Muffins!

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What Derpy will do for her muffins! This story is about Derpy getting a muffin, or will she?

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Derpyx0

Derpyx0 #1 · Dec 22nd, 2013 · 1 · ·

Hope you enjoy!

That_G3_Obsessive

That_G3_Obsessive #2 · Dec 23rd, 2013 · 2 · ·

Excellent work, I laughed.

For a first fic, this is surprisingly good! I only see a couple of grammar errors, including some places where you needed to make a new paragraph, and you forgot some commas, but all together not too shabby.

I didn't notice the dragging at all, but then again I don't go that deep.

Keep it up.

Miss Awesome

Miss Awesome #3 · Dec 23rd, 2013 · 1 · ·

"Noooooooooooooooooooooooooo!" Derpy screamed. "My MUFFIN!"

Comment posted by Derpyx0 deleted Jan 14th, 2014

MythrilMoth

MythrilMoth #5 · Jun 13th, 2014 · · 1 ·

"I'm here for my MUFFINS!" she yelled with an excited look in her eyes. Mrs. Cake looked at her with a blank stare.
"Oh, you thought....." she trailed off. "Derpy, our shipment of muffins doesn't come untill tomorrow, you're going to have to wait."

You know...bakeries don't usually have pre-made baked goods shipped to them from elsewhere. They usually, you know, bake them fresh in the store. Because that's actually what a bakery IS. It's a place that makes things like muffins and donuts and pies and cakes and cupcakes.

There was nothing of real interest to this story.

Derpyx0

Derpyx0 #6 · Jun 13th, 2014 · · ·

4540767 Hmm... I guess we never thought about that. Oh well. This was our first story, so it was more of a.... practice story, not one for entertainment. But thank you for the feedback!