Forever Pink

by SupaSqueegee

Entries 19-24

Entry Nineteen

Wow, diary! You wouldn’t believe how many ponies showed up to my party last night! It actually got to be so crowded we had to move the party outside. I almost cried when I saw that almost the whole town had showed up! Mayor Mare even managed to organize some ponies to build a fire in the town square. Everypony really missed me. I got to see all my friends! There was lots of eating and drinking and playing and dancing! It was everything I would expect a party to be! The only thing was, I couldn’t find Trixie the whole time. I saw all the rest of my friends! But no Trixie. I asked Twilight about it, and all she did was smile a little and told me that Trixie was waiting for me out by the pond. I thought that was really weird! But I decided to go check it out anyway. I mean, I didn’t know what Trixie was doing down at the pond. I do now! But you don’t. Don’t worry, diary, I’ll tell you. So I went down to the pond and there she was, sure enough. She looked just as amazing as I remembered. She gave me a big hug and told me that she was glad I was back. After that we just kind of stood there, looking out over the water. She seemed really nervous. I told her that I understand, and that she doesn’t have to go out of her way for me. I said ‘Trixie, you won’t lose me as a friend just because I love you and you don’t love me. It’s okay, because I think I can live with it.’ Trixie just smiled at me. And do you know what she did next?! Diary she practically pounced me! Next thing I knew she was kissing me as hard as she could! Whoo! When she finally stopped, and I finally came back down from lala land, we went back to the party. The rest of the night was a blur. I can’t really remember much of any of it! All I remember is spending the whole evening, and then night, with Trixie.

Entry Twenty

This week sure has been hectic, diary! I’ve had to get back in the swing of things with the Cakes, and I’ve been spending even more time with Trixie than normal. And then there’s all the fun things I’ve been doing with my friends! It’s great seeing everyone so happy together. I don’t think I’m the only one with a new special somepony, though. I asked Twilight about it and she just kinda got all quiet and blushy. It was adorable! I hope everything works out for her like it did with me and Trixie. Speaking of which! Tomorrow is going to be our first official date. Rarity is even going out of her way to make us something to wear. She really is a generous pony! I’m so excited. Trixie says she’s going to take me someplace special. I can’t wait!

[Entry Twenty One

Well diary, we went on our date. It was strange, though. Because she didn’t really seem like her normal self. And I didn’t either. We were both kind of somber, at least while we were at Hoofington’s. While we ate she explained a bit more to me about why it had taken her so long to push past her feelings and finally say yes to giving us a shot. She said that over her life she had experienced so much hatred that she had come to believe that all that hatred was justified. While she didn’t really show it on the outside, she was using her ego to cover it up, she really despised herself on the inside. It was terrible. I couldn’t even imagine hating myself! I love being me because being me means that I can make other ponies smile! Anyway, when she was done explaining, she told me that none of that mattered anymore. Because ever since she came back to Ponyville, she’s felt welcome, and loved. She said it was all thanks to me, too. It was so special. I almost started crying again when she told me that she loved me too! It’s crazy, isn’t it diary? How two ponies who seem so completely different can end up together? Know what else, diary? I don’t remember the reason I started writing in you anymore. All I know is that doing this has helped me somehow. Being all analyze-y I think has helped me to slow down a bit and appreciate what’s around me a bit more. Thank you, diary. You’re the best book a girl could ask for.

Entry Twenty Two

To be honest, diary, I completely forgot about you! I guess I should apologize, huh? Soooorrryyyy! There we go. I guess you want some updates since it’s been so long, don’t you? Wow, I wonder how long it’s been. About a year, I’d say. We just got our first snowfall of the year. It’s so pretty outside right now. Right! News, news...okay, so Trixie and I are doing absolutely fantasticalicious! I know, I know. It seems kinda silly to say it, but we are! We moved in together after we had been dating for about four months. That was a big step! But waking up to her snoozing beside me makes it so totally worth it. We still cuddle up on the couch almost every night to talk about our days. Sometimes we don’t talk at all. We’ll drink our tea or cocoa and just hold each other. I never knew I could be still like that for so long! But Trixie is always there to help bring me down from an energy high. She knows me so well it’s almost scary! But that’s okay because I know just as well. All of our friends say that we’re perfect for each other! And I couldn’t agree more. It’s actually really neat that I found you today, diary. Because there’s something you should know. I think Trixie is gonna ask me to marry her tonight! I’m meeting her at the park when she gets off work for a walk, and then we’re gonna go to Hoofington’s for a date! We haven’t been there since we had our first date. And I’ve been getting some really strong vibes from her lately. And don’t think I haven’t noticed all her secret little trips around town talking to everypony! I’m so excited! Well, I need to go start getting ready. Thanks again for listening, diary! I promise it won’t be so long before I talk to you again.

