Apple Bloom, Sweetie Belle, and Scootaloo are all friends. Together, they can do anything! They, as the Cutie Mark Crusaders, will find a way to earn their cutie marks!
But trouble arises when Apple Bloom and Sweetie Belle get their cutie marks and leave Scootaloo alone as the only crusader left.
If I have to say this story was inspired by anything, I'd say it was inspired by BlackGryph0n and Bassik's song: Crusader.
It's an amazing song, and I feel inspired by it in some ways.
very good story so far. I just wanted to point out this one mistake...other than that, you're all good to go!
-~SmileHDFan~-
4106251 Thanks for noticing that. I've fixed it, and to tell the truth, I thought It was an 'm' when I wrote it, like, 30 minutes ago or something like that.
Interesting start...I want to see where this goes. :)
4106411 Don't worry. It will all go as planed.
Of coarse, I'm the one writing this, so I know what is going to be planed and all spoilers and stuff like that.
Amazing! I am very, very interested to see where this leads, and though I can't give much comment about it yet (except this one), I'm very much looking forward to in the future! Keep it up!!
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One of the many advantages of being the author, isn't it?
4106554 Yes. Yes it is.
4106551 Glad to make a story that you enjoy.
Dear god the feels
And it's only the first chapter
4106594 In a way, it is the first chapter, but its also the Prologue.
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youre welcome! I hope you update it soon...
4106662 Soon! To me and my stories, soon means tomorrow ... usually.
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hope i have no HW
4106669 I do have homework, but I haven't done it yet.
I'm so smart.
This is truly heartfelt. Now that the story is continued, I can now say everything I had prepared since the prologue:
Phenomenal. Absolutely phenomenal. Such sad, lonely feelings conveyed through just simple words. I could almost feel Scootaloo's heartbreak at losing probably the last family she would ever have. Losing a friend is one of the most emotionally painful experiences of a single lifetime, and you executed the reality of that beautifully. Phenomenal. I'm definitely looking forward to the future chapters
4110547 I sorta felt like crying when I read your comment.
Too bad for me. I don't cry easily.
4110547 Also, I never entirely intended to make this story sad. This story has been on my mind for awhile, except I was planning for it to be a small contest between the three to see who is the best crusader. After rethinking about it, I decided to make this story about one of the crusaders failing to get their cutie marks.
(Those are the only faces of the cutie mark crusaders in the faces thing)
Still, glad you like it. The next chapter should be out tomorrow.
What did they do to get their cm's,I mean all they did was walk home and sleep!
love this story love scootaloo hehe...see what I did there....
4111160 Apple Bloom got hers early in the morning when she kicked an apple tree.
Sweetie Belle got hers when she was singing in the shower.
and then she died
4111425 Dun, dun Dahhhhhhhhhhh
4110628 Really?? Wow, because this was SAD
4113203 More feels on the way. Maybe...
Nope. Don't trust Apple Bloom that much.
4114372 Why don't you?
4114399 In Flight to the Finish, she sees great discomfort on Scoots end and, after a few attempts, she deserts her. It was a very touchy subject for her best friend and she screwed her over for a competition. I don't like her 'friends' so much.
4114414 Well all people- or ponies, must learn a lesson some way. Some lessons are easy, while others require pain and suffering.
4114518 well, if she didn't like it, then why cause that to your own friend? She didn't like it when she was all alone and ponies left her (before she met her friends) . I just don't trust her loyalty. Seems
like I can't trust sweetie either.
4114535 Well, you can trust who you want to trust. While your doing that, I'll write more parts of the story.
4114541 Can't wait lol
4114587 Should be out tomorrow. I try to update once a day. It helps get views.
4113542 My heart is ready
This was the only big thing I found.
Also, WOW. Though it wasn't as emotional and feely as he previous chapters, the writing formats were spectacular! I love how you extended the part of Scootaloo going to get an apple into how she buys them and emphasizing her loneliness. I also love how you made it connect to Applebloom and her missing her friends
4114821 Hmm. I'll fix that now. Still, I'm extremely glad you like my story. Spread the word, please.
4114838 Of course!
4114968 Thank you!
4117434 Thanks for noticing. I'll change it now.
Wait-what?
4129045 Huh?
Oh, I see what she's gonna do. . Keep this up, I'm lovin' it!
4129177 I will. Thank you for liking this story.
4129058 Why would she need a..?
4129338 ...Think about it...
It switched POV here I think it was a typo
Amazing update! The emotionality of the first and second chapters are somewhat quieted here, and Scoots is starting to take action. I like it
4129778 You are right about that being a typo. I believe 'we' was supposed to be 'they.'
Thanks for noticing, and I hope you stay updated for future chapters.
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4140387 What? I don't get it.