It's obvious that, on occasion, Solar Princess Celestia is going to get a little... wound up in her line of work. Usually when that happens, she'll recline back in her seat and read a good book while drinking some tea. But sometimes, tea just doesn't cut it.
Sometimes, she needs a little bit of Joe.
Celestia hides her nightly visits with Joe from Luna, but as she should know, you can't keep a secret from a little sister.
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Well that was definitely interesting. I was slightly expecting the twist after hearing about what was in Celestia's dream, but that fact aside, I actually rather enjoyed this story. Also:
I'm laughing so hard from this one line, and I have no idea why.
-SoI
Loved Luna in this!
Goes to show that Luna is horribly out of date with just about everything in society
Luna can be a bit of a butthead, this is true.
(Thy tale didst amuse us, humorous scribe. Even if it 'twas at Our expense.)
(Oh, lighten up, Lulu.)
One thing I do need to point out, though:
Whenever you have dialogue followed by an attribution of who said it and how, you end the character's dialogue with a comma, not a period, and you do not capitalize the next word after the closing quote mark unless it is the character's name. Basically, you capitalize and punctuate as though the whole thing is a single sentence. Examples:
The parts in green are attributions of who said the dialogue and how, along with simultaneous actions which the speaker is doing at the same time they're speaking. So, in the first example, you treat the whole thing as a single sentence, and where the dialogue would normally end with a period, you put a comma instead. (If the dialogue ends with a ? or !, as in the 2nd and 3rd examples, then you end it with the appropriate mark, but still treat it as a single sentence and don't capitalize the first word following the closing quote mark unless it's a proper name.)
Now, if what follows a line of dialogue is not an attribution, but a separate action which occurs after the words are spoken, then you do end with a period and capitalize the next word. These, you got right:
The part in green constitutes a separate action from the preceding dialogue, rather than a concurrent action or attribution as the words are being said, so – yes, treat as a separate sentence.