Entry Twenty Three

I always keep my promises, diary! I told you that it wouldn’t be so long before I talked to you again, and it hasn’t! It’s only been about two months! But guess what? She totally asked me to marry her, just like I thought! The past two months have been crazy busy since then! We’ve been working so hard getting everything ready for the wedding. I can hardly believe that this is happening. The date is set for next month. All of our friends are showing up. Even Princess Celestia and Princess Luna are coming! It’s gonna be so amazing. I must be the luckiest mare ever! Well diary, I think this might be the last time I write in you for a while. Twilight told me a long time ago, when she gave you to me, that you would help. And you have! And looking back and reading everything I’ve written, I realized that you’re not a diary so much as a story about Trixie and me. And what’s a good love story without a happy ending? So wish me luck for my big day! Goodbye, diary. It’s been lots of fun!

Final Entry

It’s funny that I found you again. Just yesterday I was telling Trixie about how I kept a diary from right before we just met up to the point of our wedding. I guess you got packed up and forgotten about. I couldn’t help but give a big smile as I was reading you, though. It all seems like so long ago, but at the same time, I feel like everything could have happened yesterday. It’s been about ten years, diary. I know, that’s a long time. I still can’t believe that I’m a middle aged mare! It’s strange, looking back on things now. How friendships can drift and change, how bonds that were forged in steel can warp but never break. I don’t see my friends as much anymore. And sometimes that makes me sad, but I know that we each have our own lives we’re trying to live. Our own families that we love and cherish. We still all get to together at least once a month. Sometimes it’s just the six of us, but other times we bring our families for a big picnic. Those moments are some of the happiest in my life. The rest of my happiness goes to my beautiful wife, though. Trixie has been an angel. I’m not saying everything has been perfect all these years. Quite the opposite, in fact. We’ve had our low points. We’ve had our fights. But our love is true, and so we’ve always managed to make it back. All in all, we’re both happy. I still remember that first day I looked at her in a new light, from across Sugarcube Corner, and realized that I liked her. I still get those butterflies sometimes. When she says something really sweet, or when she surprises me with a kiss. Sometimes it’s hard to believe that this is my life. I have everything I could ever want and more. And, strange enough, diary, you’ve been there through one of the biggest adventures of my life. Granted, I’ve had quite a few. Over the years my friends and I have had to face many dangers. The Elements of Harmony could not have picked a better equipped group of girls, I think. But my greatest adventure will always be the one I had with Trixie. Discovering love changed my life in so many ways. The greatest of which was that I was finally able to look at myself in the mirror and know a type of happiness I had only once dreamed about. The happiness of completion. That’s right, diary, I said something cheesy. But come on, this is Pinkie Pie that’s writing in you! I think I’m allowed a little cheese once in awhile. Thank you for listening to me, and thank you for holding this story for so long. If there’s one bit of wisdom this silly pink mare can impart before she sets down her pen, it’s this. The true light of happiness can sometimes be shrouded in the darkest of places. But that doesn’t mean it isn’t there. If you don’t strive for it, and hope for it, and long for it, you’ll never reach it. If you do find that light, then cling to it and never let it go. Because the wings it gives your heart will help you soar forever.

Goodbye, diary. And thank you again.

Author's Note:

Now that was a crazy ride! I hope everyone enjoyed this first part of my series 'Diaries Six'. I wonder if, instead of doing them all as separate stories, if I should just combine them into one? What do you guys think? Again, thanks for reading and commenting and stuff! Love you guys. :)

Comments

[RTStephens]

The sugary sweetness of this story is giving me cavities!

A sweet little look in the day-in-the-life of one pony and her special somepony. I enjoyed it and heartily give it a thumbs up!

[Soft Shell]

You know what isnt fair?
Nightmare Moon, who attempted to plunge the world into eternal darkness,
Friendship beam and boom she is forgiven.
Discord, Embodyment of chaos itseslf, who ruled over equestria for 1000 years of pain and turmoil.
Well fluttershy likes him so he is forgiven.
King Sobra who tormented one city, and ruled with an iron fist,
Well he should get a second chance too right?
Nope Magic love blast destroys him.

[HaoKyruss]

This was really heartwarming

[The Derider]

3424556 Given the choice between readability and believability, I'd stick with the former every time. The suspension people of disbelief people employ for a good story is incredible. :)

[SupaSqueegee]

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I think you might be right. I'll edit it when I have a chance. Other than the paragraph spacing, what did you think?

[Delicious]

I very much liked this- enough that I'm eager to read the rest of the series when they come out.

[The Derider]

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Reading through it now, so the notes may not be the most organized.

So, basically this story is entirely predicated around the opposite of "Show don't tell" and is going to be harder to work with as a result. The problem I'm having going through it is that there are interesting things that are happening, but not much in the way of detail. Without it, I feel like I'm missing something through the format rather than gaining. I'm not exactly sure how to work with that, other than to try expanding each entry. You can do pretty much whatever you want with the format, since people will accept it as Pinkie Pie being Pinkie Pie, which is a nice freedom. If you want to do a straight up prose section, you absolutely can.

