Celestia's help.