Sunset Shimmer struggles to embrace her new relationship with Twilight Sparkle. And learns there is more to friendship - and love - than being nice to somepony you like.
cadence i had hoped you and shiny would have stopped and thought..then again..giving the..situation..and twilight nature..im surprised it was just the two of them who showed up and not half if not all of the crystal empires army...still great chapter and i very very eagerly await the next
So I'm guessing Twilight has been learning how and when to exert her power without going overboard? Cuz the way she handled Cadance and Sunset was really good.
I'm glad you mentioned Twi's other friends, (AJ ad Pinkie). I'm wondering what their reactions to this will be
I love this story. the pacing is amazing and while i prefer my sub to be the bratty type (the wife is great for that ) a pure Submissive might be nice to play around with if I could find one like Shims here.
Big fan of this fic, I'd just say you are being a bit harsh calling it clop. The story, characterisation and overall quality put it a lot higher up the proverbial ladder than clop alone. Fav, upvote and followed from me. PS love the rate of updates. Find myself checking almost hourly for the next fix.
3854172 I honestly've never heard it called anything other than Sunlight. That's how Lapis and I referred to it when we were discussing the ship. And if you couldn't tell, Sunlight is my OTP. (Curse lack of Sunset emoticon!)
Me and my editor firmly believe that sex doesn't have to be stupid in order to be fun. If you like this philosophy, hit us up with a watch. There'll be more smart sex coming in the future.
3854679 And Sunset shimmers family too? Can't remember if that's already been talked about.
I love this fic, it's an awesome story about sex, not a story as a support structure for sex (yeah, idk either ). One thing I'm a bit bummed about is that I can't tell when there will be sex scenes or not - as in this chapter - and if they are going to be nice or not . Like at fluttershy's cottage, where it was getting real hot, and then it just ended harshly. It's awesome from a story point of view, cause it makes it more real and builds character, but it kinda messes you up otherwise... . That's just my opinion though, and as I said, it does make the story better, so I guess it's all good
Shit. This chapter had me in stitches! I knew this would happen eventually, but then there's the awkward parent and celestia oh yeah and applejack talks too, still wanna see those, but then, you said this story is gonna be short and I don't wanna kill your ideas! Aaaaagh!
As previously stated: this is a low blow to be called clop. As far as I am concerned, this is an amazingly written story, with superb charecter building, a deep atmosphere, and an interesting, to say the least, premise. Sunlight is not a common ship, and this is done particularly well. As much as Twi being the dom, and Shim being the sub seems to not make sense at first, even someone who doesn't understand the finer points of BDSM can understand thanks to the top-notch explaining. I see lots of BDSM fics seemingly half-flanked, either by a lack of knowledge about the kink, or because it's being written for newcommers to the whole BDSM kink in general. I can happily say that this story is niether of those. Good work Inky Jay and Lapis-Lazuli. I'm given the impression that one, if not both, of you are into the kink, or you have some very informative sources. So, I must say this is one of the best "clop" fics I have read in a long time, and is undoubtedly the best kinkfic I have seen within the past six months. I look forward to much more. So, without further adu, I'm going to go take my place with Adenbadens upon the S. S. Sunset. Did I mention that this story has amazingly well written sex? Just another plus.
kinda intersting. bdsm and sexy ponies. not to mention potential scandal.
also i love how her asking sunset to be careful can basically trasnlate as "If my latent tendency of megalomania gets the better of me, please slap some sense into me."
3854963 Not to mention, Politics exist in Equestria. In this world, Democrats and Republicans overpower all other parties. Equestria is ruled by a diarchy of 2 sisters controlling the sun and moon, with the addition of one that controls a separate empire. I gotta ask, if politics actually take part in this, what other "parties" are there? Maybe a pony version of our parties perhaps because they prefer the country be ruled by the people/group instead of 2 (immortal) princesses? I don't know, I maybe thinking on this too much.
One thing that's true though: Yes, journalists, news reporters, and tabloids would have field days with stories like this if it weren't for the chaotic activity in Ponyville.
Fights always left her tired, even if they were short, and she won. In a way, she took it as Harmony’s punishment for ever getting into one in the first place.
Harmony would not punish a good person if the fought. The ancient definition of harmony is you cannot have good without bad and you should let those two very different things coexist and live in harmony.
3868898 Late here, but I'll tell you what form politics take: lobbying.
In a dictatorship - and lets be blunt, that's what Equestria is - all power resides in the ruler. So that means going to one of the Princesses or the bureaucrats who run things in their names. Since Equestria (presumably) isn't riven with corruption, that means burying whatever thing you want in a proposal that they would approve of.
Politics, at least at the highest level, is going to consist of finagling ways to get face time with a Princess. Whoever can arrange that - major domos, secretaries, assistants, whoever - is going to have ponies stacked ten deep willing to do them big favors to let them in to bend Celestia's ear for ten minutes. Court is going to be one petitioner or group of them after another presenting the chosen Princess with some really tempting proposal couched in the nicest, noblest possible language with the true agenda secreted away deep inside, hopefully unscrutinized.
