Sunset Shimmer struggles to embrace her new relationship with Twilight Sparkle. And learns there is more to friendship - and love - than being nice to somepony you like.
Oh this is so hot! I think Twilight may have some trouble with this though. Yes she is naturally confident but she has a firm beleif that she is no better than anypony else. I think even a simple Dom/Sub roleplay would be difficult for her. I mean she could do it, but she wouldn't be entirely comfortable. Just my thoughts on the matter, I'm looking forward to seeing where this story goes though.
Aww maan... i really dont like it but in all honesty i must say that i think you are moving a little bit too fast and progressive with this story. Ok it might be clop-centric but that doesnt mean that character development has to suffer for this... You had a perfect beginning in the first two chapters so far... i really liked all the little details that sunset has seen in the ponies around her. (btw. i cracked my ass open about rainbow having a doctorate. avesomly hilarous idea.) What i dont likw is how you let rarity spell out all of sunsets deep (and quite obviously repressed) feelings about twi FOR herself. I just dont understand why? why couldnt you flesh it out more to seem like an selfdiscovery? why not let her wander around and possibly have sex with other ponies (probably even mostly colts) just so that she can understand what she actually really wants? Maybe i am just overzealulous to read a good fic from the beginning. i dont know...
No blasting involved. You're ignoring facts to create your point that by your wording is completely unassailable and therefore must be even more factual. So rather than not-so-subtly suggesting I stop being an asshole, I highly suggest you look to your own quarters first and understand just what it is you're saying.
All I've said is that it's quite the -possibility- (with speculative evidence based on what we know to be fact - and THEN conjecture to fill in the gaps) that the author didn't screw up like you people are 'suggesting'. In return I've been seeing frustrating stonewalling, short-sightedness, an inability to compromise, all manner of statements that basically add up to "No, it can only be this one way and there are no other possibilities" and attitude. I'm not about to be all flowery and hold hands with people who aren't going to bother being reasonable. If you want to grind points with me, we'll do that. If you want to have a civil discussion wherein you keep an open mind? We can go back and try that out.
In the end I'm just pointing out that if the former, you're going to find the whole thing utterly fruitless to have bothered jumping on me in the first place in something that didn't concern you before it's done, for I am notoriously stubborn.
Just wanted to say how much I'm enjoying this. I love the way you handled Sunset's reunion with Celestia, it gave me a case of good feels.
I also like how you're setting up Sunset's seduction of Twilight, it just seems right, like if somepony were to actually go about seducing Twilight, they'd start with books.
On thing I really hope to see is Celestia catching out Twi and Sunset after they're relationship gets started, so that they both know that she knows what's up. The level of awkward would be astronomical.
3827077 2000 bits that all of this is setup by celestia and Cadance to get some good clop material. andddd maybe help twi with her hermit bookworm lifestyle.
3839656 yes, but then Trixie bursts in, wearing her custom made maid outfit on with a riding crop in her hooves and demands the use of twilight... menage troi And fleur due lies looked up from her playmare and smiled
3832441 challenge accepted, read the above scenerio 3828041 3828420 yes, so much yes... and see above
3827077 3827675 I double that... these 8000 bits are mine
by the way if you look at twighlights parents and thier cuty marks and then deeply think about twixy like her mane her cutie mark and her superior( if undeveloped) magical capabilities. parts of your brain will explode.
come on bro we're reading about sunset shimmer being into bdsm hard to think of a joke but ill try ahem strange i always thought sunset would still be attempting to gain power from all of the friends and systmatically rapeing them does no one get the joke well fuck you then bro
I guess i didn't realise this was gona be heavy on the clop portion of a clop-fic. It just goes so fast. Litterally first day in ponyville, she's confessed to twi, had a rarity aided realization of her sexuality and gotten a dress to seduce twi in. Really? One day?
Which is where i realised that I'm not treating this fic right. Its a clop fic, and in that view it seems to be a fine piece.
Throguh even so rarity is a touch creepy.
Thanks for putting this up here, I'm off to find something more my cup of tea.
1000 bits say Twilight will caved first and hump Sunset.
I love this so far
This is going to be good.
It's three in the morning!
Oh this is so hot! I think Twilight may have some trouble with this though. Yes she is naturally confident but she has a firm beleif that she is no better than anypony else. I think even a simple Dom/Sub roleplay would be difficult for her. I mean she could do it, but she wouldn't be entirely comfortable. Just my thoughts on the matter, I'm looking forward to seeing where this story goes though.
Aww maan... i really dont like it but in all honesty i must say that i think you are moving a little bit too fast and progressive with this story. Ok it might be clop-centric but that doesnt mean that character development has to suffer for this... You had a perfect beginning in the first two chapters so far... i really liked all the little details that sunset has seen in the ponies around her. (btw. i cracked my ass open about rainbow having a doctorate. avesomly hilarous idea.) What i dont likw is how you let rarity spell out all of sunsets deep (and quite obviously repressed) feelings about twi FOR herself. I just dont understand why? why couldnt you flesh it out more to seem like an selfdiscovery? why not let her wander around and possibly have sex with other ponies (probably even mostly colts) just so that she can understand what she actually really wants?
