A new power is rising on the edge of Equestria, the likes of which nopony has ever seen. Their intentions are dark and Twilight Sparkle is about to be dragged right into the center of the conflict.
You know what? I'm down for this. It almost reminds me of the beginning of my own epic novel, A Rather Large Adventure.
Peace has been displayed here, but also tension ever since the yellow unicorn showed up. No grammar errors, great pacing, and a good way of showing what world we are in...I actually, genuinely like this.
9318600 Hey, thanks for reading and leaving your comments! I'm not sure where the inspiration for Flim and Flam being full evil came from, but I never thought they were idiots. If they're capable of creating a machine that presses apples into cider, can SORT apples based on quality, and is powered by nothing but their magic, then they're the most techno-magically adept characters we've seen yet, and that's what I needed.
Hold onto your pants in chapter 2, I'll post it later this week, it gets super dark and quite disturbing. I updated the story tags and description to suit it.
You know what? I'm down for this. It almost reminds me of the beginning of my own epic novel, A Rather Large Adventure.
Peace has been displayed here, but also tension ever since the yellow unicorn showed up. No grammar errors, great pacing, and a good way of showing what world we are in...I actually, genuinely like this.
9318600
Hey, thanks for reading and leaving your comments! I'm not sure where the inspiration for Flim and Flam being full evil came from, but I never thought they were idiots. If they're capable of creating a machine that presses apples into cider, can SORT apples based on quality, and is powered by nothing but their magic, then they're the most techno-magically adept characters we've seen yet, and that's what I needed.
Hold onto your pants in chapter 2, I'll post it later this week, it gets super dark and quite disturbing. I updated the story tags and description to suit it.
Thanks again!
~ True Blood.