Sunset Shimmer struggles to embrace her new relationship with Twilight Sparkle. And learns there is more to friendship - and love - than being nice to somepony you like.
Unfortunate. I was liking the story so far and even had some hopes that this wwas finally going to be "that" story I've been looking for ever since joining the site, but with the developments in this chapter the story has started down a road of BDSM that I don't enjoy. It was really nice so far, when it was still personal with Twilight calling Sunset by name, but now it's gone too far for me to follow. So I'll just sign off here and thank you for the story up to this point.
Don't get me wrong, I'm not quiting because the story has become bad or anything, it's simply treading territory now that I'm no longer comfortable with, that's all. It's still as well-written as ever, and those that are into this will most certainly be in for a treat with future updates. I wish you the best of luck!
3848940 Im sorry to see you go, and sad that I couldn't fufill your need. Keep your eyes on this account though, there's going to be more fun stuff coming in the future that might scratch your itch.
I never really considered BDSM one of my fetishes, and seven chapters in, I doubt that will change. Still, this is written well enough that I'm not leaving in outright disgust, so I suppose that counts for something.
I sincerely question your motives for starting then, frankly.
It's exactly what it says on the tin.
Congratulations, Lapis, this doesn't suck. You might want to give Sunset a little more autonomy back, she's becoming a little too mindless, but apart from that this is pretty thoroughly enjoyable and steadily improving over time.
3849032 I'm sure we'll meet again, as I've read and followed some of your other works before. I do hope I didn't offend you or anything, that certainly was not the intent. Again, the story is still of the same quality as before, the fault lies entirely with my preferences and interests. I'm not a fan of the stronger aspects of BDSM, like pain or name-calling (pet, slave, etc.) and I can't really enjoy them, so with the latest chapter introducing those elements, it in turn became hard for me to like the chapter itself. I prefer the "lighter" variants, I suppose you could say.
I really did like the story up to this point, though. Seeing Sunset Shimmer come to the realisation of her kinks and her attraction to Twilight was interesting, as was Twilight being almost entirely clueless and unknowing. That was one particular aspect that I really enjoyed, in fact, namely that both Sunset and Twilight were new to this. I like reading stories that deal with the topic of discovery, doesn't matter if it's the discovery of new lands or the discovery of one's self and one's likes.
It's also kind of refreshing, I haven't seen many stories like this were both partners are new to this kind of relationship and interest. In most stories one is the experienced mare guiding her newcomer partner or something. So watching Twilight and Sunset discover and explore this new relationship together was very sweet and interesting, I really enjoyed that aspect of the story. Plus, Sunset's eagerness makes her very endearing to the reader, at least for me. I just wanted to reach into my screen and huggle the adorable thing!
Part of me kind of wants to see where it goes from here, but with the shift to "stronger" BDSM aspects, it would be hard for me to do so. It's not so much that I don't like the sub/dom aspect. I can enjoy stories with such a relationship between characters, up to a certain extent. I was fine with Sunset calling Twilight "Mistress", because Twilight in return still called Sunset by her name and treated her as a person, er, pony. I liked how subtle and tender it all was.
However, when Twilight dropped that and started treating Sunset more like a pet and less like a mare (or an equal, more like), combined with the introduction of the pain-aspects, it's just a step too far for me. That's not your fault at all, it's just me, I'm just not a fan of that. I know Sunset wants it and is fine with it and I know Twilight is not being cruel or mean or anything, but it just doesn't do anything for me. Some people (and ponies) like that - which is totally fine! - but I just don't, that's all.
I must say, however, that I did like Twilight's panic attack. That was a strong character moment there and it makes perfect sense. I was really happy that you included it, because it's always bugged me a bit in other, similar stories that whoever was the dom was suddenly completely fine inflicting pain upon her partner. Especially when the dom is a demure and gentle soul like Twilight, for example. I wish more BDSM stories tackled this as serious and thorough as you did in this chapter. Well done.
In the end, I knew the story was probably going to go down this road, given how eager Sunset was and how elaborate her desires in previous chapters. I just kinda hoped it wouldn't, because I, personally, enjoyed the more subtle, gentle sub/dom relationship of previous chapters. I'm still looking for a fanfic that features such a variant, with full bondage and stuff, but without the pain and slave/pet aspect.
So far, this fic up to this chapter was the closest I ever got to finding that story, and I thank you for that. It really was a nice, pleasant and heart-warming read. ^_^
Some people seem to dislike this foray into BDSM, but I find it quite intriguing.
I love the way Twilight reacts to her own dominant tendencies. I would have expected Sunset to have similar issues except for a few things. That (in my own head at least) ponies are less prone to aggressive behavior than humans. That there is less of the "I must be a bad person" feel to being submissive. And not to mention that Sunset has been working herself into her role over a lot if time through her fantasies.
3849293 I'm uncomfortable with the "dehumanization" of Sunset, too. Twilight didn't (verbally) reciprocate Sunset's "I love you", either. Kinda jarring.
A shame, since I really like this story otherwise. I have no problems with (even heavy) bondage, but referring to people as pets is where I draw the line.