Maybe i am just overzealulous to read a good fic from the beginning. i dont know...
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No blasting involved. You're ignoring facts to create your point that by your wording is completely unassailable and therefore must be even more factual. So rather than not-so-subtly suggesting I stop being an asshole, I highly suggest you look to your own quarters first and understand just what it is you're saying.
All I've said is that it's quite the -possibility- (with speculative evidence based on what we know to be fact - and THEN conjecture to fill in the gaps) that the author didn't screw up like you people are 'suggesting'. In return I've been seeing frustrating stonewalling, short-sightedness, an inability to compromise, all manner of statements that basically add up to "No, it can only be this one way and there are no other possibilities" and attitude. I'm not about to be all flowery and hold hands with people who aren't going to bother being reasonable. If you want to grind points with me, we'll do that. If you want to have a civil discussion wherein you keep an open mind? We can go back and try that out.
In the end I'm just pointing out that if the former, you're going to find the whole thing utterly fruitless to have bothered jumping on me in the first place in something that didn't concern you before it's done, for I am notoriously stubborn.
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Awwr, but Doc~ D:
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Completely understandable. Since it wasn't an oversight, I have no further objections! Please continue the wonderful story at your leisure.
Ooo, nice chapter...
Excellent setup, too.
~Skeeter The Lurker
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I'll match your bet that Twilight remains dense enough that Sunset will end up needing to do something drastic to get through to her.
I think this BDSM thing is getting to me, must be the hangover from that Sunstone comic I've been reading.
Just wanted to say how much I'm enjoying this. I love the way you handled Sunset's reunion with Celestia, it gave me a case of good feels.
I also like how you're setting up Sunset's seduction of Twilight, it just seems right, like if somepony were to actually go about seducing Twilight, they'd start with books.
On thing I really hope to see is Celestia catching out Twi and Sunset after they're relationship gets started, so that they both know that she knows what's up. The level of awkward would be astronomical.
This really reminds of Mares and Mistresses except with Sunset in Trixie's role.
wow, definitely devoting my time to this one.
Consider my interest piqued. I shall observe with interest.
As is my wont, here are a few minor grammar corrections from the first chapter that you might want to fix up:
And, just for the fun of it, I fixed this line from the third chapter for you:
3827077 2000 bits that all of this is setup by celestia and Cadance to get some good clop material. andddd maybe help twi with her hermit bookworm lifestyle.
Ah, Lapis, rapidly making a name for yourself in clop, now, are we?
You've gone to the dark side and all I can do is watch from afar with interest, morbid fascination and a new box of Kleenex-
Wait. Fuck, did I just say that out loud?
Sunset Shimmer is best Evelynn
3843081 Indeed.
3839656 yes, but then Trixie bursts in, wearing her custom made maid outfit on with a riding crop in her hooves and demands the use of twilight... menage troi
And fleur due lies looked up from her playmare and smiled
3832441 challenge accepted, read the above scenerio
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3828420 yes, so much yes... and see above
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3827675 I double that... these 8000 bits are mine
It was jarring how fast Sunset dropped the Aloe and Lotus matter before moving on into a different topic. It still feels unresolved.
Nice sunset sparkle fic :D
EDIT: wow a dislike...
Ummm boioioioioioiong that's all
3847747 I bet 10,000,000 bits
by the way if you look at twighlights parents and thier cuty marks and then deeply think about twixy like her mane her cutie mark and her superior( if undeveloped) magical capabilities. parts of your brain will explode.
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if you try to read this comment your brain will explode
Didn't that already happen? I think it was in the discord episodes.
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oh i like how Sunset look, even without the dressing thing
3832917 Unfortunately you did dear sir....
This would be the third time I've read this it's an amazing story I love it
I'm surprised no-one has made a 'Sunset Subber' joke yet.
come on bro we're reading about sunset shimmer being into bdsm hard to think of a joke but ill try ahem strange i always thought sunset would still be attempting to gain power from all of the friends and systmatically rapeing them does no one get the joke well fuck you then bro
I guess i didn't realise this was gona be heavy on the clop portion of a clop-fic.
It just goes so fast. Litterally first day in ponyville, she's confessed to twi, had a rarity aided realization of her sexuality and gotten a dress to seduce twi in. Really? One day?
Which is where i realised that I'm not treating this fic right. Its a clop fic, and in that view it seems to be a fine piece.
Throguh even so rarity is a touch creepy.
Thanks for putting this up here, I'm off to find something more my cup of tea.
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huh
I see what you did there, Mr. Roth