Tales from The Notepad

by The Princess Rarity

#4: Famous

#4: Famous

This was it. What she had worked and waited for. Her dream come true. Sweetie Belle could barely believe it, here she was, backstage, ready to officially perform on Bridleway for the very first time. Everypony in the city of Manehatten knew her as the young rookie who got lucky, but now tonight, they would know her as the lead role in the famous musical known as Marespray. Ever since she was a child, Sweetie Belle had longed to perform on this stage, and here she was.

"You really think I can do this?" she said anxiously.

Rarity finished sewing the last button on her sister's costume and she smiled proudly. "I don't think so," she said. "I know you can."

Sweetie Belle grinned bashfully. "Thanks for being here, Rarity," she murmured.

"I wouldn't miss this for the world," Rarity declared. "Now, get out there and show them what you've got!"

With a confident expression, Sweetie Belle bolted out on stage, just as the music started up. The crowd was huge, massive even. What a rush it gave her.

"Good morning, Baltimare! Every day's like an open door! Every night is a fantasy, every sound is like a symphony!~"

This was it. This was the show that would make her famous...

...it felt amazing.

Comments

[FamousLastWords]

hmmm, i like that word

[Super Trampoline]

One word prompt: polydactyl
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[MythrilMoth]

OK, so the first thing I need to comment on is that header image. One thing that bugs me, as a reader, as a layout artist, and as a web graphics designer, is when people drop graphics into their stories that assume every reader on the site uses the default 'black text on white background' viewing option. The image you used is black line art on a rectangular white background. On anything other than the white background layout, it looks ugly:

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Now, on to comments on the drabbles themselves:

"Oreos": Nothing really new or inspired here. Just a rehash of the "Luna is a gamer" and "Luna loves Oreos" memes. All in all, really rather pointless.

"Supercalifragilisticexpialidocious": Cute...a little underwhelming, but cute.

"Men": Yeah, this is the kind of thing that needs a little more than a 300-word blurt. The notion of Rarity actually marrying Spike is...deserving of a bit more than a scene of Rarity and Cadance bitching about their husbands. Also, it was just...really dry, with the only real chuckle coming from the part about Rarity's kitchen mishaps. And even then, that's contradicted by canon, where Rarity is shown to be an excellent cook.

"Famous": Pointless. Just...pointless.

Won't be tracking this. Don't let my comments stop you from writing them, this is all entirely my opinion. I just think some of these scenes would be so much better as pieces of an actual story, instead of just random scraps.

[The Princess Rarity]

4363316 Well, sorry about the whole banner thing, but as for the drabbles -- I kinda just made it like my own Prompt Tag thing. That's all. Sorry if you found 'em pointless or whatever, I worked with what I had. This isn't gonna be a big project or anything anyway, I only made it to kill time.

I admit they're not all great, but no one is perfect.

[Iroh Legoman]

Wouldn't it be 'Manespray'