Twilight Velvet, in her time a famed romance novelist, visits her daughter in Ponyville to finish her latest work. Will her romantic encounters give her the inspiration she needs?
excellent work... many sheets were ruined because of this fic, I spent half my work check at BB&B and it's all thanks you. this fic has been McLovin approved.
Honestly, I liked this till you tried to get all cute and make this an adventure fic. Then it became terrible, especially the chapter prior to the epilogue.
Still, the first couple chapters were fun so keep your upvote.
The power infusion from Shining Armor and Cadence then enabled your mother to activate the Elements, bringing an entirely new Element into existence for a brief time, the Element of Passion.
Deus Ex Machina Deus Ex Machina Deus Ex Machina Seether00 is smart BTW, hr sums up what I was going to say
2993860 Terrible's a bit strong, I think, but the basic idea..yeah, bringing in an impending war and changelings and all might not have been the best choice. Felt like a distinct downturn in the story.
Like people below, I agree the war thing came quite out from the blue and it wasn't really doing any favors to the story. Bait and switch, though it didn't bother me too much in the end.
This is now one of my favorite clopfics. Every smut scene was different to keep it fresh, yet it didn't wander too far off with fetishes. Not to mention they were well written. Also bonus points for sparity.
Well, sometimes you gotta try some things and take some risks. Sometimes it works, sometimes it doesn't. I don't hold it against anyone who didn't like the war and hope you still enjoyed the first half of the story. Maybe the exchange between Celstia and Chrysalis was funny enough to make up for it a little bit. So there was at least a little pay-off.
2993883 The Elements of Harmony are a Deus Ex Machina by definition. If Lauren Faust can get away with it, cut me some slack.
Also Imago did give her the instruction to strip in advance, that's why he only had to say "Do it" and she knew what he meant. Maybe that wasn't clear enough.
I've been asked whether there will be a sequel and the answer is 'no' for now. Right now I'm gonna take a little break, let the story sit here for a while and then see where I can make some improvements based on the comments I've gotten with fresh eyes in a week or so.
I've got a couple of ideas for one-shots, some connected to this story and some that will stand on their own. But that's for the future.
So thank you everyone who read, enjoyed and commented on my first MLP clopfic. It's been a pleasure and I love you all.
Nopony is even disgusted by everypony she did? Big Mac, Lotus, Spike, Thunderlane and Snowflake, Pinkie Pie and 8 Diamond Dogs? It doesn't bother Big Mac in the least to have fucked a married mare?
It was found out that everypony was affected in some way shape or form, which coincidentally happened after Princess Celestia and the Elements left town to "fight" the Changelings. And the Elements had to temporarily possess new forms for it to still work. Plus, to paraphrase Big Mac, it doesn't even matter who Velvet did or what she did, that's ultimately none of anypony's business. I bet at least half of Ponyville have some skeletons in the closet that they don't want to reveal either.
And to the people complaining about the whole Deus Ex Machina thing: you're in the wrong fandom. MLP is chock-full of them, from the Elements of Harmony, to the Crystal Heart.
This has been a fun ride, and I look forward to what you'll come up with next, Ranko.
Anyone else think Twister right off the bat? Loved this story, start to finish. Look out NaughyRanko, you have earned yourself another stalker and I demand moar from you soon!
....twilight velvet in the crystal empire, oh god. love the story and i cant wait for the sequel, i see sombra in the future, or atleast someone possessed by him
2994074 First of all; Chapters 1-12 and the squeal in one sitting. I just could not stop reading. Good job, Thank you for the story, on both of them,
It was a very fun read and I was glad I stumbled on to it. IT was almost over the top hilarity wrapped in a thrill of an unknown mystery. Now dose that even make scenes? The changeling Prince was a really nice touch got to love that hate angle. Then the ending with the board game Priceless.
The squeal was just as funny as well. welcome to fav # 111 and 112
Thank you for writing this and it squeal Good luck, Best wish
OH THANK GOD THEY WERE JUST PLAYING TWISTER. Even though the "Love and Tolerate" thing kind of rubbed me the wrong way, I guess this turned out alright. Curious to see how the sequel works out now.
I should have finished this story sooner you ended up wrapping it up so much better than expected it was very well done.
I rate this:/
That means is very good although you lost a ()mustache because the writing wasn't consistently as focused as the ending which just speaks for quality not content.
Haha...
Nice ending. All in all, a VERY fun read indeed.
Well done, man. I applaud you.
~Skeeter The Lurker
lawl loved the ending.
great ending and story
Now that was enjoyable.
This story was an awesome read! TAKE ALL THE STASHES!
loved it, read it again, loved it the second time through.
WRITE MOAR!
excellent work... many sheets were ruined because of this fic, I spent half my work check at BB&B and it's all thanks you. this fic has been McLovin approved.