Even through the haze of anger, she noted the prince backing off toward the doorway as Cadence came nose-to-nose with her.
(Read in an Australian accent for best results.)
Here, we see the male's survival instincts kicking in as the two females fight for dominance. If the Alpha female doesn't return soon, there might be blood shed leading to loss of life. The males tail is tucked firmly 'tween his legs at the sight of the two powerful females staring each other down clearly getting ready to brawl.
You guys should feel proud of this chapter. After reading through this fic twice and enjoying the clop and even the non-clop pet-play, this is still my favorite part.
I always feel a little bit frustrated when Discord and the press (or politicians) are mentioned in the same story without any of the characters drawing the obvious conclusion. Set a few ground rules and tell Discord he can go wild beyond those. Discord's happy and entertained, the press will start to be very courteous and polite very soon, and everyone we give a damn about wins.
He nodded and gave her a fierce hug before pulling back. “Then you gotta promise me you’ll do two things. The first, is you need to write to Princess Celestia. Explain everything, and make sure she understands how important this is to you.” He arched an eyebrow at her, even as she felt blush creep into her cheeks… again. “And yeah, I know it can be hard to talk about that sort of thing with her, but trust me. It’s important. the second thing you need to do is make sure your friends know what’s up. I know they’ll stick by you, but they’re gonna be a part of the scrutiny. Scrutiny that could get awfully heavy in public opinion, and given that at least two of your friends have very public profiles, you might want to make sure they know what you’re getting into here.”
Besides. It gives me an excuse to stay in town a little longer and further your education.” Cadence clapped her hooves together with a positively wicked grin on her face. “Now that I don’t have to worry about Auntie’s silly restrictions on teaching you, I can finally give you some real lessons in my speciality!”
i do not like the implications. cause it means tia didn't 'get' to this part of her education on purpose. it also implies tia made it a point to not teach her several things for some reason. things most ponies likely learned normally...
What happened to unkind words?
I can see why this would be a fun chapter to write.
I'm quite impressed with it.
~Skeeter The Lurker
cadence i had hoped you and shiny would have stopped and thought..then again..giving the..situation..and twilight nature..im surprised it was just the two of them who showed up and not half if not all of the crystal empires army...still great chapter and i very very eagerly await the next
Oh I see what you did there "mending broken love"
As a Dom, I love this story.
As a Brony, I love this story.
As a TwiDash shipper, I AM NOT HAPPY!
... Eh, two outa three isn't bad...
It's amazing how you update this daily and I love the story keep it up
i cant wait for the next chapter
So celestia had restriction on twilight, huh? Interesting...
lol cant wait to see what you do to break sunset even further than she is now
So I'm guessing Twilight has been learning how and when to exert her power without going overboard? Cuz the way she handled Cadance and Sunset was really good.
I'm glad you mentioned Twi's other friends, (AJ ad Pinkie). I'm wondering what their reactions to this will be
Keep up the awesome work
I do declare, I look forward to seeing moar. This is a fic which I'd like to go on for hundreds of thousands of words.
I love this story. the pacing is amazing and while i prefer my sub to be the bratty type (the wife is great for that ) a pure Submissive might be nice to play around with if I could find one like Shims here.
3854028 Y'know...being too inexperienced. Or too young. Or just being uninterested.
3854008 Seriously? Only Twidash? What about Twipie?
I am loving this story. Is there a name for these two? Twiset? Twilight Shimmer? Sunset Sparkle? Twimmer? Sunlight? Sunlight's a good one...
I HEREBY DUB THIS SHIP, THE S.S. SUNLIGHT
Big fan of this fic, I'd just say you are being a bit harsh calling it clop. The story, characterisation and overall quality put it a lot higher up the proverbial ladder than clop alone. Fav, upvote and followed from me. PS love the rate of updates. Find myself checking almost hourly for the next fix.
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I honestly've never heard it called anything other than Sunlight. That's how Lapis and I referred to it when we were discussing the ship. And if you couldn't tell, Sunlight is my OTP. (Curse lack of Sunset emoticon!)
im so happy that this a part of my daily routine.
This line right at the end there.
Even if you'd written it right at the start, that would still be the one that stuck with me until the end. Very clever.
Lol woo I though a full blown fight was going to go down! Glad Twilight came in when she did.
Two things:
One, Smarty Pants is a girl.
Two, what about Twilight's parents?
Wow. Never, in a thousand years did I think a clopfic would have...Politics. And yet, it seems like the logical progression, weird.
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Me and my editor firmly believe that sex doesn't have to be stupid in order to be fun. If you like this philosophy, hit us up with a watch. There'll be more smart sex coming in the future.
3854679
And Sunset shimmers family too?
Can't remember if that's already been talked about.
I love this fic, it's an awesome story about sex, not a story as a support structure for sex (yeah, idk either ).
One thing I'm a bit bummed about is that I can't tell when there will be sex scenes or not - as in this chapter - and if they are going to be nice or not . Like at fluttershy's cottage, where it was getting real hot, and then it just ended harshly. It's awesome from a story point of view, cause it makes it more real and builds character, but it kinda messes you up otherwise... .
