Alternate Ending
-Alternate ending-
Twilight looked back and forth between the bright pink earth pony and the sky blue pegasus, at a loss for what to do now. So Rainbow Dash had been following them all day, probably laughing at every failed attempt she had made, but it didn’t really make that much of a difference now, did it? Pinkie was now acutely aware of Twilight’s feelings. Twilight now had to find out if Pinkie felt the same.
Twilight cleared her throat, “So. Pinkie? Now that you know… Well… Now that you know how I feel I would like to know if there’s a chance you could reciprocate?”
Pinkie gazed off into the horizon, the dying light of the sunset reflecting in her eyes, “Twilight, I think you should know that there’s no way we could be in a relationship together.”
Twilight again felt the harsh blow of rejection. Her ears drooped and she fought against the urge to cry.
Pinkie turned to face Twilight again, “Unless we somehow included Dashie.”
Twilight and Rainbow Dash yelled as one, “What?!?”
Pinkie only raised an eyebrow, “Is it that difficult to recognize the proposition of a threesome?”
Twilight and Rainbow Dash looked each other up and down, both now noticing just how fine the other pony was.
Twilight pursed her lips, “Well… It could be very interesting seeing how this goes with a pegasus.”
Rainbow Dash flapped her wings once, “I guess I wouldn’t be opposed to the idea.”
And so the three became an item proving once and for all that Pinkie always gets what she wants.
--Author's Note--
Found this on my computer this morning and I don't remember typing it. I must have written it while completely out of it on my medication. It's a real masterpiece though.
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303501
Sorry to disappoint.
I couldn't help but laugh at this.
Nice.
303790
I feel like I used a plethora of cliches. Which one in particular is the one you hate?
303832
Ah yes. That was rather lazy writing on my part now wasn't it?
Thank you for your input that's something I'll try to avoid in the future.
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304217
You refer, I'm assuming, to the alternate ending?
304343 Yep. If you look above the comment you can see what chapter it was posted for.
Well I liked it, Twilight making a fool of herself, and lots of adorable fluff. Also, dat alternate ending
305768
Thanks for pointing that out.
I just don't know what went wrong!
305243
Oh look you're right.
AH, I love it! Specially the alternate ending
303832
Is that the cliche in question here, though? The way I read the story, I assumed that Pinkie had always returned Twilight's affections (at least, from the point of the story's beginning). I interpreted her initial reluctance as stemming from her believing Twilight was pranking her, not from lack of romantic feelings for Twilight. But perhaps I read the story wrong. I dunno.
I do feel as though the cliff scene was a touch too fast paced and could have benefitted from being expanded, thus allowing Pinkie more time to process everything (first, that it wasn't a prank, and second, that Twilight's in love with her). Overall, though, I thought it was pretty cute. And I especially liked "And I would have to think a moment, just for the dramatic effect," for some reason.
Got a laugh from the alt ending ... though, actually, given that my two fave ships are RainbowPie and TwiPie, I'd love for someone to do a serious take on this. Could be really interesting. Also, I'd love an epilogue where Rainbow Dash tries the same seduction techniques she taught to Twilight on her very own potential "special somepony." (I think it'd be especially funny if that pony turned out to be Applejack or Fluttershy, as I think each of their reactions to the Patented Rainbow Dash Wooing would involve a lot of confusion and hilarious awkwardness.)
315615
) I wish I would have made it clearer though; it was just lazy writing on my part.
It was my intention that Pinkie had also liked Twilight from the beginning, and in the first draft Pinkie alluded to RD having known about her feelings towards Twilight and thus giving the whole "this prank isn't funny" a bit of a sadder twist. But in the end I cut it out because the ending was getting so messy there was no neat way to wrap it up. (So in this draft RD was just clueless I guess
I completely agree with you on the cliff scene. I may go back and revise it later on after a bit of distance.
Rainbow Pie was my first pony ship, but when I started making the transition to Twinkie Pie as my favorite RD didn't want to stay behind. They would make an odd threesome but it has potential to be very interesting if someone could pull it off.
And an AppleDash epilogue... That also has potential for hilarity.
323859
Pinkie liking Twilight from the beginning is how I read the story--in particular, her gentleness with Twi when Twi was screwing everything up seemed to me to indicate that Pinkie was crushing on Twilight too.
Oh, that would have been even sadder! Oh, poor Pinkie ... I shall throw a track on this so I can read the revision. Don't get me wrong, though--I think it's quite good as-is, too.
Also, there's no pressure whatsoever to write an epilogue ... but yes, Rainbow trying her smooth moves on Applejack would probably be the funniest thing ever.
The alternate ending was my favorite part.
Yay for prescription drug writers inspiration!
352214
Gotta admit that it brings a smile to my face every time I see it. Maybe I should take strong medication more often.
352570 No, just be sure to write when you are already on legal drugs.
Because drugs are bad, mkay?
353090
Never you fear for I am a good law abiding little fanfic writer. No illegal substances here.
353412
Glad to hear it. 
388827
Oh man. I love this song.
Funny story: I've actually story boarded a choreographed piece between Pinkie and Twilight to this song. It's such a fun song with great energy that it's easy to visualize a confession type situation for it.
390573
That is objectively awesome. This plan must come to fruition!
391637
It's too bad that I have neither the skills nor the time to do it myself.
392693
Aww, that's such a tease! "Oh, here's the great idea I have ... BUT I'M NOT GONNA DO IT, HA."
Boo!
Who were you thinking would sing to who, by the way? I'd say Pinkie--both as my guess as to who you'd have be the singer, as well as who I myself would choose as the singer.
404056
I know. I know. I'm horrible.
*Now to make it worse*
I chose Pinkie to be the singer for very obvious reasons and then I started storyboarding "River Deep; Mountain High" with Twilight singing to Pinkie because I wanted it to be fair. If only I had talent! Maybe if I have time this summer I'll try to go somewhere with them.
477918
Yeah. This is not one of my best works. But thank you for reading.
And oh that alternate ending...
This is the absolute most ridiculously best thing.
The alternate ending was ridiculous.
To start, in the alternate ending, Pinkie Pie came off as saying "Well I'm not interested in you that way Twilight, but if you include Dashie to sweeten the deal, I'm up for it!" ...so, yeah...the alternate ending just basically turned it into a RainbowPie with a third wheel.
With the original ending, however...the story is very nice, very sweet, and I enjoyed it immensely.
It's spelled "Wooing", not "Whooing".
WHAT?! I mean I’m okay with this whole Twi pie thing but involving dash that seems not right well I guess threesome is going on.
YES! This Counts As Pinkiedash Right?