True Blood
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You know what? I'm down for this. It almost reminds me of the beginning of my own epic novel, A Rather Large Adventure.
Peace has been displayed here, but also tension ever since the yellow unicorn showed up. No grammar errors, great pacing, and a good way of showing what world we are in...I actually, genuinely like this.
I could never imagine Flim and Flam as being genuinely evil until now. They're idiots. Nothing more. But yeah, you did make a good job of instilling terror into the story from the get-go. I applaud you.
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Hey, thanks for reading and leaving your comments! I'm not sure where the inspiration for Flim and Flam being full evil came from, but I never thought they were idiots. If they're capable of creating a machine that presses apples into cider, can SORT apples based on quality, and is powered by nothing but their magic, then they're the most techno-magically adept characters we've seen yet, and that's what I needed.
Hold onto your pants in chapter 2, I'll post it later this week, it gets super dark and quite disturbing. I updated the story tags and description to suit it.
Thanks again!
~ True Blood.
Pretty high stakes for the second chapter. It means it can only go up from here, right?
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Exactly! I could have drawn out the calmer scene setting over a few chapters I guess, but I didn't want anyone getting the wrong idea that this is a happy story like some of my other ones. That and I was keen to get into the gritty side of the story, the next chapter is even heavier (gore alert, by the way). I hope you're enjoying the read