That's just my opinion though, and as I said, it does make the story better, so I guess it's all good
Shit. This chapter had me in stitches! I knew this would happen eventually, but then there's the awkward parent and celestia oh yeah and applejack talks too, still wanna see those, but then, you said this story is gonna be short and I don't wanna kill your ideas! Aaaaagh!
This fic is so well done, easily becoming one of my favorites.
As previously stated: this is a low blow to be called clop.
As far as I am concerned, this is an amazingly written story, with superb charecter building, a deep atmosphere, and an interesting, to say the least, premise.
Sunlight is not a common ship, and this is done particularly well. As much as Twi being the dom, and Shim being the sub seems to not make sense at first, even someone who doesn't understand the finer points of BDSM can understand thanks to the top-notch explaining.
I see lots of BDSM fics seemingly half-flanked, either by a lack of knowledge about the kink, or because it's being written for newcommers to the whole BDSM kink in general. I can happily say that this story is niether of those. Good work Inky Jay and Lapis-Lazuli. I'm given the impression that one, if not both, of you are into the kink, or you have some very informative sources.
So, I must say this is one of the best "clop" fics I have read in a long time, and is undoubtedly the best kinkfic I have seen within the past six months. I look forward to much more.
So, without further adu, I'm going to go take my place with Adenbadens upon the S. S. Sunset.
Did I mention that this story has amazingly well written sex? Just another plus.
This is becoming a highlight of my day. Bravo!
There needs to be more clop
I'm sitting here in my room with a happy smirk on my face and re-reading all the chapters.
Love it, please take pride in your work
3854008
Same.
Same.
I'm more of a Twixiluna and Twilestia shipper, but this still makes me happy.
3857406 If Twilestia is your bag, watch me carefully. Twilestia project is on the books for the near future.
3855718 I was going to leave a comment, but you said it all.
kinda intersting. bdsm and sexy ponies. not to mention potential scandal.
also i love how her asking sunset to be careful can basically trasnlate as "If my latent tendency of megalomania gets the better of me, please slap some sense into me."
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Oh Lapis, you know just the right things to say. I foist my Watch upon you.
The argument and the aftermath was brilliantly in character!
3857419 you have my attention
I find it odd that I can honestly say that I'm reading this for the plot and not mean posterior. Very intriguing for a clop fic.
... Not that I'm not reading it for the the plot as well.
http://dragonball.wikia.com/wiki/File:You-dont-say.jpg
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Not to mention, Politics exist in Equestria. In this world, Democrats and Republicans overpower all other parties. Equestria is ruled by a diarchy of 2 sisters controlling the sun and moon, with the addition of one that controls a separate empire. I gotta ask, if politics actually take part in this, what other "parties" are there? Maybe a pony version of our parties perhaps because they prefer the country be ruled by the people/group instead of 2 (immortal) princesses?
I don't know, I maybe thinking on this too much.
One thing that's true though: Yes, journalists, news reporters, and tabloids would have field days with stories like this if it weren't for the chaotic activity in Ponyville.
H-H-H-HOT to damn hot!!
Harmony would not punish a good person if the fought. The ancient definition of harmony is you cannot have good without bad and you should let those two very different things coexist and live in harmony.
examiner.com/images/blog/wysiwyg/image/Yin_Yang_art.jpg
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Late here, but I'll tell you what form politics take: lobbying.
In a dictatorship - and lets be blunt, that's what Equestria is - all power resides in the ruler. So that means going to one of the Princesses or the bureaucrats who run things in their names. Since Equestria (presumably) isn't riven with corruption, that means burying whatever thing you want in a proposal that they would approve of.
Politics, at least at the highest level, is going to consist of finagling ways to get face time with a Princess. Whoever can arrange that - major domos, secretaries, assistants, whoever - is going to have ponies stacked ten deep willing to do them big favors to let them in to bend Celestia's ear for ten minutes. Court is going to be one petitioner or group of them after another presenting the chosen Princess with some really tempting proposal couched in the nicest, noblest possible language with the true agenda secreted away deep inside, hopefully unscrutinized.
(Read in an Australian accent for best results.)
Here, we see the male's survival instincts kicking in as the two females fight for dominance. If the Alpha female doesn't return soon, there might be blood shed leading to loss of life. The males tail is tucked firmly 'tween his legs at the sight of the two powerful females staring each other down clearly getting ready to brawl.
Aww man I wish my job allowed me to do that. Rules suck. Can't do anything fun to people who are huge trouble makers.
You guys should feel proud of this chapter. After reading through this fic twice and enjoying the clop and even the non-clop pet-play, this is still my favorite part.
I always feel a little bit frustrated when Discord and the press (or politicians) are mentioned in the same story without any of the characters drawing the obvious conclusion. Set a few ground rules and tell Discord he can go wild beyond those. Discord's happy and entertained, the press will start to be very courteous and polite very soon, and everyone we give a damn about wins.
The
i do not like the implications. cause it means tia didn't 'get' to this part of her education on purpose. it also implies tia made it a point to not teach her several things for some reason. things most ponies likely learned normally...
not seeing this as a bad thing