A cold, mysterious winter overtakes Equestria, its ponies finding themselves growing bitter and hateful towards each other. Blizzards rage, freezing cities and ravaging the skies.
Ponyville, home to the Elements of Harmony, find themselves as the eye of the storm as Twilight and her friends try to deal with the sudden blizzards, while helping the refugees flooding into the small town.
A very old evil has been sleeping patiently and is slowly starting to wake again - but can Twilight stop it in time before Equestria becomes desolate?
(Takes place in early Season 1, before Winter Wrap Up)
Chapters (4)
Hey there DarkStarZN, I'm coming in from Reddit. Let me start by saying that you've got some good foundation skills as just a beginner. Out of curiosity, have you done a bit a writing before your Fimfiction submissions? I ask because I was absolutely terrible when I first started, due entirely to that I had no writing skill or experience to start with whatsoever.
But on to the story: The over all feeling of the story so far is alright. It's not fantastic or even very good, but it's good enough to arouse interest.
I just deleted a wall of text I wrote because I took another good look and decided that you really didn't need a lecture on the specifics. The story is good overall with some stumbles, most of which I think can be recovered through some simple revision. I think you'll do just fine in the coming future as you gain experience and read plenty, and you don't really need someone who's not very good themselves to tell you what you've done right or wrong. So all I'll say is that it's interesting and I'll leave it at that. And since I'm so interested, I'll be watching to see where this goes. Good luck.
3615771 Thank you very much for your time.
Yes, I have done quite a bit of writing before Fimfiction - but nothing published or even completed, really. I tried a FiM fanfic a while back, but realised that the story overall just wouldn't work (Wasn't refined enough).
The general story line in this one, however, is far more defined. (And has actually been in 'developement' if you will, for over a year now). My general lack of writing experience (and proof-readers/editors) is what's hampering my writing at this stage, I think.
I will try my best to improve my writing, and again thank you for your time.
Loooove it!