I'm still looking for a fanfic that features such a variant, with full bondage and stuff, but without the pain and slave/pet aspect.
3849755 You're welcome. 3845377 Um...well, considering she spent the last day or so studying this very scenario, it's not likely she would suddenly forget about it.
And once again an awesome chapter. Twilight's reaction was beautiful. Fluttershy's explanation about it to Sunset was so good.
One of the reasons I read fics like this is so I can try to understand why someone wants to be treated the way Sunset does, and I think this fic has done a wonderful job with it overall.
What I'm hoping to sere in the future is a sort of "A day in the life of Sunset" chapter, where we see her serving Twilight and doing the things Twilight wants her to do, with honest-to-goodness screwups that result in punishment but doesn't necessarily lead to sex. I realize that this is almost sacrilege in a clopfic, but, it feels like Twi and Sunset have made this a lifestyle, not just a sex game
Then you're just looking for top/bottom sex with a focus in bondage. You should probably search specifically for that, as a full trip into BDSM is going to contain or at least touch upon the trust, understanding, and relationship between owner and pet.
The the things that's "erking" me is how Sunset ALWAYS refers to Twilight as "mistress". (Read this in an epic speech voice) You have your squadmates and you have your sergeant. You will treat your sergeant with respect and you will die for him. Do you know what he will do in return? The exact same thing; Your sergeant will die for his squadron.
I love where this is going, i enjoy it and hoped every moment to see how Shining freaked out to hear these thing about his sister. somehow i don´t get the best description about Shining till now, i mean i still miss their Season ending and only saw the fight a bit, (just don´t find the episode at that time) So i have a hard time to acutally like Shining Armor, maybe he was a bit to much like (Prince Charmin, don´t sure who that was but i think i had something to do with the fact, that he was to perfect and lover like.).
Good work, i can´t wait to get to the sequel i hope you make it way longer, at least i mean to see it wasn´t finish yet.
Unfortunate. I was liking the story so far and even had some hopes that this wwas finally going to be "that" story I've been looking for ever since joining the site, but with the developments in this chapter the story has started down a road of BDSM that I don't enjoy. It was really nice so far, when it was still personal with Twilight calling Sunset by name, but now it's gone too far for me to follow. So I'll just sign off here and thank you for the story up to this point.
Don't get me wrong, I'm not quiting because the story has become bad or anything, it's simply treading territory now that I'm no longer comfortable with, that's all. It's still as well-written as ever, and those that are into this will most certainly be in for a treat with future updates. I wish you the best of luck!
3848940 Im sorry to see you go, and sad that I couldn't fufill your need. Keep your eyes on this account though, there's going to be more fun stuff coming in the future that might scratch your itch.
Oh Cadence be honest for once...you just can't resist some fun can you?
Well she already said that life in the crystal empire is not very exciting
Oh man...
When Twilight ran out...
Goddamn, dude.
~Skeeter The Lurker
I never really considered BDSM one of my fetishes, and seven chapters in, I doubt that will change. Still, this is written well enough that I'm not leaving in outright disgust, so I suppose that counts for something.
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I sincerely question your motives for starting then, frankly.
It's exactly what it says on the tin.
Congratulations, Lapis, this doesn't suck. You might want to give Sunset a little more autonomy back, she's becoming a little too mindless, but apart from that this is pretty thoroughly enjoyable and steadily improving over time.
... That's gotta be awkward for Shining.
3849214
I'm here for the relationship. The sex is just a bonus.
Ironic, considering its a clopfic.
3849032
I'm sure we'll meet again, as I've read and followed some of your other works before. I do hope I didn't offend you or anything, that certainly was not the intent. Again, the story is still of the same quality as before, the fault lies entirely with my preferences and interests. I'm not a fan of the stronger aspects of BDSM, like pain or name-calling (pet, slave, etc.) and I can't really enjoy them, so with the latest chapter introducing those elements, it in turn became hard for me to like the chapter itself. I prefer the "lighter" variants, I suppose you could say.
I really did like the story up to this point, though. Seeing Sunset Shimmer come to the realisation of her kinks and her attraction to Twilight was interesting, as was Twilight being almost entirely clueless and unknowing. That was one particular aspect that I really enjoyed, in fact, namely that both Sunset and Twilight were new to this. I like reading stories that deal with the topic of discovery, doesn't matter if it's the discovery of new lands or the discovery of one's self and one's likes.
It's also kind of refreshing, I haven't seen many stories like this were both partners are new to this kind of relationship and interest. In most stories one is the experienced mare guiding her newcomer partner or something. So watching Twilight and Sunset discover and explore this new relationship together was very sweet and interesting, I really enjoyed that aspect of the story. Plus, Sunset's eagerness makes her very endearing to the reader, at least for me. I just wanted to reach into my screen and huggle the adorable thing!
Part of me kind of wants to see where it goes from here, but with the shift to "stronger" BDSM aspects, it would be hard for me to do so. It's not so much that I don't like the sub/dom aspect. I can enjoy stories with such a relationship between characters, up to a certain extent. I was fine with Sunset calling Twilight "Mistress", because Twilight in return still called Sunset by her name and treated her as a person, er, pony. I liked how subtle and tender it all was.
