Shining Armor asks his marefriend Rainbow Dash out for a date on Hearts and Hooves day and quickly becomes elated when she reluctantly agrees, however as the night progresses he begins to wonder if he’s getting more than he bargained for.
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Huh, interesting ship.
Is this like an Alternate Universe or what?
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Whoops, my bad.
Thanks for catching that.
This is some pretty bad pacing, between Twi and Shining's short conversation, more than ten minutes passed, in which Dash read a chapter of a book and had a shower. Unless they were talking rrrreeeeaaaaaalllllyyyyy sssslllloooooowwllllyyyyyy, that's impossible with the amount of words they said.
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I went back to read through it again and wow, that was sloppy...for some reason I thought the dialogue was a lot longer.
I made a few changes, so hopefully that part will flow better and make a little more sense.
Thanks for pointing that out.