Sunset Shimmer struggles to embrace her new relationship with Twilight Sparkle. And learns there is more to friendship - and love - than being nice to somepony you like.
Maybe I'm dense... but i really don't understand what happened between Sunset and Rarity. I don't understand what trust it was that Sunset feels was broken.
Hopefully it'll be made more clear in later chapters
I know this is very far fetched...but I think this could lead to some RariJack.
AJ accepts their behaviour but doesn't understand it (yet)... Rarity suffers due to unrequited love.. Well given some time and honesty Rarity will probably come along...
don't take this too seriously though. It is more of a random thought than anything else ^^
Fine, I get the jealousy. But At what point does that jealousy constitute a violation of trust between Sunset and Rarity? I don't remember seeing anywhere that Sunset knew about Rarity's crush on Twilight. That's whyI'm sort of confused
Rarity isn't upset AT Sunset. She's just upset because she's drunk and lonely and her crush is in a committed relationship with a mare she has too much respect for to try to make a move.
Rarity's kiss is sisterly. If it were Sunset she wanted it would have been a bit more like the one Fluttershy just gave Pinkie Pie in Steel Resolve's new story.
Rarity is wearing Sub, not Dom, gear, after all, BUT... here's where things start getting really damning and their implications get very fun.
Also, 3859332 , this is where I think a lot of the trust breaking comes from, to further elucidate my previous point. Rarity has been compulsively helping Sunset learn how to please Twilight so that she could live vicariously through Sunset's relationship. Rarity has been a little too eager to help in a few regards, if you look back on it.
Now, for WMG of what happens next?
Sunset has a massive lady boner for Rarity, Twilight only has eyes for Sunset... but she also says she simply hasn't thought about it. All she knows is she doesn't want to lose Sunset so I'm going to rock the Rule of Cool here and say that leaves Rarity a hoof-in-the-door because it's the most likely to lead to porno shenanigans, but of course that's purely meta speculation.
3859365 From the mouth of half of God, I like how you perceive Rarity and Sunset in this chapter. I will say that it's not how I would explain it, but you do an excellent job sorting out Sunset's issues on the matter.
3859365 No need to apologize I am notoriously bad at articulating my points.
As to your theory, yeah that makes since. I thought that Rarity helping Sunset was more out of... wanting to help things work out? Like she could see that Sunset was head-over-heels for Twi and wanted them both to be happy. It didn't occur to me that Rarity's motives were slightly selfish because she wanted to live vicarously through Sunset
3859632 And yet it makes sense. If Rarity has the desire to be with Twilight, but doesn't have the nerve to go through with it and risk damaging their friendship, then of course she would help Sunset for the sake of living through her. Then this whole process begins with Rarity having Kink outfits and she gives Sunset one of hers. Both see themselves as controlling and potentially manipulative ponies, but also see that Twilight is the true leader, and more powerful than either of them. They are both attracted to this power. It might be why Rarity desired Blueblood, he had authority much higher than her own. Yay finding canon connections to fanfic!
Only somewhat because Rarity is a successful businessmare. Sunset and Twilight have made this a lifestyle and that's not something Rarity can commit to because of her boutique. If this goes the way I think it will, Sunny and Twi continue as they are and Rarity joins in (as a sub) whenever she can.
“What! No! Everypony outta my way!” Sunset heard Mistress’ voice shouting at the party, but she didn’t completely register it. She was intently staring into Rarity’s eyes, and an odd set of events and things said began to fall together with Rarity’s dress as as the backdrop. “Sweetie!” Mistress’ hoof snapped her out of the mental puzzle as she directed Sunset’s head to her. “Sunny, talk to me. Are you okay? Do want to lie down upstairs? Should I send somepony for the doctor? Can… can you hear me?” Mistress’ voice was beginning to run into its panicked state, and that alone was enough to jolt Sunset out of her daze.
How could you not done the "Kiss-her-to-make-her-snap-out-of-it" cliche?