However, when Twilight dropped that and started treating Sunset more like a pet and less like a mare (or an equal, more like), combined with the introduction of the pain-aspects, it's just a step too far for me. That's not your fault at all, it's just me, I'm just not a fan of that. I know Sunset wants it and is fine with it and I know Twilight is not being cruel or mean or anything, but it just doesn't do anything for me. Some people (and ponies) like that - which is totally fine! - but I just don't, that's all.
I must say, however, that I did like Twilight's panic attack. That was a strong character moment there and it makes perfect sense. I was really happy that you included it, because it's always bugged me a bit in other, similar stories that whoever was the dom was suddenly completely fine inflicting pain upon her partner. Especially when the dom is a demure and gentle soul like Twilight, for example. I wish more BDSM stories tackled this as serious and thorough as you did in this chapter. Well done.
In the end, I knew the story was probably going to go down this road, given how eager Sunset was and how elaborate her desires in previous chapters. I just kinda hoped it wouldn't, because I, personally, enjoyed the more subtle, gentle sub/dom relationship of previous chapters. I'm still looking for a fanfic that features such a variant, with full bondage and stuff, but without the pain and slave/pet aspect.
So far, this fic up to this chapter was the closest I ever got to finding that story, and I thank you for that. It really was a nice, pleasant and heart-warming read. ^_^
Shining Armor's going to wind up with a collar around his neck at this rate. By Cadance.
Some people seem to dislike this foray into BDSM, but I find it quite intriguing.
I love the way Twilight reacts to her own dominant tendencies. I would have expected Sunset to have similar issues except for a few things. That (in my own head at least) ponies are less prone to aggressive behavior than humans. That there is less of the "I must be a bad person" feel to being submissive. And not to mention that Sunset has been working herself into her role over a lot if time through her fantasies.
Nice update!
3849293
I'm uncomfortable with the "dehumanization" of Sunset, too. Twilight didn't (verbally) reciprocate Sunset's "I love you", either. Kinda jarring.
A shame, since I really like this story otherwise. I have no problems with (even heavy) bondage, but referring to people as pets is where I draw the line.
My sentiment, exactly.
3849755
You're welcome.
3845377
Um...well, considering she spent the last day or so studying this very scenario, it's not likely she would suddenly forget about it.
And once again an awesome chapter. Twilight's reaction was beautiful. Fluttershy's explanation about it to Sunset was so good.
One of the reasons I read fics like this is so I can try to understand why someone wants to be treated the way Sunset does, and I think this fic has done a wonderful job with it overall.
What I'm hoping to sere in the future is a sort of "A day in the life of Sunset" chapter, where we see her serving Twilight and doing the things Twilight wants her to do, with honest-to-goodness screwups that result in punishment but doesn't necessarily lead to sex. I realize that this is almost sacrilege in a clopfic, but, it feels like Twi and Sunset have made this a lifestyle, not just a sex game
Well well well. So Twilight finally gets into it, well then I can see many happy and sweaty nights for the two of them from now on.
Aaaaaand what were those pictures that Shiny took anyway?
Shining and Cadence are in now also this could be interesting
3850465
Then you're just looking for top/bottom sex with a focus in bondage. You should probably search specifically for that, as a full trip into BDSM is going to contain or at least touch upon the trust, understanding, and relationship between owner and pet.
3852356 Girls do talk about sex, yanno.
3844575 I can neither confirm nor deny this.
3852360 I can confirm this.
3853868 and too often... but... cadence filled me with laughs
3850687 I would imagine Luna doing some naughty things to herself where she thought no one could see.
Well done!
Uh, oh. Random disliker alert!
And
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Just like your story?
3850109
I would not be surprised.
I like it, but there seems to be too much sex. I feel it would be better if there was more to the storyline.
Twilight...Sunset...Rainbow Dash...Fluttershy......My mind is officially blown!
SHIT'S. GONNA. GO. DOWN.
The the things that's "erking" me is how Sunset ALWAYS refers to Twilight as "mistress". (Read this in an epic speech voice) You have your squadmates and you have your sergeant. You will treat your sergeant with respect and you will die for him. Do you know what he will do in return? The exact same thing; Your sergeant will die for his squadron.
3850465 I like you.
I love where this is going, i enjoy it and hoped every moment to see how Shining freaked out to hear these thing about his sister. somehow i don´t get the best description about Shining till now, i mean i still miss their Season ending and only saw the fight a bit, (just don´t find the episode at that time)
So i have a hard time to acutally like Shining Armor, maybe he was a bit to much like (Prince Charmin, don´t sure who that was but i think i had something to do with the fact, that he was to perfect and lover like.).
Good work, i can´t wait to get to the sequel i hope you make it way longer, at least i mean to see it wasn´t finish yet.
3852360 that last few words in the end reminded me from Scooby Doo when Fred Jones says when the start mystery solving in the show nice
wait but isn't that a narrator line why is Cadance reacting
lol
wait... she didn't really... yep... she did