Sometimes, the future should stay like such:the future. Fearing whats to come won't help anypony. Though, not everypony thinks the future should be mysterious. After a few mistakes here and there, first being Twilight's time spell, now they are stuck with the end result.
How can anypony handle their dreams being shattered like nothing right before their eyes?
I wanted an image, but its in the works, so here for right now.
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3599323 I never considered it, thanks!
Some minor grammar issues, but overall I liked it, though I would definitely recommend an editor.
If Script Spell was voiced, what would she sound like?
Gee, I hope Script Spell doesn't miss her meeting with Princess Scootaloo! Will she miss her meeting with Princess Scootaloo?
3739589 Well, her meeting is quite delayed, but I'm sure she won't miss anything. Just hope she catches no glimpse towards Rainbow Dash. That will not be pretty.
3739580 Have you seen Littlest Pet Shop? If you have, I would imagine her to sound like a combination of Minka. (The hyper active monkey girl) and Pepper~
3739650 Actually I'd like to see them meet. I find the looks on there faces funny and this is making me sound like a jerk, isn't it?
3740577 Not really, I plan on the meeting. That's in next chapter.
Then again, the first meeting is with the futuristic RD. Lets just say, the feels is great with ScootaDash
This chapter was bad, in my opinion. Your past chapters have been better. This chapter was just very confusing. Nothing felt legitimate, and I had no idea what was going on. The pacing was so bad. I actually had to do something I despise doing—stop halfway through and not read the rest of the chapter. I think you need a prereader and/or an editor. Also, your lack of cover art is driving me crazy. I might have to do one for you.
3915526 I'm editing it now. I didn't publish it-my computer probably had done something strange again. I'll look into fixing that.
I was trying to make cover art. When I wiped my comp, my picture was also gone ^^"
Yeah... You might want to get some prereaders and/or editors. I'd be happy to help. You can edit your story using google docs.
Hey, what's going on?! I can't read the next chapter! If this is some kind of joke it's not funny. If it's a mistake, then you should fix it right away!
3917139 Oh, that! Its not weird. It was published way too soon. I'll be up again in a few. (There were way too many errors for my taste. It didn't feel like Script to me.)
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Re-edited, its still pretty bad. I can't figure it out how to associate everything. It sounds really weird.
3922731 Ask around for help, then. Make a blog post if you have to.
3922739 I am. That's what took me so long with the chapter. You see, I wanted to figure the answer out myself because I didn't know the answer.
Script Spell was a student of that. She's kind of like Twilight in that regard. She's clever. I wanted a pony to figure out the answer. I had to look everywhere for an answer to the question:What does a pony miss the most? Then, I wanted her to answer it. I wanted a pony that wanted to see the events but not understand truly, to answer because no one has that experience. Then again, I wanted it to lead into Scootaloo seeing RD the first time around. (Past RD)
It was hard looking for an answer that wasn't so materialistic in a sense.
I'm sorry, what? Did I skip a chapter or something? This chapter is way too confusing. Do something to fix it! NOW! Confusing is never good! Furthermore I'm with JumpingShinyFrogs. See his comment.
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? What was the question? Your comment is just as confusing as this chapter!
3922844 I'm seriously going rage quit from this chapter toady. I'm starting tomorrow.
3922844 It is? Basically, Script tried answering the question Scootaloo gave Cadence in the first chapter. Scootaloo asked a question to Cadence. However, Cadence's reply never has been shown. Her punishment being more severe than intended. Twilight can't get free and she can't answer.
The chapter WAS supposed to cover that. Cadence can't get peace and never was free, even with the answer. The Reverse Message was the story of pre-princesses CMC during the End Times. Scootaloo was the fighter who got screwed by Rainbow Dash. Scootaloo had done what Celestia had done to Twilight. She needed Script's help like Celestia needed Twilight's. Its a cycle they can't end because no one really understands. (Or reads between the lines TO understand) The fight ends in a dreamesque way like during MMC as she recalls past information from others and memories so that she finally understands the meaning. ( Like Twilight understanding in MMC how to stop the spell or like the second episode of MLP)
3923207 Now that's more like it! And don't give up on chapter three just yet, I know you can do it! And again, I'd love to be your prereader.
3926336 I have no idea how to form it in a chapter. I know WHAT I want to write. .
but the order and placing the main 6 there is hard to figure.
3926341 Try asking people on this website who you think are more talented then you.
3927627 I'm updating tomorrow. I think I have a solution. It might take away some Scootaloo and (past) Rainbow Dash involvement, but it'll work.
Is this dead? Are you dead?
4975220 Its not dead-I've been sick since June a d my comp is on the fritz. I would have posted the latest chapter if chrome wasn't a dick. I'm posting it soon!
OK, see now this is how you do crazy evil Cadence. You know, I always thought this and you were dead... (please PM me your response, if you have one to give)
5596735 No, I just got extremely sick along with school. (Really, stupid IBD!) But I'm not dead in the least. I've just was forcibly put on hold.
Ah, I love evil Cadance. I had to put so much thought into the way she would see things, and its not even the complete tale of how she'd see things. I wanted to make a twist on Nightmare Moon by creating her based on how her fandoms percieve her. Many kind of ignore her existance, if not, some rage that she's even a princess. So, I decided to rewrite the scene entirely! (I actually wrote a whole thing before, having that mentioned but only partially. I removed it to put more emphasis on Fractured's views.) I wish she'd get more love, she needs some love.