I am really not crazy on the domination thing is every couple domsub? your a really great writer though making a good fic out of a original idea don't pay attention to my whining I just got mentally scarred from a really horrible slave domination gurren lagann comic your a great writer and i am following you :)
I write some pretty bdsm themed fanfiction on a different site from my experience as a submissive myself. I want to like this story, I really, REALLY do. But I can't help feeling like it's too forced. You took a strong female character like Sunset and made her a sub. Reasonable. HOWEVER, completely and absolutely changing her personality is such a drastic way is not reasonable. Now, rather than being Sunset Shimmer: a submissive, she is a generic submissive who happens to be named Sunset Shimmer. Even if she is trying to be an obedient sub her personality would show up in everyday actions. This is a girl who tried to take over a highschool full of students and now, suddenly and abruptly she has no urges to have a will of her own? Plus, EVERY sub has a list of things they can't and won't do and it is the dominant's job to work around them. Unless they have no true personality besides "Please Master/Mistress" (which is VERY rare), they will not say things like "anything you do to me is wonderful because you are doing it" like Sunset says and implies. I will try to finish this story, but if it continues on this path of stereotypical dom/sub relationships I will simply move on and not look back.
Fortunately, so far that hadn’t happened, and she was determined not to let it ruin her good mood. So she focused instead on other things, positive things. LIke how wonderful it felt to have Fluttershy and Dash firmly behind them, or how touching it was that Pinkie had instantly understood the kind of boost they needed to get on firm hoofing with this thing. She had to think up some way to thank all three of them later. Of course, that did leave…
Poor Big Mac, looks like his night just got interesting!
Rarity wants to be in Sunset's place, doesn't she? This could get interesting very quickly.
That... Was one perverted party...
And boy, did Rarity ever throw a curve ball.
Vinyl was... A bit over the top, though.
~Skeeter The Lurker
Maybe I'm dense... but i really don't understand what happened between Sunset and Rarity. I don't understand what trust it was that Sunset feels was broken.
Hopefully it'll be made more clear in later chapters
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Rarity has a massive lady-boner for Twilight
Twilight was totally oblivious to Rarity's lady-boner.
Rarity is jealous of what Sunset has, but not of Sunset, who she deems more deserving of Twilight's love.
Everyone was in fetish gear because sometimes having friends like that is just fucking awesome isn't it?
Why yes. Yes it is.
Also? I've been in Big Mac's position. It's also fucking awesome.
I know this is very far fetched...but I think this could lead to some RariJack.
AJ accepts their behaviour but doesn't understand it (yet)...
Rarity suffers due to unrequited love..
Well given some time and honesty Rarity will probably come along...
don't take this too seriously though.
It is more of a random thought than anything else ^^
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Fine, I get the jealousy. But At what point does that jealousy constitute a violation of trust between Sunset and Rarity? I don't remember seeing anywhere that Sunset knew about Rarity's crush on Twilight. That's whyI'm sort of confused
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Rarity isn't upset AT Sunset. She's just upset because she's drunk and lonely and her crush is in a committed relationship with a mare she has too much respect for to try to make a move.
Clarify?
3859108 That or Rarity wants to be in Twilight's place. I don't know how Twi would feel about sharing Sunny. But you're probably right...
I can't help but wonder if the two sisters are Aloe and Lotus or not. Daily updates make my whole life worthwhile!
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Nope. She wants Twilight.
The affectionate kiss was sisterly, which is meant to be symbolic of their mutual-
Ah forget it. The more I explain the more things I'm likely to be wrong about and look like an idiot.
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But that's only jealousy, Rarity wants what Sunset has and she perceives that she will never get. I get it
Here's the line that confused me:
What trust was violated?
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And just to throw my hat in the ring: I think Sunset is going to ask Twilight to "adopt" Rarity, so to speak
3859244 considering the cloth cuffs on her ankles, i also think that Rarity wants what Sunset has.
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Thank you!
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Ah! I apologize, that is, in fact, a much better question than the one I was answering and I apologize profusely.
I'm going to guess that she's hurt that Rarity has been keeping such a big, emotionally manipulative secret from her for so long.
Word of God if I'm right on this?
3859244 Oh, no. Do go on. I'd love to hear your theories.
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And thus begins Twilight's Harem.
