"Welcome to the world of Pokemon. Your very own Pokemon legend is about to unfold. A world of dreams and adventures with Pokemon awaits! So long and good luck. I hope your journey is full of surprises."
-Oak's intro
Twilight Sparkle is now sixteen and leaving Canterlot to begin her own Pokemon journey.
First fanfiction!
...Wouldn't this fit more in line with a game crossover..Since this is a crossover with the games, not the anime?
3248688 You make a point. Guess I'll have to consider it
Not bad. You need to space though, nothing is more infuriating to read than a wall of text. Do you have an editor? If not, then I recommend getting one. They can offer insight from another perspective and help with any grammar mistakes too.
- Twilight was in the middle of a enormous arena. She couldn’t see crowd, but she sure could hear them -
You need to a 'the' in between 'see' and 'crowd'
- “And thats a wrap folks! -
Change thats to that's. You are shortening that is to that's, so it requires a comma.
Best of luck with future updates. Though I'm super busy with my own work, I like the idea for this one and if you need a hand, just give me a shout.
I am adding this to my read later list based on premise alone.
EDIT: Read, and boy does this need faving! Not sure what's up with Spike the Axew being the size of an Ursaring, but hey!
More please!
i really like this story is there going to be more???