If I'm being totally honest, this feels like a sidestory to a fic about Trixie (that's not in and of itself a bad thing), but I'm actually very interested in what that fic might be.

The lack of a clear timeline is difficult too - a quick bit of dating by each entry number might help.

Your voice for Pinkie is well done, hyper without being annoying to read. I'm a bit confused about her motivation though. She's not proactive with Trixie, which feels very counter to the character as I understand her, and makes for a bit of a less dynamic read.

You mentioned at the end of the last chapter that "Diaries Six" was your intended format, which I didn't realize as I was reading through and writing these suggestions. Why not do the all six diaries, but combine them story-wise so they're happening concurrently? There's a lot of fun to be had in that.

I think there are good ideas here, but it really does feel more like an outline or side-story to the story itself. I hope to see this expanded in some way. Sorry for the long post!

[SupaSqueegee]

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I'm glad you made such a long post! Because you actually touched on many of my own ideas. For one, the reason I wrote this the way I did is because I'm trying something new. The general outline of the story is there, but a lot is left out. First and foremost is because it is set up like diary entries. Not every single detail of the events unfolding are gonna touched upon. Another reason is because I like the idea of my readers knowing the broad scale of what's happening, but not the finer points. It leaves a lot to the imagination, which leaves it open to a broad range of reader interpretation. Each reader could very well have their own idea about what's happening. Which I love.

Later I might come back, once the other fives diaries are done, and write out the whole story in a narrative.

The reasoning behind the timeline being as it is is because of what I mentioned in the first paragraph; reader interpretation. It's actually a lot of fun, if you think about it. The rest of the journals will be done the same.

About Pinkie being proactive...that part I can actually really understand. The way I was playing her character in this is one of her being new to the concept of relationships. Unsure and wary. Especially when Trixie initially turns her down. She's not entirely inactive in this, but is spurned early on. Which initially forces her into a spiral of self doubt, which she is known to have.

As for putting them altogether as one story happening simultaneously...that's something I've been thinking about. I very well might do that once I finish the series. It's an interesting concept, to be sure.

Thanks for reading, though! I really hope you enjoyed it. And I hope you read the following parts of the series! I've already got a good idea for the next step, and I think you'll be surprised. Rare ships ahead! I like trying things not many people have done before. :)

[Fervidor]

That was a very cute little love story. Definitely deserves a place in my favorites.

Regarding the rest of the series, I suggest you keep this the way it is. There's nothing wrong with having multiple installments - especially not if the others will focus on other characters. More importantly making them one fic will require you to either expand this one or take it down so you can repost it as part of a larger story. I'd rather just keep this one like this, and see where you're going with the rest as you write them.

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Personally, I like how most of the story is implied - it makes you use your imagination to fill in the blanks while keeping the story fairly short and easy to digest. I thought that was the real charm about it fic.

[Magical Trevor]

3424906 Noooo! You have fallen to the Espurr! I SHALL SAVE THEE!

Wow, that was pretty good! Can't believe no one has done a Pixie ship before! (Especially since Pixie stixs are, like, the BEST! Especially the Blue Raspberry and Grape ones, those are the bestest!)

[Mafnar]

Awww, this story was so cute. I have to favorize it immediately

[Ink Script]

This story has strength in that it is compelling in its ambition. Pinkie makes for a challenging narrator through her diary entries, and curiosity comes with the unlikely situation that is the pairing of her and Trixie. While the narration style is handled believably, the story suffers when it comes time to deliver on the exotic premise because of issues in the areas of characterization and conflict.

Characterization in this story is serviceable when it comes to voice. However, I was not as convinced when it came to certain aspects of the characters. The revelation that Pinkie is somewhat seasoned in romance is unexpected given her canonically hyperactive, immature nature. Perhaps more unexpected is Trixie appearing in the road, thoroughly depressed over her past actions and desperate to make amends. This is all not to say that these things are not possible, but rather, are unexpected enough to warrant some amount of development or build-up.

The area that I mostly want to focus on is the area of conflict in the story. The elephant in the room is Trixie’s reappearance in Ponyville, and while it would not be wholly believable for her to run into open hostility there, she seems to be accepted too easily in this instance. After the welcome party, then, it seems as though the conflict is coming within the foreshadowed relationship, and while conflict does come, it does not come as strongly as it could. There is a risk, that if Pinkie tries to pursue a romance she may endanger a friendship. This risk is not able to build tension, however, because (1) it is apparent early on that Trixie would like to get closer to Pinkie, and (2) Pinkie eventually accepts that she might only have a friend in Trixie anyways. Considering the above, the victory of the story comes off as a bit hollow.

[the wind in the air]

my heart... it feels....weird, like,.... like it hurts?
and what this liquid coming from my eyes?
huh....weird?