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Rarity's kiss is sisterly. If it were Sunset she wanted it would have been a bit more like the one Fluttershy just gave Pinkie Pie in Steel Resolve's new story.
Rarity is wearing Sub, not Dom, gear, after all, BUT... here's where things start getting really damning and their implications get very fun.
Also, 3859332 , this is where I think a lot of the trust breaking comes from, to further elucidate my previous point.
Rarity has been compulsively helping Sunset learn how to please Twilight so that she could live vicariously through Sunset's relationship. Rarity has been a little too eager to help in a few regards, if you look back on it.
Now, for WMG of what happens next?
Sunset has a massive lady boner for Rarity, Twilight only has eyes for Sunset... but she also says she simply hasn't thought about it. All she knows is she doesn't want to lose Sunset so I'm going to rock the Rule of Cool here and say that leaves Rarity a hoof-in-the-door because it's the most likely to lead to porno shenanigans, but of course that's purely meta speculation.
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From the mouth of half of God, I like how you perceive Rarity and Sunset in this chapter. I will say that it's not how I would explain it, but you do an excellent job sorting out Sunset's issues on the matter.
Also,
3859267 I approve this image.
3859438 thank you
for Lapis-Lazuli; do know how often i want to reread a new chapter in less then 60m from finishing it?
THIS IS THE FIRST TIME.YOU ARE AMAZING!
this story dispite being awesome ...lacks actual sex...
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Ah ah ah, don't be jumpin' the gun there kid.
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No need to apologize I am notoriously bad at articulating my points.
As to your theory, yeah that makes since. I thought that Rarity helping Sunset was more out of... wanting to help things work out? Like she could see that Sunset was head-over-heels for Twi and wanted them both to be happy. It didn't occur to me that Rarity's motives were slightly selfish because she wanted to live vicarously through Sunset
3859632 And yet it makes sense. If Rarity has the desire to be with Twilight, but doesn't have the nerve to go through with it and risk damaging their friendship, then of course she would help Sunset for the sake of living through her. Then this whole process begins with Rarity having Kink outfits and she gives Sunset one of hers. Both see themselves as controlling and potentially manipulative ponies, but also see that Twilight is the true leader, and more powerful than either of them. They are both attracted to this power. It might be why Rarity desired Blueblood, he had authority much higher than her own. Yay finding canon connections to fanfic!
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Only somewhat because Rarity is a successful businessmare. Sunset and Twilight have made this a lifestyle and that's not something Rarity can commit to because of her boutique. If this goes the way I think it will, Sunny and Twi continue as they are and Rarity joins in (as a sub) whenever she can.
"-nty percent cooler"
Twisunset?
FLutterdash?
Lyrabon?
Octav3?
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How could you not done the "Kiss-her-to-make-her-snap-out-of-it" cliche?
I am really not crazy on the domination thing
is every couple domsub?
your a really great writer though making a good fic out of a original idea
don't pay attention to my whining I just got mentally scarred from a really horrible slave domination gurren lagann comic
your a great writer and i am following you :)
I am always so ALMOST allright with this story its just so annoying how it just a tiny bit too extreme for me
I write some pretty bdsm themed fanfiction on a different site from my experience as a submissive myself. I want to like this story, I really, REALLY do. But I can't help feeling like it's too forced. You took a strong female character like Sunset and made her a sub. Reasonable. HOWEVER, completely and absolutely changing her personality is such a drastic way is not reasonable. Now, rather than being Sunset Shimmer: a submissive, she is a generic submissive who happens to be named Sunset Shimmer. Even if she is trying to be an obedient sub her personality would show up in everyday actions. This is a girl who tried to take over a highschool full of students and now, suddenly and abruptly she has no urges to have a will of her own? Plus, EVERY sub has a list of things they can't and won't do and it is the dominant's job to work around them. Unless they have no true personality besides "Please Master/Mistress" (which is VERY rare), they will not say things like "anything you do to me is wonderful because you are doing it" like Sunset says and implies. I will try to finish this story, but if it continues on this path of stereotypical dom/sub relationships I will simply move on and not look back.
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