Honestly, I liked this till you tried to get all cute and make this an adventure fic. Then it became terrible, especially the chapter prior to the epilogue.
Still, the first couple chapters were fun so keep your upvote.
Deus Ex Machina
Deus Ex Machina
Deus Ex Machina
Seether00 is smart BTW, hr sums up what I was going to say
2993860 Terrible's a bit strong, I think, but the basic idea..yeah, bringing in an impending war and changelings and all might not have been the best choice. Felt like a distinct downturn in the story.
Like people below, I agree the war thing came quite out from the blue and it wasn't really doing any favors to the story. Bait and switch, though it didn't bother me too much in the end.
This is now one of my favorite clopfics. Every smut scene was different to keep it fresh, yet it didn't wander too far off with fetishes. Not to mention they were well written. Also bonus points for sparity.
Well, sometimes you gotta try some things and take some risks. Sometimes it works, sometimes it doesn't. I don't hold it against anyone who didn't like the war and hope you still enjoyed the first half of the story. Maybe the exchange between Celstia and Chrysalis was funny enough to make up for it a little bit. So there was at least a little pay-off.
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The Elements of Harmony are a Deus Ex Machina by definition. If Lauren Faust can get away with it, cut me some slack.
Also Imago did give her the instruction to strip in advance, that's why he only had to say "Do it" and she knew what he meant. Maybe that wasn't clear enough.
I've been asked whether there will be a sequel and the answer is 'no' for now. Right now I'm gonna take a little break, let the story sit here for a while and then see where I can make some improvements based on the comments I've gotten with fresh eyes in a week or so.
I've got a couple of ideas for one-shots, some connected to this story and some that will stand on their own. But that's for the future.
So thank you everyone who read, enjoyed and commented on my first MLP clopfic. It's been a pleasure and I love you all.
Hehe, that ending made me snicker.
Nopony is even disgusted by everypony she did? Big Mac, Lotus, Spike, Thunderlane and Snowflake, Pinkie Pie and 8 Diamond Dogs? It doesn't bother Big Mac in the least to have fucked a married mare?
that last scene..........you took my hopes and dashed them sir..................
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It was found out that everypony was affected in some way shape or form, which coincidentally happened after Princess Celestia and the Elements left town to "fight" the Changelings. And the Elements had to temporarily possess new forms for it to still work. Plus, to paraphrase Big Mac, it doesn't even matter who Velvet did or what she did, that's ultimately none of anypony's business. I bet at least half of Ponyville have some skeletons in the closet that they don't want to reveal either.
TL/DR: Hell no, I'm not disgusted!!
Well, it was an interesting ride.
Wonder what comes next?
Maybe Night Light has some 'adventures' of his own?
Well, can't say I was expecting that ending.
And to the people complaining about the whole Deus Ex Machina thing: you're in the wrong fandom. MLP is chock-full of them, from the Elements of Harmony, to the Crystal Heart.
This has been a fun ride, and I look forward to what you'll come up with next, Ranko.
Okay, this was good. :D No issues, I really liked it.
forginess!!!!
Anyone else think Twister right off the bat? Loved this story, start to finish. Look out NaughyRanko, you have earned yourself another stalker and I demand moar from you soon!
....twilight velvet in the crystal empire, oh god. love the story and i cant wait for the sequel, i see sombra in the future, or atleast someone possessed by him
Look out everyone, tropes are present!
Well, that sure was an ending. I guess.
That was some serious bull. But you explained it well enough that I will just accept it.
Or maybe I've had enough coffee...
In need of a sequel.
2994074 First of all; Chapters 1-12 and the squeal in one sitting.
I just could not stop reading.
Good job, Thank you for the story, on both of them,
It was a very fun read and I was glad I stumbled on to it.
IT was almost over the top hilarity wrapped in a thrill of an unknown mystery. Now dose that even make scenes?
The changeling Prince was a really nice touch got to love that hate angle.
Then the ending with the board game Priceless.
The squeal was just as funny as well.
welcome to fav # 111 and 112
Thank you for writing this and it squeal
Good luck, Best wish
2994074 "War."
More like "Hey. Hey lady. Lady. Hey. Hey, lady. Hey, hey! Lady. Lady. Lady. Lady. Hey, Lady. Have you seen this shapeshifter?"
That doesn't mean I didn't love the fk outta this, though. xP
OH THANK GOD THEY WERE JUST PLAYING TWISTER.
Even though the "Love and Tolerate" thing kind of rubbed me the wrong way, I guess this turned out alright. Curious to see how the sequel works out now.
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there's a sequel!
*fapping intensifies*
Trolololololo-lololo-lolo
I should have finished this story sooner you ended up wrapping it up so much better than expected it was very well done.
I rate this:/
That means is very good although you lost a ()mustache because the writing wasn't consistently as focused as the ending which just speaks for quality not content.
You nailed the content.
She got off too easy