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"What, you cant hang out tonight?"

"Sorry Rainbow, I have an appointment to get to."

"Well......alright, just be careful, ok?"

"Dont worry Rainbow, what could possibly go wrong?"

This is the sequel to my other story Dashing Hearts, if you haven't read it then this story wont make much sense.

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Did you just parody Robert Frost?...

3230606I don't even know who that is. Thanks?

3233299 Poem reminded me of this:

Stopping By The Woods On a Snowy Evening - Robert Frost

Whose woods these are I think I know.
His house is in the village though;
He will not see me stopping here
To watch his woods fill up with snow.

My little horse must think it queer
To stop without a farmhouse near
Between the woods and frozen lake
The darkest evening of the year.

He gives his harness bells a shake
To ask if there is some mistake.
The only other sound's the sweep
Of easy wind and downy flake.

The woods are lovely, dark and deep.
But I have promises to keep,
And miles to go before I sleep,
And miles to go before I sleep.

3233451Oh duh I'm such an idiot. I compleat my forgot he wrote that poem. Yes I did copy it but I had to make some changes so that it fit with the world. Thanks for noticing

There were some spelling and grammar errors. Other than that it was pretty good

not wanting to seem rube but this is kind of a how,,, well how do i describe myself?: ABSOLUTE SHIT SEQUEL :flutterrage: like wath the fuck??!! it`s almost like you did it like this; and then they were in a triangle of relationships and then they all lived happily ever after ! :facehoof: just so you know i didn`t dislike

3238483Lol well I'm glad you didn't dislike. But I felt like I lost conflict with the story so I went with a more actiony story to illustrate that love can concur all, but sometimes we need to suffer to make that happen. :)

3242643 ok then well..... i hate it when this happens. this is me when i instantly loses a conversation :ajbemused: well ok then but just becuse it was a good story overall i`m gonna give it a thumbs up :ajsmug:

the story was meh. nothing too great. the love triangle thing was kinda of a bad idea but whatever. i still prefer dashing hearts tbh, one of your better works. i see you wanted to add action bu you should have taken your time with it. also placing Cain like in a graver state and have rainbow worry about him and act mopey would have been a good idea. but overall its an okay story but i wouldn't call it exactly a sequel. anyways wish you the best and thank you for the great story. :twilightsmile:

3530867 Herd all the way man, herds all the way.

Only rainbows after rain.

That brought a tear to my eye. Just how right that school mare was in the beginning.

Oh-my-god.
I really, REALLY liked dashing hearts, but this... It'd be better just to forget about this and never talk about it again. Any chance of writing, you know, true sequel of dashing hearts? :fluttercry:

Hmm...
Like it but...
I need a real sequel, for my hunger is to much for something as this.
I feel this be the appetizer to a real meal, or so my heart desires.


~OreoKookie

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