This will be fun.

Nice setup so far...

~Skeeter The Lurker

Hmm. great story, but there seem to be a few grammar errors here and there. Unusual for you. No proofreaders for this story?
Anyway. I'm going to follow this like every other story you write/have written

What... what did Celestia do with that letter....

Regarding the very beginning of the story: Should Sunset Shimmer know about Princess Luna? I imagine that she went to "Earth" (or whatever the place with the humanoids is called) before Luna was changed back from Nightmare by Twilight.

3823962 I think maybe she put two and two together. She'd probably at least know the legend of Nightmare Moon in passing, but more to her poimt of view, the authority of the high school was a human analogue of Celestia. But she didn't run that show entirely alone...she had a vice-principal. I'd love to have known what went through Sunset's head when that clicked!

Very good start to things here. Celestia playing the long game again, as usual. Watching this with interest...

Oh yes this will be fun especially after seeing the cover image

3823848 A you know what happened to that letter or at the very least near that letter.

only pony who would even know where the look for them.

where to look
All I found!

I'm liking where this is going..

Prodigal daughter, yay! X3

I have to say, an interesting concept, you don't usually see TwiShimmers here, seems like a good read, hope that this won't be too much of a problem for you

*Pulls up chair.* Dis gun be gud.

Twilight huffed out a sigh and tossed the labcoat over a chair, glaring at the concoctions on her bench. “Nothing explode until I can get back,” she commanded

I swear, I was expecting the chapter to end with her walking back down stairs into an explosion.

Many good horse words all around, though it really does need a proofreader. I shall continue onward regardless

You've given yourself the opourtunity to take the road less traveled with this ship, and so far I'm loving your writing style and how you've portrayed a reformed Sunset Shimmer. This is getting a favorite.

Ok the most intimitdateing thing in all of Equestria is Celestia has THAT look in her eye,Oh man I'm so loving this one chapter and itno the favorites list that's a first for me!

that's all this comment needs

Why was everypony being so nice to her!?

Yeah, I don't like optimists either.

“We’re going to have company!”

chivethebrigade.files.wordpress.com/2010/09/choose-weapon-09_30_10-920-anti-aircraft-1.jpg K, I'm ready.

Well, so far I'm impressed. Everyone's in character, nothing seems that forced... I especially loves Sunset's breakdown and utter confusion at people being nice. Not sure how you'll ease into the BDSM, but I'm curious to find out.

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y do you sine yore name?

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Off to a good start! Curious to see how this will play out.

"Look, I don’t get it either and, don’t care to, and don’t want to be chewed out by my CO."

This may be better rewritten as, "Look, I don't get it either, nor do I care to, but I certainly don't want to get chewed out by my CO." Makes more grammatical sense and flows more nicely. Other than that, nothing really stood out to me for editing's sake. Kudos for that!

There's quite a bit to take in with this first chapter, but two things I'm certain of: 1) I'm hooked and plan to finish this to the end with due haste; and 2) Your admirable writing style and evident skill at investing in your characters have earned this story a Favourite after just one chapter. Gold star! (Quite literally!) I look forward to continuing this, which I shall get to straight away! Thanks for writing

~Ren

PS: Am I correct in assuming that Celestia's letter smelled/tasted funny because of the ambient scent she used in her room to make Sunset feel at home?

I'm not sure why but I really enjoyed Spike's opinion and handling of the letter. The idea that they actually taste different depending on content is highly entertaining. ^^

Sunset Shimmer was sure the golden color in her face drained to white then. Her open mouth certainly thought so. Princess! Princess! Surely not. This was a little joke.

It sounds as though Sunset is unaware of Twilight's ascension, but she was already an alicorn at the beginning of EG1, and Sunset even (sarcastically) addresses her as "princess" in the opening scene. Am I misreading this part, or is this a continuity issue?

Either way, loving this so far :)

Edit: and looking at comments further down the line, it appears that everyone in the world has already brought this up and argued over it ad infinitum, so I'll just shut up now. Also, still loving it :)

It was almost floral and spicy and… musky. Odd. Very odd.

Foreshadowing

Twilight huffed out a sigh and tossed the labcoat over a chair, glaring at the concoctions on her bench. “Nothing explode until I can get back,” she commanded

That, my friend, is exactly what I would do.

This sounds like a good story. I can't wait to read more.

it’s most capable teacher,

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being taught by Princess Celestia again not that she doesnt know Twilight is a princess
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“TWILIGHT!” Spike hollered from up on the ladder. “LETTER FOR YOU! AND IT TASTED WEIRD! COULD BE BAD NEWS!”

Wait a sec... Spike can tell what a letter tastes like?

No wonder he eats gems and rocks, they at least taste better than paper.